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Casey143 · 03-20-2002, 06:10 PM

Hey guys! ok, this is my first fanfic, so tell me what u think~~~~~> BTW, in this, Teddy and Jinny hvent seen each other since the whole killing a cop situation that Jinny was in! So, they are ot back 2gether. ok, here goesss...........

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Setting: night time outside of Chucky Cheese. Standing outside is everyone was inside--the people we know that were inside, are Teddy, his parents, Jenny and her fiancee, and Teddy's broher and sister-in-law. (They were there for a child in the family's party)
Everyone in standing outside staring at the buuilding that was quickly being consumed w/ flames. Everyone got out of the building except for one child--Ben Ramirez who was @ his friends birthday party. Responding to the fire was the SFFD along wit the SFPD-including Capt., CD, and Nate(by coincidence they had not known Ben wasstuck inside). Magda and Gabe got a phone call from the SFFD telling them about Ben andin a panic rushed over there about 100mi. over the speed limit. Jinny, who was @ home saw a special report pop up on the screen and rememered Magda telling her that Ben wasgoing 2 a party there 2night so she jumped in her car and sped as fast as hercar could go 2 Chucky Cheese. Just as Capt., CD, and Nate saw Magda and Gabe uning towards them, they heard a little boy yel "Ben's still in there!" and then they quickly understood.

Magda: (running up 2 a firefghter) My son is in there! You have to get him out!! You have to help him he's only 8 years old!!!!!
FireF: We're doing everything we can --we'll get your son outas soon as possible I promise! (he said as Magda cries and Gabe holds her) (just then, kate, cd and nate alk up2 them)
Kate: He'll be fine Magda, he's a strong boy.
Magda: But that's al he is! A boy!An 8 year old boy! MY 8 year old boy! (crying even arder now)
(Teddy and his family who were standing close by went over an found out ht was going on).
(Just then, Jinny pulls up and sees Mag cryong hysterically and runs up 2 them)
Jinny: What happened?!
Magda: Jinny!! Ben's trapped in there! They can't get him out! (she says as she collpses inJinny's arms)
Jinny: Ok, it's ok honey (htn she runs up 2 a firefighter) Excus me--there's a little boy trappd inside!
FireF: We know, and we are doing all we can to get him out. It's a delicae situation. (she them told 2 more firef's and they said the same exact hing as the first and w/ that, she returned 2 her group of friends)
Magda: WHat happened? Wha diod they say?
Jinny: They'l get him out, Mag. (she said trying 2 sound hopeful for Mag)
Magda: What am I supposed to do Jin? Just stand here while my son could be dying in there as we speak?!
Jinny: No. (and w/ that, she started running towars the burning building)
Magda! Jinny!!! OMG what is she doing?!
Everyone else that was there shared the same reaction- 'OMG'.
Teddy: Jinny!!!!! (Teddy's family and friends just stood there in shock nad like everyone else, not beliving what they just saw)

Well, what do you guys think so far? Should I keep going w/ it?

Babes_Cat · 03-20-2002, 06:13 PM

Yes, more please!

aeysh1 · 03-20-2002, 07:02 PM

more more!

InspectorExstead · 03-20-2002, 07:14 PM

omg...i love it! MOREEE!!

Esperanza · 03-20-2002, 07:59 PM

Oh my goodness... POST MORE NOW!!

Jinny Girl · 03-20-2002, 09:07 PM

NO JINNY!! THE FLAMES!!! THE TOE!!! YOU'LL BURN YOUR TOE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

Who the **** thought up the word toe anyway? its loopy.

Ewan's My Man · 03-21-2002, 10:12 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Jinny Girl
NO JINNY!! THE FLAMES!!! THE TOE!!! YOU'LL BURN YOUR TOE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

LOL!!! Ok...well...u must post more!

03-20-2002, 06:10 PM	#1
Casey143 Member Occasional Poster Join Date: Feb 20, 2002 Location: Rhode Island Posts: 30	The Fire Hey guys! ok, this is my first fanfic, so tell me what u think~~~~~> BTW, in this, Teddy and Jinny hvent seen each other since the whole killing a cop situation that Jinny was in! So, they are ot back 2gether. ok, here goesss........... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Setting: night time outside of Chucky Cheese. Standing outside is everyone was inside--the people we know that were inside, are Teddy, his parents, Jenny and her fiancee, and Teddy's broher and sister-in-law. (They were there for a child in the family's party) Everyone in standing outside staring at the buuilding that was quickly being consumed w/ flames. Everyone got out of the building except for one child--Ben Ramirez who was @ his friends birthday party. Responding to the fire was the SFFD along wit the SFPD-including Capt., CD, and Nate(by coincidence they had not known Ben wasstuck inside). Magda and Gabe got a phone call from the SFFD telling them about Ben andin a panic rushed over there about 100mi. over the speed limit. Jinny, who was @ home saw a special report pop up on the screen and rememered Magda telling her that Ben wasgoing 2 a party there 2night so she jumped in her car and sped as fast as hercar could go 2 Chucky Cheese. Just as Capt., CD, and Nate saw Magda and Gabe uning towards them, they heard a little boy yel "Ben's still in there!" and then they quickly understood. Magda: (running up 2 a firefghter) My son is in there! You have to get him out!! You have to help him he's only 8 years old!!!!! FireF: We're doing everything we can --we'll get your son outas soon as possible I promise! (he said as Magda cries and Gabe holds her) (just then, kate, cd and nate alk up2 them) Kate: He'll be fine Magda, he's a strong boy. Magda: But that's al he is! A boy!An 8 year old boy! MY 8 year old boy! (crying even arder now) (Teddy and his family who were standing close by went over an found out ht was going on). (Just then, Jinny pulls up and sees Mag cryong hysterically and runs up 2 them) Jinny: What happened?! Magda: Jinny!! Ben's trapped in there! They can't get him out! (she says as she collpses inJinny's arms) Jinny: Ok, it's ok honey (htn she runs up 2 a firefighter) Excus me--there's a little boy trappd inside! FireF: We know, and we are doing all we can to get him out. It's a delicae situation. (she them told 2 more firef's and they said the same exact hing as the first and w/ that, she returned 2 her group of friends) Magda: WHat happened? Wha diod they say? Jinny: They'l get him out, Mag. (she said trying 2 sound hopeful for Mag) Magda: What am I supposed to do Jin? Just stand here while my son could be dying in there as we speak?! Jinny: No. (and w/ that, she started running towars the burning building) Magda! Jinny!!! OMG what is she doing?! Everyone else that was there shared the same reaction- 'OMG'. Teddy: Jinny!!!!! (Teddy's family and friends just stood there in shock nad like everyone else, not beliving what they just saw) Well, what do you guys think so far? Should I keep going w/ it?

03-20-2002, 07:02 PM	#3
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03-20-2002, 07:14 PM	#4
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03-20-2002, 07:59 PM	#5
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03-20-2002, 09:07 PM	#6
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03-20-2002, 06:13 PM	#2
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