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fr00ti · 05-08-2003, 10:48 PM

I have to write a final poem for creative writing, and I'm finished! What do ya'll think of it? Dont be too critical

"Through Her Eyes"

Look through her eyes
See what she sees
Youll never know how she feels
Until you really know her

You cant understand why
She would ever cry
Dont make conclusions
On what you think you know

She feels these things inside
With words she cant explain
But you must judge by the outside
And never see the beauty in her soul

Time has made her realize
Who she can trust
And all the times shes wondered
Is she caring too much?

Cause nothing lasts forever
In her dream world
And someday she will realize
Shes a special kind of girl

I Dream of Jeannie · 05-08-2003, 10:58 PM

I think it's very good!

smoothe · 05-08-2003, 10:59 PM

Nice poem for understanding women better you've just made me a legend in exploring a woman's true inner feelings...naw just playing it's really deep if i had to grade you i'd give you an A- the minus for,let me get this right through her eyes you can find all this out?It's good though!

I can see a future for you in reaching people!
I dedicate this poem to the love of my life down below!

ABlairican Pie · 05-08-2003, 11:00 PM

Very good poem!!! Keep on writing!!!

Adamantium · 05-08-2003, 11:01 PM

I think it's great.

Writing poetry has never been a strong point of mine. Although I have had the desire to write poems before.

Mossopp · 05-09-2003, 02:09 PM

I really like that poem. Have you thought of maybe putting it to music?

Crimson and Clover · 05-09-2003, 02:13 PM

it think its really good

*Pleasant Tomorrow* · 05-09-2003, 02:47 PM

That sounds really nice, I think you did a great job.

*InThisMoment* · 05-09-2003, 02:50 PM

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Originally posted by smoothe
Nice poem for understanding women better you've just made me a legend in exploring a woman's true inner feelings...naw just playing it's really deep if i had to grade you i'd give you an A- the minus for,let me get this right through her eyes you can find all this out?It's good though! I can see a future for you in reaching people!
I dedicate this poem to the love of my life down below!

Who!?

Raven Of Course!

F*O*L 1988 · 05-09-2003, 03:15 PM

Good job!!

Jem · 05-09-2003, 05:39 PM

Good poem.

*PinkLady* · 05-09-2003, 05:43 PM

I like it! It's very good.

Tuesday Weld · 05-09-2003, 06:05 PM

You did a really great job!

¤I Love Clay Aiken¤ · 05-10-2003, 10:17 AM

Im not deep and all "poemy", but that was good Mads! WOO WOO!!

-*Leah*- · 05-10-2003, 12:11 PM

That was great. I wish that I could write poetry that didn't sound like crap, but I guess Its just not meant for me to be a Poet.

05-08-2003, 10:48 PM	#1
fr00ti Member Forum Fanatic Join Date: Sep 16, 2002 Posts: 12,846	What do you think? I have to write a final poem for creative writing, and I'm finished! What do ya'll think of it? Dont be too critical "Through Her Eyes" Look through her eyes See what she sees Youll never know how she feels Until you really know her You cant understand why She would ever cry Dont make conclusions On what you think you know She feels these things inside With words she cant explain But you must judge by the outside And never see the beauty in her soul Time has made her realize Who she can trust And all the times shes wondered Is she caring too much? Cause nothing lasts forever In her dream world And someday she will realize Shes a special kind of girl
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05-08-2003, 10:58 PM	#2
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05-08-2003, 10:59 PM	#3
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05-08-2003, 11:00 PM	#4
ABlairican Pie Member Forum Superstar Join Date: Dec 12, 2001 Location: Living where cats reign more Supreme than a pizza. Posts: 31,619	re: poem Very good poem!!! Keep on writing!!!
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05-09-2003, 02:09 PM	#6
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05-08-2003, 11:01 PM	#5
Adamantium TVAdam No More Forum Veteran Join Date: Sep 11, 2002 Location: Springfield, Ohio Posts: 7,839	I think it's great. Writing poetry has never been a strong point of mine. Although I have had the desire to write poems before.

05-09-2003, 02:13 PM	#7
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05-09-2003, 02:47 PM	#8
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05-09-2003, 03:15 PM	#10
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05-09-2003, 05:39 PM	#11
Jem Member Forum Regular Join Date: Feb 25, 2003 Location: Canada Posts: 625	Good poem.
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05-09-2003, 05:43 PM	#12
PinkLady Member Forum Veteran Join Date: Jun 04, 2002 Posts: 7,457	I like it! It's very good.

05-09-2003, 06:05 PM	#13
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05-10-2003, 10:17 AM	#14
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05-10-2003, 12:11 PM	#15
-Leah- Back for More Forum Fanatic Join Date: Jan 15, 2003 Posts: 10,563	That was great. I wish that I could write poetry that didn't sound like crap, but I guess Its just not meant for me to be a Poet.
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