My first fanfic, [untitled]

[a NaNcY FaNaTiC]

Okay, here goes nothing. I love writing but I've never even attempted a fanfic before, so please show mercy!

** 1983 **

Pacing back and forth on the floor of her room, Jinny Exstead was consumed with feelings of fear and anxiety. She had never felt so nervous in her entire 17 years of life. The Exstead house was empty that night--her father, John Sr. was at work; her younger brother Kasey was at a friend's house; and her older brother John Jr. was out at Richard Moffat's party. The same party she had been invited to, the same party she had been looking forward to all week, and the same party that was now going on without her. There was no sound except the grandfather clock ticking monotonously down the hall: tick-tock-tick-tock. The noise made her even more nervous as thoughts flooded her head. Thoughts about graduation, her plans for college, her life. She wanted more than anything to become a cop, and now that might be ruined. The phone ringing in the kitchen snapped Jinny back to attention. She didn't feel like talking to anyone right now, and she tried to ignore the phone. Finally after seven rings it stopped, and she breathed a sigh of relief. Jinny looked down at her watch and took in a deep breath. It was time. She slowly made her way through the dark house and into the bathroom. The same bathroom in which her mother had killed herself almost 3 years earlier. But she barely took notice, as her numbed brain was transfixed on her current situation. When she reached the counter and touched what she had come for, she closed her eyes and said a silent prayer to God to save her from what she knew was coming. With shaky fingers, she hesitantly picked up the piece of plastic on the counter and forced herself to look at it. 'Oh G-d,' she managed to whisper. 17-year old Jinny Exstead was pregnant.

Honestly--should I continue?

[LuvJinny4ever]

OMG!!! YES!!!!! POST MORE!!!!

~*`jenn~*~

[Divisionbabe05]

This is great...post more really soon!

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I am a Jineddy! A Jineddy is a person who wants Jinny and Teddy to be together! Morganne is a Jinanybody and a Carby, but thats ER...Dana just happens to be a JinMag, which is a lil strange, but o well...its interesting!

*People* Isnt that the craziest word u ever done heard? *LOL*

*Me, Morganne, and Dana are self appointed message board bad girls...we rebel against self appointed moderators...You know who you are!*

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** Fast-forward 18 years, to 2001 **

"And that, my friend, is how you catch a robber!" Jinny Exstead concluded matter-of-factly, as she and her partner Magda Ramirez walked into the locker room at the SFPD headquarters. Magda gave another laugh in Jinny's direction as she headed for the bathroom stall. "Tell me again, Jin," she said as she closed the stall door, "how many times did you karate chop this guy?"
"Enough so that he begged for mercy like a little baby." This time Jinny laughed herself as she recalled the night's earlier events. Adrenaline was still pumping through her body from her spectacular fight with the unfortunate robber. It had been a while since she'd responded to a robbery call, but she happened to be driving two streets away from where it was happening. Magda had been off duty so she was catching all the details now. Jinny was getting a water bottle out of her locker when she heard the toilet flush. Startled, she quickly shoved the bottle back into the locker as Magda opened the bathroom door. "So," began Jinny, not wanting to sound flushed, "What's the story on Alfred Hancock?" She was referring to CD's and Angela's current case. Magda smiled at this question.
"Full confession," she answered, as she finished up washing her hands.
"Yeah? I knew the pipsqueak wouldn't last one minute in there with CD." The two of them looked at each other and knew what each other was thinking--CD could be one tough talker. 'It's gonna be a long night,' Magda thought as they exited the locker room and entered their working space. Surveying the scene of ringing phones, tired and shouting cops, and shuffling papers, Jinny was thinking the same thing. She took a deep breath when she walked over to her desk and saw the enormous stack of paperwork for her to do.
"I thought rookies did the paperwork around her," she said aloud, not expecting an answer. In fact, no one probably could have heard her anyway. Angela and CD walked in at that moment, and spotted the two of them. "Hey, I need the Robbins report tomorrow morning, Mag," CD directed to Magda. Magda nodded wearily in acknowledgement and, mumbling something about how much she hated the night shift, walked back to her desk. Angela looked around at the chaos and caught Magda's eye and looked at her and her paperwork in pity. "I'll see you guys tomorrow," she said, smiling weakly. Jinny looked up from her desk, and was about to say a sarcastic remark about Angela leaving them amid this mess, but she caught herself when she remembered that Angela was leaving early to catch a train to see a breast cancer specialist--just in case. A chorus of "See ya tomorrow"'s followed Angela out the door. Jinny sighed as she looked down at the stack in front of her. 'Where to began,' she thought, rather amusedly.
"Jin, can you come in here please." Jinny turned around at Captain's voice. Kate, usually strong and authoratative, looked a bit worn out tonight, Jin observed. 'Oh well,' she thought. 'Must be the hectic holiday schedule.' Jinny got up slowly, slightly irritated because she wanted to get on that paperwork so she could get it done. She glanced over at Magda, who also looked up at Jinny. Magda had a mildy worried expression on her face--It was usually trouble when Jinny was called into Captain's office. CD was too caught up in her workload to have even noticed Captain's query. Jinny followed Kate into her office and managed to hide her anticipation. She couldn't remember messing up on any recent case. "Close the door, Jinny...and have a seat." Silently, Jinny obeyed the commands. "Jinny, it's not my business to get involved in your personal life," Kate began. Jinny let her breath go and sank into her chair. She knew where this was going. She knew *exactly* where this was going. "But I had no choice this time--"
"Of course you have a choice," Jinny spat out angrily. "This is my life and--" Kate abruptly cut her off, but not too harshly. Rather unlike her, Jinny noticed.
"Jinny, this isn't about any of that." They both knew what 'that' meant. "Someone called my office today and asked to speak to you." This unusual information made Jinny suddenly attentive. "Now you know that I don't take personal calls for my officers, but she said something to me that she wanted me to relay to you." Jinny was deeply confused and was doubled over with curiousity by now. "Jinny, she asked me to leave a message for you." Kate stopped for a moment. "Jinny, she said to tell you that your daughter called."

