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PEZWCW · 03-21-2002, 10:20 PM

Jinny slowly walked into the division. She had her head hung over her shoulders as she silently walked to her desk, without looking at a single person in the room. Magda glanced at Jinny in dismay. She had been so depressed lately, and she and for some unknown reason she wouldn’t talk to her. She was doing so well. Suddenly Magda’s thoughts were interrupted by the Captain emerging from her office.
K: Exstead in my office, you too Ramirez.
Magda waited as Jinny slowly rose from her reclined position and walked into the Captain’s office to follow.
K: Sit down. I have some major news for you two.
The captain waited patiently for the two inspectors to take their seats across from her.
K: Okay, a few of my superiors and I have decided to have one of you go undercover to get the hard proof we need against Pierce Hudson. We have had surveillance on him for the last month and every Friday at the same time he goes and picks up a hooker at the corner of Hoyt and Belleview. Since we know that two of the women have eventually died we know that this is going to be dangerous, but we feel it is a risk we must take.
Magda glance over at Jinny’s stone clad face and then back at the captain.
M: Okay I will do it.
Jinny was about to protest when she was interjected.
K: See that is the problem. He always chooses a white female.
Both of the women gradually turned to stare at Jinny. Her face still did not change.
K: Jinny it is up to you. Do you think you can handle this? I know you have had a couple of hard days with your father and all, but we really need you.
The captain finished her questioning and waited for Jinny’s response. Magda almost wanted to burst out what problem with your father? But she refrained herself.
M: Captain I don’t think this is a good idea. Jinny just got back from rehab, I don’t think she should do this.
K: It is not your decision to make Magda.
Jinny sat there as the two talked candidly about her. Finally after every other thought had crossed her mind she broke the silence with a weak, but yet forceful: Yes.
Great the captain thought. Jinny could use this action for her benefit.
K: Okay you only have ten more hours to get ready, go to the third floor they are waiting for you.
Without another word Jinny got up and left to get ready.

Swimfan85 · 03-21-2002, 10:29 PM

sweet idea!!!!!!!!!! add more please!!! and please let john sr be ok!!!!

#1_Nancy_McKeon · 03-21-2002, 10:31 PM

Whoa, interesting so far!!! Keep going can't wait to see what's next! Great start suspenseful already! lol

Esperanza · 03-21-2002, 10:50 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by #1_Nancy_McKeon
Whoa, interesting so far!!! Keep going can't wait to see what's next! Great start suspenseful already! lol

yep...that about sums it up!

InspectorExstead · 03-21-2002, 11:37 PM

ooo...i like it so far...more!

PEZWCW · 03-22-2002, 12:02 AM

M: I can’t believe you. She is not ready for this. I can't believe you want her to go undercover as a prostitute.
K: Has Jinny told you about her father yet?
M: No.
K: Well, that is wired I thought she told you everything, and she told me first.
The captain stated with a small smirk going across her face. Jinny told me something important before she told Magda. Great our friendship is becoming better.
M: What about her father? What does this have to do with her going undercover?
Before she could answer there was a knock on the door. Both of the women turned around to see Raina standing at the door.
R: I am sorry to interrupt, but some one is on the phone for Jinny and they say it is an emergency.
K: She is busy I will take it. Magda go get Jinny for me.
Magda quickly left to go get Jinny. She had no idea what was going on with her and it bothered her that she told the captain about it and not her. Why would she tell her and not me, was the only thought that was running through her mind as she went into the doors at the third level and spotted Jinny. She was being shown a wire she could wear under her clothing so they could hear her. When Jinny heard the doors open and close she turned her head to find Magda looking at her with a hurt and concerned look on her face.
J: What is it? Jinny asked vigilantly.
M: Jinny, there is a phone call for you. They said it was an emergency.
As soon as Jinny heard the words come out of Magda’s mouth she hurriedly moved to the elevator door and hit the button to go up. The captain was standing in her doorway when Jinny came in. When Jinny saw the look on the Captain’s face she already knew the news. With a feeble “no” she fell to the floor unconscious.

Esperanza · 03-22-2002, 12:18 AM

MORE!!!!

JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo · 03-22-2002, 11:59 AM

ahh! more now damnit!!

Jo/Blair_fan · 03-22-2002, 03:21 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo
ahh! more now damnit!!

Ditto

dovesong · 03-22-2002, 05:55 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo
ahh! more now damnit!!

Just about sums it up, yeah.

