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PEZWCW · 07-04-2001, 12:21 AM

This is my very first fan fiction, please tell me if you like the begining.

OMG how could this be happening Jinny thought to herself. A man was holding her hostage with a gun to her head. Why now when I have everything in the world to live for. She could feel the smoldering breathe of the man against her bare neck. Voices and sirens pierced trough the night’s crisp air.
TM:If you move an inch I swear I will kill you without a seconds thought.
Magda had begged her not to enter the house alone, but Jinny was too stubborn to wait for backup and now death was upon her. Breathing down her back, anticipating the second she would falter and kill her while she was all alone in a dark forsaken room.
Suddenly, a very familiar voice ripped through Jinny’s pounding ears.
K: Sir, we have you surrounded , there is nothing you can do. Please let the officer go, and come out with your hands above your head.
J: You should listen to the Captain, she has a lot of power behind her.
The man: Shut the hell up! No one asked for your opinion! and the hard steel of the gun struck Jinny square in the temple.
Jinny screamed in pain and fell to the floor in agony.

Outside

M: OMG, was that Jinny that just screamed.
K: Yeah, I think it was.
M Captain We have to go in after her.
K: Magda we have no eyes in their, nothing to tell us what is going on. I can not allow my people to go in their and die. Jinny will just have to take care of herself for right now.
Magda knew the Captain was right, but Jinny was her best friend. What would she do if Jinny died.
CD seeing Magda’s concern said: Jinny is tough she will get bye for an hour or two.
M: Yeah sure CD, whatever.

Back Inside

J: * groans* and wakes up in a pool of her own blood. For a second she couldn’t remember what happened.
TM: Get up now.
J: What?
TM: I said get the hell up now.
Jinny tried with all her might to climb to her feet but all her strength had evaporated from her body. The man angrily grabbed Jinny by the collar and pulled her to her feet.
TM: Do you have a phone on you?
J: Ah, yeah
TM: Get it and call the lady that was talking earlier
J: Okay, Jinny grabbed the phone and frantically dialed the number of the Captain’s phone.

K: Yes
J: Captain it’s Jinny
K: OMG Jinny are you alright?
TM: Give me the phone. Are you the Captain?
K: Yes I am. Now I want you to let Our officer go and come out with your hands above your head.
TM: Now why the hell would I want to do that.
K: Because if you don’t I will be forced to have all my people come in after you.
TM: OH, really. While if you do that I will be forced to kill this pretty little thing I have in front of me.
K: Okay what do you want?

BlairW_1 · 07-04-2001, 12:31 AM

oh my goodness... oh my goodness... More soon!!!!

Oh, welcome to the board, I noticed it was your first post! I'm Danielle, hope you can stay on here 4eva, and eva, and eva! Okay, just to warn you, I'm known widely on this board as a babbler. I'm a lot more babbley now, cuz I've been in a blonder-than-normal streak. Please don't think I'm stupid, I'm really not. Just to show you I can shut up when neccesary (sp? I'm tellin ya, spelling is my best subject, and I can't spell now! See? I get off topic easily...), I'm gonna Submit Reply now! (Oh, and I'll get closer to 700, too!

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Joanna Marie_1 · 07-04-2001, 12:57 AM

OMG this is soooooooooooo AWESOME! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE more soon!

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(After the fake motorcycle accident)
Jo:My head hurtz a lil
Nat: A Concusion!!!!!!
Jo's dad:The doctor examined her head and found nothing!
Blair:Not even a lil bit of straw!

JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo · 07-04-2001, 01:18 AM

Ohhh no.. says you didn't!! youc an't leave me in suspence like that!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! come on....please get it going!! it's great so far!! keep i tup!!!

PEZWCW · 07-04-2001, 01:41 AM

Sorry it isn't much

TM: Let’s see what do I want. First I want all the people outside gone. Second I want all you to just leave me alone.
K: I am sorry sir but neither of those requests are acceptable. But let me tell you this you can let me talk to my officer you have in their and then I will talk to you.
TM: Listen lady I am the one who is in control here, not you. You will listen to every damn thing I have to say or I will blow this chicks brains out you got it. I’m in control. And with that he hung up

K: Damn it.
M: What?, what did he do to her, is she alright? Magda asked in a terrified voice.
K: I don’t know Magda. All I know is that a man that has raped and murdered a possible five women has one of my people in there and there is not a thing I can do about it. Okay?
CD seeing the Captains anger and frustration lead Magda to a patrol car a couple of feet away.

