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FOLN@NFan · 02-12-2004, 07:08 PM

im writing a seinfeld story (long story there), and i need 2 fill in 3 blanks.

[Kramer and george are walking down the street, and george is tired]
Kramer: Aww, quit complaining. Look, there's a pie stand. I'll buy one for us.
George[mutters an insult]: ___________________________

[Kramer just burst into Jerry's apartment]
George: Who was that on the phone, Jerry?
Jerry: Elaine...she's going back to school.
Kramer: Who cares about that! Guess what I heard?
George[insults]: _____________________________

and at the ending, the entire gang is arguing about something stupid. the ending credit scene has newman doing that something stupid. so should i just end the actual ep w/ the gang arguing, or should i make one line just before the actual ep. ends?

thanks

Brian Damage · 02-12-2004, 08:44 PM

I,m a little to alot confused. I guess I would have to read the actual story to get a feel to it.

Maestro · 02-12-2004, 08:55 PM

In the woven together sein-style it's kind of hard to compose decent dialog when it's taken out of context, without the layers of the rest of the ep.

sinatrastar · 02-13-2004, 01:09 PM

1. George muttering "you buy me something ... that would be a first"
or "a pie stand in the city, I wouldnt touch them, what flavor are they, smogberry?"

2. "That it was impolite to interupt when someone else is SPEAKING!?" He gets progressively louder until he is shouting.

3. I have no idea

02-12-2004, 07:08 PM	#1
FOLN@NFan Member Forum Regular Join Date: Jan 27, 2001 Location: PA Posts: 706	Need some help... im writing a seinfeld story (long story there), and i need 2 fill in 3 blanks. [Kramer and george are walking down the street, and george is tired] Kramer: Aww, quit complaining. Look, there's a pie stand. I'll buy one for us. George[mutters an insult]: ___________________________ [Kramer just burst into Jerry's apartment] George: Who was that on the phone, Jerry? Jerry: Elaine...she's going back to school. Kramer: Who cares about that! Guess what I heard? George[insults]: _____________________________ and at the ending, the entire gang is arguing about something stupid. the ending credit scene has newman doing that something stupid. so should i just end the actual ep w/ the gang arguing, or should i make one line just before the actual ep. ends? thanks

02-13-2004, 01:09 PM	#4
sinatrastar Indian Summer Forum Veteran Join Date: Jul 22, 2003 Location: 78 W 86th St. Apt 3E Posts: 6,027	I'll try to help: 1. George muttering "you buy me something ... that would be a first" or "a pie stand in the city, I wouldnt touch them, what flavor are they, smogberry?" 2. "That it was impolite to interupt when someone else is SPEAKING!?" He gets progressively louder until he is shouting. 3. I have no idea

02-12-2004, 08:44 PM	#2
Brian Damage I'm Rich Bitch Forum Icon Join Date: Feb 03, 2002 Location: What Ain't No Country I Ever Heard Of...They Speak English in What? Posts: 63,107	I,m a little to alot confused. I guess I would have to read the actual story to get a feel to it.

02-12-2004, 08:55 PM	#3
Maestro Hipster Dufus Senior Member Join Date: May 31, 2002 Location: Below the equator Posts: 2,905	In the woven together sein-style it's kind of hard to compose decent dialog when it's taken out of context, without the layers of the rest of the ep.