"Raina cracks up."

[Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan]

WRITER NOTE: This is my new fan-fic. It gets better as it goes along. So, please hang with me. lol!
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Raina sat on a stool at "Anchor-Side Bar and Grill." She seemed to be waitng for someting. Then, Jinny and Magda walked in.
"Where is she?" Jinny asked, looking around the busy resturant, which was always busy on Friday nights.
"There she is!" Replyed Jinny's partner in crime, Magda. The two cops walked over to the other cop and sat down on both sides of her.
"Spill." Magda said.
"What?"
"Oh, come on!" Jinny said back. "You had to invite down here for SOMETHING!"
"Well, I didn't. I just wanted to-" But before Raina could finish, Magda's cell phone rang. She dug it out of her purse, turned it on and put it to her ear.
"Magda." A few minutes later, she hung up. "That was Cap. She said to get to 13th street on the double." She walked out, follwed by Raina, then Jinny who said: "I LOVE this job!"

You'll find out later why it's called "Raina cracks up." But what do you think so far? Good or bad. Please reply.

[JDS84]

I like it

[#1_Nancy_McKeon]

Thanks for the message. Come on... keep going. :-p Good job so far.

[jinnygirl2005]

It's good keep going sorry it took me so long to responde I have not had a good week


POST!!!

[MovieHuntress17]

<----- Me sitting at my computer waiting 4 u 2 post more.

[Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan]

Originally posted by MovieHuntress17
<----- Me sitting at my computer waiting 4 u 2 post more.

Thanks, moviehuntress17! Glad you like it! I just posted the next part to "Kidnapped" so, I guess I'll be nice and post the next part to this one. lol!

"Thank God!" Kate said, walking over to Magda, Jinny, and Raina.
"What's going on?" Jinny asked, looking at the house behind her Boss. Police men and women were going this way and that.
"Murder." Cap. replyed. "Two little girls. Twins about 10-years-old." She handed the women pictures of the victims.
"Parents?" Magda asked, looking at hers.
"Don't know. Baby-sitter said she found the girls laying around. One in the closet. Other: under he bed."

As Capatin Kate said this, Raina was looking at one of the officers. He winked at her. She smiled.
"Excuse me." Raina said, after Cap. was doen talking. She walked to the cop. "Hi. My names Raina." She extended her hand.
"Luke. Luke Dash." He exstended his own. They shook hands, gazing into each others eyes.
Kate saw the whole thing.
"Well." She said, turning back to Jinny and Magda.
"Why is she flirting at a crime scene?" Asked Jinny, sounding very upset.
"Don't worry." Magda replyed, patting Jinny on the back. "You'll get your turn at love."
"I don't know. Ever since Teddy and I broke up-" Jinny didn't finish the sentence. She walked away, crying.

Now, if your saying 'Jinny and Theodore broke up?!' I have a plan. It'll come later in the story. That's it for now.
I welcome any feed-back. I would like to know what you guys think.

-Brandon

[*Nancy Mckeon*]

"Ever since me and Teddy broke up"

awww, she misses him,i hope they get back together again. By the way why did Raina invite Jin and Mag to anchorside?

i think its great, you should deffinetly (sp) post more

Can't wait to se you doing this again ~~ :

[MovieHuntress17]

I think iz good, can't wait 2 find out wut ur plan is lol

[JDS84]

Keep up the great work

[Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan]

Originally posted by JDS84
Keep up the great work

Thanks! This part is SO good (I think it is anyway.) lol! Hope you think it's good as well!

Jinny walked into her house, crying. She took off her jacket, and threw it on the floor, then she walked back to her bed room.

A few minutes later, Jinny fell asleep, but was instantly woken by the sound of a closing door. Thining it was a robber, Jinny got up, got her gun and went to where she heard the noise: the kitchen.
When she got to the kitchen, Jinny looked around very slowly for any find of movement, and heard foot steps!
Her fingers trembling from fright, Jinny turned away, and pulled the trigger. A BOM was heard, follwed by the body hitting the floor. Crying, Jinny turned on the light, ran over to the body, and turned it over. She got she shock of her life.
Laying on the floor, bleeding to deat was... Theodore!

My plan is developing. Will post more soon. Feed back welcome.

[jinnygirl2005]

[Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan]

Sorry I haven't posted in a few. It's just that I was so busy with my other new fan-fic. (House on Haunted Hill <The Divsion style>) that I forgot about this one. Anyways, here's the next part.

Angela, C.D, and Magda were sitting at there desk, when Raina walked in, with a big smile on her face.
"Hi." She said, cheerful.
"How was your date last night with Luke?" Magda asked.
"Isn't it abvious?" Replyed Angela. "They slept together!"
"We did NOT!" Raina protested.
"Then why does it look like you slept with a hanger in your mouth?' C.D joked.
Raina was about to say something back, when Kate opened the door to her office.
"Raina." She said. "May I speak to you?"
Confused, Raina went into Caps. office, and sat down in a chair, while Cap. sat on the egde of her desk, closer to Raina.
"I need to talk to you about something" Cap. said. "About you and Luke."
Outside in The Division, everybody was going on about there business, when Jinny walked in, her eyes puffy and red. She walked to Magda's desk.
"Mag." Jinny said. "I need to talk to you." She took Magda's hand, and they left the room.
They walked into the girls bathroom, and Jinny looked under the stalls, faced Magda, and said.
"I shot Theodore!"

KATE'S OFFICE

"Why are you so concerned about Luke and me?" Raina asked, still confused.
"Well." Cap. said, heaving a big sigh. "I think you should stop seeing each other."
"My personal life is none of your concern!"
"But your job is."
"Are you threating me?"
"I just don't want you to get hurt just becasue Luke is white and your black." Said Cap. "In this day-in-age, you could get hurt pertty badly. So, it's eithier your love life, or your job here at The Divison."
"I am NOT going to stop seeing Luke!" Raina shouted, her eyes feeling up with tears.
"Then your fired!"

Feed back welcome! Will post more soon!

[JDS84]

This is great. Keep up the good work.

[Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan]

Here's more!

"You SHOT Theodore?!" Magda said, very shocked at what she just heard.
"It was an accident." Replied Jinny, crying. "I-I thought he was sombody else! A robber. It was dark, and I couldn't see anything."
"Is he ok?"
"I don't know. When I found out it WAS him, I called the police. I lied and said I found him like that."
"You need to go see him."
"And what...... Magda?! Say, 'Hey, I shot you because I thought you were a robber'? I don't think so!"
"You don't have to tell him. Just go see him. Your going to have to face him sooner or later, Jin."
"Your right." Jinny said, with a minutes thought. "I owe him that much. Thanks, mag." She huged Magda and walked out of the bathroom.
"Damn I'm good!"

THAT NIGHT

"Thanks for walking me to my door." Said Raina, to Luke.
"Rain, I need to talk to you. I hate to tell you this after what Cap. said this afternoon, but... I think she should see other people."
"I understand." Raina replied. Luke kissed her, and walked back to his car. "I understand just prefectly! I'm going to get you AND Kate back for hurting me. Even if it kills me, I WILL get you BOTH back!"

What do you think so far? Good or bad, I like getting replies from you guys. Will post more soon!

[*Nancy Mckeon*]

This is great! post more a.s.a.p