CD: Magda you and the Captain yelling at each other isn’t going to help Jinny at all. You’re her partner and best friend and you have to stay clam and strong for her right now. Okay?
M: Yeah, but CD I feel so helpless. My best friend is in their possibly hurt and I’m just out here chit chatting to people like nothing has happened I need to do something to help her CD.
CD: Yeah I know what you mean.
All of a sudden a scream ripped through the night and Magda and CD looked at the condeemed house in a horror, feeling useless>

Should I keep going

Joanna Marie_1 · 07-04-2001, 01:45 AM

Hell yea u should keep goin!!!!!!! MORE NOW!UMMMMMMMMMM PLEASE?

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(After the fake motorcycle accident)
Jo:My head hurtz a lil
Nat: A Concusion!!!!!!
Jo's dad:The doctor examined her head and found nothing!
Blair:Not even a lil bit of straw!

JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo · 07-04-2001, 01:58 AM

damn!! just leave @ the best part!! come on...your killing me!!! If you stop now i will kill you!! lol......please continue, this sig reat!!

07-04-2001, 02:01 AM

oml I love it u must write more it is like 2 in da morning and I need more b4 I go to bed COME ONE i'll count to ten........................1.........................2............3...........4...............5.............6.............7............8................9.........10

I dont c any more hehehhe come on.....

preeeeze gimme some more

PEZWCW · 07-04-2001, 02:25 AM

Inside

TM: Now you listen to me. Don’t move don’t speak don’t do anything. Do you know who I am* jinny nodded* So you know what I am capable of* once again she nodded* So you probably shouldn’t make me have to hit like I just did. * Jinny just looked at the wall. She couldn’t believe she was in this mess. Even if she did live the Captain would probably kill her for being so stupid.
# the Phone rings#
TM: Who is it?
K: It is the captain what the hell just happened?
TM: Well, your stupid ass inspector just tried to take my gun away and I just could not allow that, it wouldn’t make me a very good bad guy now wouldn’t you agree Captain
K: let me talk to my inspector.
TM: Ah, let me think for a second , no, I don’t think so.
K: you know your stubbornness is getting both of us nowhere.
TM: Fine if you must here’s your little inspector.
J: cap, what’s going on.
K: Are you alright Jinny?
J: Not really Cap, my head is bleeding really bad and I feel really dizzy.
K: does he have only one gun
J: Yeah, Cap.
TM: Okay that is enough. So Captain I gave you what you wanted now you give me something I want

Outside 25 minutes later.

K: Listen everybody it sounds like Jinny is hurt really bad, and I can’t let this man be in control any longer so I need two volunteers to go in and try to get control of the man without any one getting hurt. Any takers?
Both CD and Magda raised their hands before any one had a chance.
K: Okay go get ready you go in in 30 minutes.

I'll post more tomoorw if you think it is any good

07-04-2001, 02:30 AM

I love u lol!!!!!!!!! yes u posted more

i can sleep now!!!!!!!! u r da best

good night all thanx for postin more u r da greatest person in da world hehehe go u

Nancy Exstead · 07-04-2001, 03:18 AM

yes, yes, yes, more, more, more. oh you need to post more now, but I guess I have to wait till morning. If I go to bed the night will go faster, good night. I can't sleep, I'll count sheep: 1...2...3..

PEZWCW · 07-04-2001, 04:09 AM

K: You ready?
M: Of course, Captain, I was ready 5 hours ago.
K: Well, when you go in please be, careful, I don’t need anymore hurt people. Also we want this man alive, okay? Magda I know Jinny is your beast friend, but you can’t think like that right now, okay?
M: Yeah, whatever Cap.
CD: Let’s go.

