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since CINDY is being MEAN, i've decided to start posting tonight.
k... here goes: Jinny waited at the redlight impatiantly. She had hit every one since she left her house, and was already late for work. Leaning her elbow against the door, Jinny sighed. 'Finally!' she thought as the light turned green and she sped through the intersection. ***** Magda sat at her desk flipping through the catalog of things Ben was selling for school. She really hated these things, but she knew she had to buy something... and sell things too. All in all, Ben wasn't doing anything, she was. 'That's ok.' She thought smiling. 'I did it to my mom.' ***** CD Delorenzo and Angela Reide pulled into the mini mart. CD was dying for a cup of coffee before they had to be at the crime scene. She couldn't believe the rash of murders happening around the city. It almost seemed like they had a serial killer on their hands. Sighing, she opened her car door. Calling into the car she asked "Want anything?" "No, I'm fine, thanks CD." 'To tell you the truth' thought Angela 'I couldn't stomach anything right now.' Wiping her head with her hand, she stared out the car window. **** The phone rang in Captain Kate McCafferty's office. Picking up the reciever, she answered it with her usual "McCafferty." "Yes... yes... ok... calm down ma'am." Kate quickly sat down at her computer and typed the information that the calling was giving her into the database. After about 10 minutes of soothing responses and critical questions the Captain the conversation ended. Getting up from her desk, she walked over to her door. ***** Running into the Division, Jinny Exstead smiled at Magda apoligetically. Magda just looked at her with an amused expression. "Loose your watch Jinny?" Magda chided and laughed. Jinny looked at Magda. "Nooo... traffic." Jinny paused, then added "and I couldn't pants." Grinning, she sat down and glanced over at what Magda was looking at. "Ah.. school's selling stuff?" "Yup. Always fun." Magda was about to say something else when Captain McCafferty came out of her office. "Exstead, Ramirez, I have a case for you. It seems..." she said slowly "that a 15 year old girl ran away about 3 days ago and her parents have been trying to find her ever since." "And you want us to find her?" Jinny asked. The Captain looked at Jinny like she had just said the stupidest thing in the world. "YES. And... there's more. She's been in therapy. She's a suicide risk." The Captain glanced at Jinny, who didn't move a muscle. "We need to find her, got it?" "Got it Cap." Magda grabbed her coat and moved towards the door. "Coming Jin?" "Uh.... yeah." Jinny quickly grabbed her keys, and followed Magda out towards the parking lot. TO BE CONTINUED k.. what do you think???? honest opinions!!! |
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Join Date: Jun 15, 2001
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Very good! Great start. I really can't wait to read more.
------------------ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Nancy: I'm drawn to very flawed characters, because I have so many myself. And my friends are my friends because they seem to look beyond these flaws and love me anyway. "War doesn't decide who's right, just who's left." -Source Unknown |
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A and J
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Join Date: May 31, 2001
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oh this is sooooooooooooooo good!! please finish it!! it's great!!!!
------------------ Wanna buy/trade eps. of FOL then visit my site @ http://www.expage.com/foltapetrader and give me a e-mail!! *~*~*~*~*~*~* Teddy Is Hott!! --pretty plain and simple. I cannot tell a lie--Teddy is ALL mine!! Blair: Hold it, you ruined my watch. Jo: No I didn't, it's a stop watch...it stopped Blair: Jo, you've got some power, but you're not wearing it right. You don't want to throw it onlike a motorcycle jacket, you want to slip it on, like a negligee. Jo: I'm not doin' anything weird!!! Natalie: She's always saying what a great kid you are. Andy: Kid? Natalie: Guy. Did i say kid? Why would i say kid? Man. She said man! |
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Join Date: Jul 04, 2001
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dont u hate it when people look at u weirdly after u say the stupidest things...like i was talking to bachleror number 3 and hes like call me and im like when hes like uhhh when we are going to do somehting and then i was like to my mom so to go fast u press down on the pedal*im going to start drivers ed this year and im getting a jump start* and shes like ya...but i ne that, this was all before my little neighbors got me soaked with water...omg i am dry now which is good and then some people think im being mean but im not wait yes yes i am and all i can say is in the words of cindy lauper,"girls just wanna have fun" but i mean if being mean is fun then im a girl having fun and-hes irristable up close and personal...