Ewan's My Man · 03-22-2002, 06:19 PM

MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

NewsiesGurl229 · 03-22-2002, 09:11 PM

MORE!!!! more more more more more more more!!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank you

PEZWCW · 03-22-2002, 10:50 PM

Jinny slowly opened her eyes to discover she was no longer at the division. Where am I she pondered out loud.
Then a very familiar voice stated: Jinny you are at the hospital. You fainted when you saw the captain. Why did you faint, she wouldn’t tell me what the phone call was about ? Jinny is something wrong with your dad?
Jinny quickly looked to Magda as she remembered why she had blacked out.
In a very feeble voice she asked: Is the captain here? I would kind of like to talk to her if she is?
Magda looked at Jinny in utter disappoint.
M: Yeah, she is here. I will go get here.
As Magda left Jinny scanned the entire room she was in. She was still in her street clothes, but she was lying in her own hospital room, with blood caked across her forehead.
Her thoughts ceased when she heard the door open and close again. Without turning her head Jinny asked in a despondent : He’s dead, isn’t he?
The captain just said, yes. She could see the pain in Jinny’s body, and hear the anguish in her voice.
The captain waited a few minutes before she stated: The doctor says you are okay, and that you can go home whenever you want.
Jinny sat up a little bit and just nodded.
K: Do you want me to get Magda to take you home?
Once again Jinny just nodded.
The captain turned to leave, but change her mind and went to sit down by Jinny. She gently laid her hand on Jinny’s back and moved it in a soothing circular motion.
K: You know my mom, just died. Well she died a long time ago but her body finally gave out on her. Your father was a good man.
Jinny still could not bring herself to say anything. The captain realized that no words could help the turmoil she was feeling. She was finally overcoming her mother’s death, and now her father had passed from a massive coronary. Kate just sat there rubbing Jinny’s trembling back as tears lined the brimming of her eyes.
Kate could barley bring herself to utter: Jinny, you don’t always have to be strong. You can let us help you with this, and Jinny you can cry.
At hearing Kate’s last words Jinny leaned into the captain’s warm embrace, and cried on her shoulder. The captain held Jinny in her arms. In so many ways Jinny was still like a child. She had never had a mother, or a father at that, to guide her though her teenage years.
Jinny’s tears seeped through Kate’s clothing and onto her skin.
Kate mumbled: Oh, it’s okay Jinny. It is okay.
The captain held Jinny until long after her sobs subsided. At long last she took her arms away from Jinny and asked: Do you want me to go get Magda now?
Still she could not speak, so she nodded.
K: Okay. Jinny know that I am always here for you.
Was the last sentence that Kate told Jinny before she left.

Ewan's My Man · 03-22-2002, 10:54 PM

OMG!! This is so sad!! POST MORE!!

InspectorExstead · 03-23-2002, 12:05 AM

ok..tissue warning next time like michelle does w/ her fanfic. this is soooo good. and sad. and i need more!

03-21-2002, 10:31 PM	#3
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03-21-2002, 10:20 PM	#1
PEZWCW Angry Aardvark Occasional Poster Join Date: Jul 04, 2001 Posts: 90	On The Brink Jinny slowly walked into the division. She had her head hung over her shoulders as she silently walked to her desk, without looking at a single person in the room. Magda glanced at Jinny in dismay. She had been so depressed lately, and she and for some unknown reason she wouldn’t talk to her. She was doing so well. Suddenly Magda’s thoughts were interrupted by the Captain emerging from her office. K: Exstead in my office, you too Ramirez. Magda waited as Jinny slowly rose from her reclined position and walked into the Captain’s office to follow. K: Sit down. I have some major news for you two. The captain waited patiently for the two inspectors to take their seats across from her. K: Okay, a few of my superiors and I have decided to have one of you go undercover to get the hard proof we need against Pierce Hudson. We have had surveillance on him for the last month and every Friday at the same time he goes and picks up a hooker at the corner of Hoyt and Belleview. Since we know that two of the women have eventually died we know that this is going to be dangerous, but we feel it is a risk we must take. Magda glance over at Jinny’s stone clad face and then back at the captain. M: Okay I will do it. Jinny was about to protest when she was interjected. K: See that is the problem. He always chooses a white female. Both of the women gradually turned to stare at Jinny. Her face still did not change. K: Jinny it is up to you. Do you think you can handle this? I know you have had a couple of hard days with your father and all, but we really need you. The captain finished her questioning and waited for Jinny’s response. Magda almost wanted to burst out what problem with your father? But she refrained herself. M: Captain I don’t think this is a good idea. Jinny just got back from rehab, I don’t think she should do this. K: It is not your decision to make Magda. Jinny sat there as the two talked candidly about her. Finally after every other thought had crossed her mind she broke the silence with a weak, but yet forceful: Yes. Great the captain thought. Jinny could use this action for her benefit. K: Okay you only have ten more hours to get ready, go to the third floor they are waiting for you. Without another word Jinny got up and left to get ready.