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[Divisionbabe05]

This is AWESOME! Post more soon!

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I am a Jineddy! A Jineddy is a person who wants Jinny and Teddy to be together! Morganne is a Jinanybody and a Carby, but thats ER...Dana just happens to be a JinMag, which is a lil strange, but o well...its interesting!

*People* Isnt that the craziest word u ever done heard? *LOL*

*Me, Morganne, and Dana are self appointed message board bad girls...we rebel against self appointed moderators...You know who you are!*

[Jo/Blair_fan]

YES more this is GREAT!!!!

[Swimfan85]

Omg!! yes post more this is awwwesome~

[JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo]

If you don't post more i'll kill you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this is sooooooooo goood!!!!!!!!

[Jinny Girl]

M-o-r-e!!! more!

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~Dana Jinny Exstead~

Well since Britt is a Jineddy (Jinny and Teddy) and Morganne is a Jinanybody (Jin and Anybody) I'm a JinMag, now you can figure that one out on your own.

*Me, Britt, and Morganne are self appointed message board bad girls...we rebel against self appointed moderators... You know who you are!*

On April 24, 2008, Kaley and I are going to meet in LA and handcuff ourselves to Nancy McKeon and Jay Harrington, and you're not. Ahahaha!

Email or IM me at DaDanceGirl88@aol.com
And don't forget to visit my homepage, which I have brilliantly titled"Dana Jinny Exsteads Web Profile... At least I think thats the title...

"COME ON! SAY IT WITH ME!" *LOL!*

[sue z q]

First of all, I want everyone to stand up and applaud Amy for this fabulous writing and story. And now, I want you to stand up and applaud ME becasue I was the one who encouraged Amy to read some fanfics and that OBVIOUSLY got her thinking about writing one herself. lol j/k Amy! This is so dang good! I can't believe it! You HAVE to post more like RIGHT NOW!!!!!!! Our friendship is at stake! lol

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Beverly Ann: *hears phone ring and looks in drawer* Oh, I found the cat!

Jo: There's two kinds a people in this world, people who get shoved around, and people who do the shoving.

Blair: Turn BLUE!

And from your two resident off-topic queens, Danielle and I, and our trainee, Kaley, who are still looking for that 12 step program by the way:

*^*^*~~~God Bless~~~*^*^*

[a NaNcY FaNaTiC]