OK GREAT START ADD MORE N' i will add more to ours! |
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My mom looked at me stupid on easter lol because it was too early for me too be up and i was kinda on the dumb side and she told me we were going to 11 o'clock mass and I was like when lol and then she said uhhh 11:00 and then I went bak to bed lol
write more it is grand |
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Sweet scaredy cat
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I love this story!!! Can't wait for more...
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*PuRpLe~PrInCeSsEs*
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Join Date: Feb 14, 2001
Location: TX *I love this state*
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OOOOOOO I like;o)
------------------ Its my life!This is who I am!And you tell me it does'nt matter! -Jinny ~~~~~~~ If you want something bad enough you go after it no matter what the outcome may be -My Quote ~~~~~~ "Love beliver So take the love He's giving to you A love receiver Cause everything He's Promised is true Love beliver Listen to the song that I sing You are the child of the King" -Love Beliver. ~~~~~~~ "Be a good girl(why be a good girl?)be a good girl (why be a good girl?)she is a see-saw seeing if it matters she is a game of Chutes and Laders. be a good girl (why be a good girl?) she needs the one who wrote the definition of a love without condition be a good girl." -Good Girl. |
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*FlUtTeRfLy*
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As some one said already graet start can't wait to read more.
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Nancy McKeon Wannabe
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awesome! write more!
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thanks for all your comments! i work everyday, and the only reason my last one got finished so fast was because it was the weekend and stuff. k, here's more:
***** Jinny and Magda pulled up to their destination, a modest two story house with marroon shutters. Getting out of the car, Jinny looked out of the top of her sunglasses at it. It looked like a nice place to live. Magda unbuckled her seatbelt and opened the door. Stepping out onto the sidewalk, she made sure she had her badge and then closed the door. "Well," she said, turning to Jinny, "here we are. Let's go see the parents." Jinny and Magda walked up the front steps of the house onto the porch. Ringing to doorbell, Jinny got her badge ready to flash. When the door opened, a 30-something woman with short blonde hair greeted them. She looked a wreck, and Jinny could tell she had been crying. "Hello Ma'am. I'm Jinny Exstead and this is my partner Magda Ramirez. We're with the SFPD." Jinny showed her badge and took of her sunglasses. The woman managed a slight smile, as she opened the door wider. "Come in, come in" she said, motioning for the inspectors to enter the house. Once Jinny was inside, she could feel both the love and the heartache that was in the house. The love, no doubt, was always there, but the heartache was recent, she sensed. "We have to ask you a few questions if you don't mind." "Certainly" the woman replied. "And please, call me Anna." "Ok Anna" Magda replied. "Can you tell us about when you last saw your daughter, Angel?" "Well.. it was three days ago. She was going to school, like usual. She's been... depressed though, so she's actually been missing a lot of school." Anna paused and tears came to her eyes. "Then later on in the day I went up to her room and found a note saying she was leaving. I... I broke down. My... my baby left me...." Anna broke down in tears, but quickly tried to wipe them away with her hand. "I'm sorry... but she's my only child. It was pure luck that we were able to adopt her." "She's adopted?" Jinny asked, writing the information down in her notebook. "Yes. We... we told her a little over a month ago. Since then, well, she's been so upset and... she... tried to kill herself. I didn't know what to do!!" She looked into the inspector's eyes pleadingly, waiting for a response. It was Magda who spoke up. "There really is nothing you can do but get her help, Anna, and you did that, correct?" Anna smiled weakly. "Yes. She's been seeing a therapist regularly." "Anna, can you think of any reason that Angel would WANT to run away? Maybe... she wanted to find her birthmother.. or something like that?" Jinny asked, looking uncomfortable. "Oh, no. She's said many times that she hates her real mother... because she gave her away. I don't agree with her of course, circumstances