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Tazdevil31389 · 10-02-2003, 08:10 PM

Okay, Tell me what you think of this. It's just a prologue, so give me your thoughts on whether or not I should continue.

Prologue
Blood.Blood everywhere. The man gasped one last time as he fell over, dead. There were five men all together, all of them dismembered in some way. The alley right behind Anchorside had now become a butchershop.
The monster roared as loud as it possible could. It had to get out of there, fast. In the back of it's mind, it knew of only one place it could get to. It didn't know why that place felt so familiar, but it took off, leaving a S.F.P.D badge long behind.....

Magda laid in bed, reading Stephen White's Cold Case. Gabe was out of town touring again while Ben was visiting his grandma.Just as she was about to fall a sleep,she heard a loud bang and crash. Frightened, she got out of bed and grabbed her gun.
Madga practically ran down the steps, not even thinking about how many attackers there could be or where they would be in the house. As she ran down the last step, she saw a figure in the dark corner of the kitchen with its hands on each of the walls. "Freeze!!!" Magda screamed. The figure turned around slowly, scaring the hell out of Magda in the process.
The figure looked like an overgrown vivicious dog, a werewolf, to be more exact. Magda dropped her gun, looking at the wolf with shock and fear. Suddenly, the wolf screamed and held it's head with its hands. It moved around and jerked violently, yelling and shouting. Magda, stunned be what was happening, fell over.
The werewolf started changing. it's dark, long hands started turning soft and normal. The hair from its head and back started to go away and the hair to its normal length. It's arms and legs became shorter and more distinct. The monster shouted and pain as it's face became more recognizable. The screams started to sound less like a monsters and more like a woman's.
Magda looked in horror as she immediatly recognized the woman."Jinny?!" asked a horrified Magda.
Jinny looked in pain. She had cuts and bruises everywhere. But she also looked more built and muscular. Jinny breathed slowly as she looked at Magda. "Mag.....hel.......me," Jinny gasped as she fell to the floor, unconcious. Magda ran over to her friend. She turned Jinny over and put her head on her chest to make sure she was still breathing. Magda immediatly got the phone and the kitchen and dialed 911. "Hello? I have an emergency! My friend has been attacked! I need you guys now!" Magda shouted into the phone. As Magda told the operator her address, she looked at Jinny, who was still unconcious.
When Magda hung up, she kneeled by Jinny's side. "God Jinny, what did you do? What did you do?"

This was just an idea of what I had in mind? Thoughts, anyone?

MovieHuntress17 · 10-02-2003, 08:43 PM

very...very interesting lol...post more soon

*Nancy Mckeon* · 10-04-2003, 08:54 PM

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10-02-2003, 08:10 PM	#1
Tazdevil31389 Member Occasional Poster Join Date: Dec 24, 2001 Location: Virginia Posts: 19	The Beast Within- A new Fan Fic Okay, Tell me what you think of this. It's just a prologue, so give me your thoughts on whether or not I should continue. Prologue Blood.Blood everywhere. The man gasped one last time as he fell over, dead. There were five men all together, all of them dismembered in some way. The alley right behind Anchorside had now become a butchershop. The monster roared as loud as it possible could. It had to get out of there, fast. In the back of it's mind, it knew of only one place it could get to. It didn't know why that place felt so familiar, but it took off, leaving a S.F.P.D badge long behind..... Magda laid in bed, reading Stephen White's Cold Case. Gabe was out of town touring again while Ben was visiting his grandma.Just as she was about to fall a sleep,she heard a loud bang and crash. Frightened, she got out of bed and grabbed her gun. Madga practically ran down the steps, not even thinking about how many attackers there could be or where they would be in the house. As she ran down the last step, she saw a figure in the dark corner of the kitchen with its hands on each of the walls. "Freeze!!!" Magda screamed. The figure turned around slowly, scaring the hell out of Magda in the process. The figure looked like an overgrown vivicious dog, a werewolf, to be more exact. Magda dropped her gun, looking at the wolf with shock and fear. Suddenly, the wolf screamed and held it's head with its hands. It moved around and jerked violently, yelling and shouting. Magda, stunned be what was happening, fell over. The werewolf started changing. it's dark, long hands started turning soft and normal. The hair from its head and back started to go away and the hair to its normal length. It's arms and legs became shorter and more distinct. The monster shouted and pain as it's face became more recognizable. The screams started to sound less like a monsters and more like a woman's. Magda looked in horror as she immediatly recognized the woman."Jinny?!" asked a horrified Magda. Jinny looked in pain. She had cuts and bruises everywhere. But she also looked more built and muscular. Jinny breathed slowly as she looked at Magda. "Mag.....hel.......me," Jinny gasped as she fell to the floor, unconcious. Magda ran over to her friend. She turned Jinny over and put her head on her chest to make sure she was still breathing. Magda immediatly got the phone and the kitchen and dialed 911. "Hello? I have an emergency! My friend has been attacked! I need you guys now!" Magda shouted into the phone. As Magda told the operator her address, she looked at Jinny, who was still unconcious. When Magda hung up, she kneeled by Jinny's side. "God Jinny, what did you do? What did you do?" This was just an idea of what I had in mind? Thoughts, anyone?

10-02-2003, 08:43 PM	#2
MovieHuntress17 #1 Actress ever Forum Regular Join Date: Oct 28, 2002 Location: "Over yonder" Posts: 886	very...very interesting lol...post more soon
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10-04-2003, 08:54 PM	#3
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