** Back to 1983 **

Jinny knew her brother Kasey would be home soon. She would have to clean up the mess in the bathroom. Barely able to see through her teary eyes, Jinny picked up the home-pregnancy kit and its box and shoved them deep into the wastebasket. She almost never let herself cry, but this was different. This was her entire life that was ruined now. She sat on the toilet seat and cried bitterly. Incomplete thoughts shuffled around inside her head: she had been so careful....who was the father......how would her dad react. A slamming door tore Jinny from her thoughts. "Jinny!" It was her dad, John Sr. Pity was overcome by terror at the thought of her father seeing her like this. In her current state, she might accidently tell him everything through her tears. And she didn't want him to find out. At least not yet. She shot up from her crumpled position and wiped her face with the back of her hand. 'Come on, get with it Jin,' she told herself. 'You idiot, don't let him see you like this!' she berated. She could hear her father coming down the hall. "Jinny! Are you here?" She paniced and froze on the toilet seat. Her dad walked into the bathroom, huffing and puffing like he'd just run a mile. "Oh, Jinny girl!" He was so relieved to see her that he failed to notice her red puffy face. She managed a weak "Hi Dad."
"I was so worried about you! The message machine didn't kick in so that means you didn't turn it on, which meant you were home....and you didn't pick up the phone--" John stopped when he finally noticed his daughter's state and her transparent gaze. "Jinny, are you okay baby?" He took a few steps closer to Jinny, ready to scoop her up in his arms like he used to do when she was just a little girl. But Jinny held out her hands and motioned him away. Then John realized that his daughter had been crying in the bathroom that her mom had killed herself in, and it seemed to make perfect sense to him. "Okay, honey, I understand." Jinny didn't know what he meant, but then it clicked with her too. He thought she was crying over mom.
"Yeah, Dad," she said weakly. "So, can you please, uh, leave me alone for a little more?" She hated herself for using her mother's suicide as an excuse.
"Sure, baby. I gotta get back to the station anyways." John Sr. started to back out of the bathroom, since it made him extremely uncomfortable. His daughter-in-trouble emergency sensors had been replaced by standing-in-wife's-suicide-position, need-to-leave sensors. "I'll be home in a few hours." He hated leaving his daughter like that, but he was immediately relieved as he stepped into the hall and away from the memories. Jinny sat there on the toilet until she heard the front door close behind her father. She took another deep breath and tried to stand up, but her legs felt like jell-o and wobbled unstably beneath her, and she fell back down to the seat. A few more tries and she finally managed to get herself to the hall. When she passed the mirror in the hall, she saw how bad she looked. She was covered in sweat and her hair was all oily with perspiration. Her nightie was sticking to her flesh as if glue was present. Jinny stared at herself and wearily fell into a daze. Just then the front door opened again. "Bye, thank you again!" Kasey was half inside the door, calling to his friend in the drive way. He fully entered the living room and started strolling down the hall, only to freeze when he saw his sister. "Jinny!!" His brother instincts kicked in and he tore down the hall to help his sister, who looked about ready to collapse. Jinny was disoriented by the night's events and had gotten lost in her thoughts again. "What's wrong, are you okay?" Kasey asked, extremely worried. But then he realized she must be drunk. It was a common occurrance, after all. "Okay Jin, let's get you to bed," he said, putting one of her arms around his neck. He half dragged his sister to her room and layed her as carefully as possible on her bed. "Jin....," he murmered lowly, staring at his half-conscious sister. "Why do you do this to yourself." Kasey looked down at the floor, and realized something was different from the previous times he had helped Jinny in one of her drunken stupors. First, he noticed, there were no beer cans on the floor. And second, he didn't smell alcohol on her breath when he had brought her back to her room. Now he was really worried about his sister. She was the single most important thing to him. Without her, he didn't feel like he could go on. Then a terrible thought crept into his head: what if Jinny had stepped up and was doing drugs now? It was all too much for him to take, and he slowly left his sister's room, gently closing the door behind him. Funny, he thought, on the other side of the door, how she seemed so peaceful, laying there in bed like that. Maybe it was better for her to deal with things her own way, he decided. Then he got mad at himself for thinking that. Of course it wasn't good for her to do what she did, and now maybe doing drugs on top of all of that. How could he stand by and watch her do that to herself when she was always there for him, helping him when he needed someone? Terribly sad and confused, Kasey went to his own room and closed the door. The only person he could talk to was the one person who he felt needed him the most.
Back in her bed, Jinny was half awake and thinking, and half asleep already. Even though it was early for her, about 11:00, she wanted nothing more than to sleep. She was emotionally tired more than anything else. For some reason, her thoughts drifted to the party she was missing. And what she knew she would be doing at the party, she thought bitterly. And once again, she surrendered herself to the tears.

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[sue z q]

Amy! You've been holding out on me, girl! I had no idea you wrote like this! I'm dying here! Post more as soon as you can!!!!!!!!!!!! PUH-LEASE!