happen. But... even if she did I don't know how she would... I can't even access her records. The mother had her name concealed and everything." "Ok, Anna, that'll be all for now. We'll update you if we find anything else out." Magda said calmly, trying not to upset the woman. She felt so bad for her. She knew what it would feel like if Ben ever ran from her, and she didn't wish that feeling on anyone. ***** Walking into the station, Jinny and Magda didn't know where to go from there. The only thing they could think of was to post Angel's picture everywhere and hope they came up with a lead. Captain McCafferty exited her office and went over to her two inspectors. "So... anything?" "Nope. I mean... Angel is adopted, but that's about all..." Magda replied, sounding weary. She was upset that there really wasn't anywhere to go. "Adopted, huh? Could she be..." "We already asked that" Jinny stated. "Anna, the mother, said that Angel hates her birthmother... for giving her up." "Still" the Captain started "There's a possibility that she might. Go check the agency." "The mother's records are apparently concealed." Magda looked back up at the Captain. "Not to us." Captain McCafferty smiled. Magda raised her eyebrows at the Captain, then smiled back. There was a clause somewhere that stated they could access adoption records, but Magda had forgotten about it. "We're on it," she said, and turned to Jinny. "How about I go over to the adoption agency while you check out Angel's school? That way we'll save some time." Jinny nodded in agreement and they both grabbed their coats. ***** CD DeLorenzo and Angela Reide walked into the Division about an hour after both Jinny and Magda had left. Angela was shaking her head. "I can't believe he was so stupid... of all the things to do..." "Yeah, well, all killers make mistakes eventually. Let's just be glad we caught him now and not later." CD pulled out her chair from her desk and sat down in it. "Hungry?" "Starved" Angela practically yelled back. Just then Magda came rushing into the division and went directly to the Captain's office. Knocking on the door, she asked "Can I come in?" There was a muffled reply and Magda opened the door, shutting it behind her. "I wonder what that was all about.." Angela said. "Who knows. Let's order in. Chinese?" "Yeah." **** Kate looked up from her desk and wondered what had Magda in such a predicament. Motioning for her to sit down, she placed her glasses on her face. "What did you find out?" Magda couldn't speak. All she did was hand Kate the folder that she was carrying. Taking the folder from Magda, Kate opened it up and skimmed the contents of the first page. Raising her eyebrows, she looked at Magda with a bewildered look. TO BE CONTINUED whacha think?? |
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this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! omg better keep goin~!
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AAHHHHH!!! MORE PEASE!!! You are killing me!
------------------ This is K the Off Topic Sidekick Trainee saying Good night, have a good morning, don't smoke, buckle up, drive safely, and always go off topic! |
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Sweet scaredy cat
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U stopped??? why you stop??? I don't understand it, you stopped...isn't that against the law or something??? I love this if you can't tell.
In a regular way like many do I LOVE IT, PLEASE POST MORE! |
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i'll post more tomorrow after i get home from work... which will be after 7pm. thanks 4 all the responses!!!!
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A and J
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Join Date: May 31, 2001
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your gonna make me WAIT 20 hours for the rest of this story?!?! Girl...oh, u better make this good!! LoL...this is really good,c an't wait for more!!!!
------------------ Wanna buy/trade eps. of FOL then visit my site @ http://www.expage.com/foltapetrader and give me a e-mail!! *~*~*~*~*~*~* Teddy Is Hott!! --pretty plain and simple. I cannot tell a lie--Teddy is ALL mine!! Blair: Hold it, you ruined my watch. Jo: No I didn't, it's a stop watch...it stopped Blair: Jo, you've got some power, but you're not wearing it right. You don't want to throw it onlike a motorcycle jacket, you want to slip it on, like a negligee. Jo: I'm not doin' anything weird!!! Natalie: She's always saying what a great kid you are. Andy: Kid? Natalie: Guy. Did i say kid? Why would i say kid? Man. She said man! |
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