03-21-2002, 10:29 PM	#2
Swimfan85 Member Forum Veteran Join Date: Jul 04, 2001 Posts: 7,030	sweet idea!!!!!!!!!! add more please!!! and please let john sr be ok!!!!

03-22-2002, 12:02 AM	#6
PEZWCW Angry Aardvark Occasional Poster Join Date: Jul 04, 2001 Posts: 90	M: I can’t believe you. She is not ready for this. I can't believe you want her to go undercover as a prostitute. K: Has Jinny told you about her father yet? M: No. K: Well, that is wired I thought she told you everything, and she told me first. The captain stated with a small smirk going across her face. Jinny told me something important before she told Magda. Great our friendship is becoming better. M: What about her father? What does this have to do with her going undercover? Before she could answer there was a knock on the door. Both of the women turned around to see Raina standing at the door. R: I am sorry to interrupt, but some one is on the phone for Jinny and they say it is an emergency. K: She is busy I will take it. Magda go get Jinny for me. Magda quickly left to go get Jinny. She had no idea what was going on with her and it bothered her that she told the captain about it and not her. Why would she tell her and not me, was the only thought that was running through her mind as she went into the doors at the third level and spotted Jinny. She was being shown a wire she could wear under her clothing so they could hear her. When Jinny heard the doors open and close she turned her head to find Magda looking at her with a hurt and concerned look on her face. J: What is it? Jinny asked vigilantly. M: Jinny, there is a phone call for you. They said it was an emergency. As soon as Jinny heard the words come out of Magda’s mouth she hurriedly moved to the elevator door and hit the button to go up. The captain was standing in her doorway when Jinny came in. When Jinny saw the look on the Captain’s face she already knew the news. With a feeble “no” she fell to the floor unconscious.

03-22-2002, 12:18 AM	#7
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03-22-2002, 10:50 PM	#13
PEZWCW Angry Aardvark Occasional Poster Join Date: Jul 04, 2001 Posts: 90	Jinny slowly opened her eyes to discover she was no longer at the division. Where am I she pondered out loud. Then a very familiar voice stated: Jinny you are at the hospital. You fainted when you saw the captain. Why did you faint, she wouldn’t tell me what the phone call was about ? Jinny is something wrong with your dad? Jinny quickly looked to Magda as she remembered why she had blacked out. In a very feeble voice she asked: Is the captain here? I would kind of like to talk to her if she is? Magda looked at Jinny in utter disappoint. M: Yeah, she is here. I will go get here. As Magda left Jinny scanned the entire room she was in. She was still in her street clothes, but she was lying in her own hospital room, with blood caked across her forehead. Her thoughts ceased when she heard the door open and close again. Without turning her head Jinny asked in a despondent : He’s dead, isn’t he? The captain just said, yes. She could see the pain in Jinny’s body, and hear the anguish in her voice. The captain waited a few minutes before she stated: The doctor says you are okay, and that you can go home whenever you want. Jinny sat up a little bit and just nodded. K: Do you want me to get Magda to take you home? Once again Jinny just nodded. The captain turned to leave, but change her mind and went to sit down by Jinny. She gently laid her hand on Jinny’s back and moved it in a soothing circular motion. K: You know my mom, just died. Well she died a long time ago but her body finally gave out on her. Your father was a good man. Jinny still could not bring herself to say anything. The captain realized that no words could help the turmoil she was feeling. She was finally overcoming her mother’s death, and now her father had passed from a massive coronary. Kate just sat there rubbing Jinny’s trembling back as tears lined the brimming of her eyes. Kate could barley bring herself to utter: Jinny, you don’t always have to be strong. You can let us help you with this, and Jinny you can cry. At hearing Kate’s last words Jinny leaned into the captain’s warm embrace, and cried on her shoulder. The captain held Jinny in her arms. In so many ways Jinny was still like a child. She had never had a mother, or a father at that, to guide her though her teenage years. Jinny’s tears seeped through Kate’s clothing and onto her skin. Kate mumbled: Oh, it’s okay Jinny. It is okay. The captain held Jinny until long after her sobs subsided. At long last she took her arms away from Jinny and asked: Do you want me to go get Magda now? Still she could not speak, so she nodded. K: Okay. Jinny know that I am always here for you. Was the last sentence that Kate told Jinny before she left.

03-22-2002, 10:54 PM	#14
Ewan's My Man I'll Cover You Forum Veteran Join Date: Sep 29, 2001 Location: Beneath the opera house... Posts: 5,682	OMG!! This is so sad!! POST MORE!!

03-23-2002, 12:05 AM	#15
InspectorExstead Member Forum Fanatic Join Date: Oct 29, 2001 Location: The Golden State Posts: 12,902	ok..tissue warning next time like michelle does w/ her fanfic. this is soooo good. and sad. and i need more!