[a NaNcY FaNaTiC]

** 2001 **

Jinny could hardly believe what she had just heard. Her *daughter*? That was impossible! She was lost in a daze and couldn't understand what Kate was saying. Finally she heard Kate say "Why don't you go home and take the night off, Jinny?" Jinny nodded her head and walked out of the office. She failed to see Magda and CD look up at her with worry and confusion as she walked out, and she barely remembered getting herself home. The next thing she *did* fully remember was the refreshing taste of the booze as it ran down her throat and throughout her entire body. Kate's words, "...your daughter called..." repeated over and over in her head until she was too buzzed to remember them all. As she began her second, third, and fourth beers that night, different thoughts began to surface. Painful thoughts that she had tried to forget for the past 20 years...

** 1983 **

Jinny awoke the next morning feeling very refreshed, until she remembered the horror of the previous night's events. 'Thank G-d it's Saturday,' she thought, as she couldn't even imagine herself being able to function at school. She glanced at her clock--7:30 a.m. Thoughts raced through her head despite the early morning hours, and she got up to take a shower. Her sweaty body had soaked her sheets during the night and she was covered in perspiration. She began to undress herself, but stopped to look down at her stomach. It was very sexy, as any boy who had seen it could attest. She managed to keep in tanned, even in the winter, and she worked out at least 4 times a week, making hers ab muscles very toned. But it was still very feminine, and she had never really stopped to admire this part of her body. Jinny placed the palm of her hand flat on her stomach. She knew that a baby was in there, and it was going to grow. She really hadn't paid attention during the various health classes she'd taken over the years, so she had no clue when she would start to show. Her thoughts were interrupted by a knock on the door. She jumped in surprise and quicky grabbed a towel to cover up her naked body. "Yeah, Kas?" she asked, slightly annoyed at being disturbed. "Actually, it's me." She was surprised to hear that it was her older brother's voice instead. "What do you want?" she asked coldly. She was in no mood for dealing with John Jr. right now. "Geez, don't jump all over me, sis," he said in his usual cocky manner. "Besides," he added, in a low whisper, "You don't wanna get me mad, since I know someone jumped all over *you* and knocked you up." John Jr. was laughing at his perceived humor as Jinny ran to the door and tore it open, despite wearing only a thin towel. John Jr. stopped laughing when he saw that Jinny was giving him a look that could kill. Then he broke the silence, pointing at her stomach area and saying, "I think you're showing already!" That was too much. "Why, you son of a...." Jinny screamed and hurled herself at her brother. In a flurry of fists, feet, and towel, the two of them began to fight violently. Kasey heard the struggle and ran out of his room, still in his pajamas. "Jinny!" he cried, seeing the mass of fighting siblings on the hall floor. "Dad, dad!" he hollered. John Sr., fully suited up in his police uniform, was already on his way from the kitchen, where he had been waiting for his ride. "That's enough!" he screamed at the kids. John Jr. and Jinny froze when they heard him, and they turned to face their father. Jinny noticed part of her femininity was viewable, as her towel had been knocked aside during their struggle. She blushed and pulled it back up over herself. "I've got to get to work," he said sternly. "But we're gonna talk about this when I get home. No one goes out tonight!"
"But Dad!!" John Jr. protested.
"I mean it!" There was enough conviction in his voice to keep John Jr. from further protests. A honking from the front drive way told John Sr. that his ride was waiting for him. He looked like he was about to say something else, but decided against it. With that, he turned and stalked down the hall and out the door. Kasey just stood there, gaping at the scene. "Close your mouth, you look like a ******," John Jr. said, pushing Jinny off of him.
"Don't talk to him like that!" Jinny shouted at him. John Jr. just got up and pushed past Kasey into their room, slamming the door behind him. "Jin..." Kasey began, but Jinny just held up her hand. "I don't wanna talk about it Kas," she said weakly. She gathered herself up and went into the bathroom to take her shower, leaving Kasey alone in the hall. 'I hafta let dad know about my suspicions,' he thought to himself. 'I owe it to Jinny to look after her, like she's always looked after me.' He decided to tell his dad that night his suspicions that Jinny was using drugs.

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[Swimfan85]

this is awesome, please add more soon!

[sue z q]

Her femeninity was showing...lol It's great! Ya gotta post more B4 ya go to bed tonight! (which I know'll be early cause ya got school) So what are ya doing reading this? Ya need to be posting!