Inside

TM: Now what the hell do you think they are doing.
J: I have no clue, remember I’ve been stuck in here with you.
The man ripped his head around and ran at Jinny in anger.
TM: I have had enough of your opinion
He grabbed Jinny and punches her twice in the stomach and throws her to the ground and falls an top of her. Jinny tries to get away, but she is too weak to overpower him. The man tore Jinny’s shirt away from her body and started to lower his

Put your hands up NOW Magda roared at the man when she saw what he was doing to her best friend. But the man reacted with rapid speed and quickly had the gun to Jinny’s bleeding head.

M: Let her go. NOW
TM: Ah, I don’t think so.
CD: There is no where for you to go.
J: Besides hell.
TM: Shut-up you stupid bitch.
In anger the man shot at Magda and CD> Jinny jumped out of the way and CD shot at the man and hit him in the shoulder, before he fainted in pain he turned to Jinny who was defenseless and shot her.
M: NOOOOOOOO!, and she turned and opened fire at the man killing him.
CD: Officer down, get in here now, officer down
Magda ran to Jinny’s lifeless body and held her in her arms and chanted, O God please no, as blood gushed from Jinny’s body

Jinny_JoFan · 07-04-2001, 09:49 AM

speechless this is so good!!!! keep writin pleeze

NancyRox11 · 07-04-2001, 10:36 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Jinny_JoFan:
speechless this is so good!!!! keep writin pleeze

Couldn't have said it better myself

hockeychiC518 · 07-04-2001, 10:53 AM

omg how could just leave me there!!!??!?!!! u better add more soon!!!!!!!

07-04-2001, 12:21 AM	#1
PEZWCW Angry Aardvark Occasional Poster Join Date: Jul 04, 2001 Posts: 90	In Hell's Grasp This is my very first fan fiction, please tell me if you like the begining. OMG how could this be happening Jinny thought to herself. A man was holding her hostage with a gun to her head. Why now when I have everything in the world to live for. She could feel the smoldering breathe of the man against her bare neck. Voices and sirens pierced trough the night’s crisp air. TM:If you move an inch I swear I will kill you without a seconds thought. Magda had begged her not to enter the house alone, but Jinny was too stubborn to wait for backup and now death was upon her. Breathing down her back, anticipating the second she would falter and kill her while she was all alone in a dark forsaken room. Suddenly, a very familiar voice ripped through Jinny’s pounding ears. K: Sir, we have you surrounded , there is nothing you can do. Please let the officer go, and come out with your hands above your head. J: You should listen to the Captain, she has a lot of power behind her. The man: Shut the hell up! No one asked for your opinion! and the hard steel of the gun struck Jinny square in the temple. Jinny screamed in pain and fell to the floor in agony. Outside M: OMG, was that Jinny that just screamed. K: Yeah, I think it was. M Captain We have to go in after her. K: Magda we have no eyes in their, nothing to tell us what is going on. I can not allow my people to go in their and die. Jinny will just have to take care of herself for right now. Magda knew the Captain was right, but Jinny was her best friend. What would she do if Jinny died. CD seeing Magda’s concern said: Jinny is tough she will get bye for an hour or two. M: Yeah sure CD, whatever. Back Inside J: * groans* and wakes up in a pool of her own blood. For a second she couldn’t remember what happened. TM: Get up now. J: What? TM: I said get the hell up now. Jinny tried with all her might to climb to her feet but all her strength had evaporated from her body. The man angrily grabbed Jinny by the collar and pulled her to her feet. TM: Do you have a phone on you? J: Ah, yeah TM: Get it and call the lady that was talking earlier J: Okay, Jinny grabbed the phone and frantically dialed the number of the Captain’s phone. K: Yes J: Captain it’s Jinny K: OMG Jinny are you alright? TM: Give me the phone. Are you the Captain? K: Yes I am. Now I want you to let Our officer go and come out with your hands above your head. TM: Now why the hell would I want to do that. K: Because if you don’t I will be forced to have all my people come in after you. TM: OH, really. While if you do that I will be forced to kill this pretty little thing I have in front of me. K: Okay what do you want?

07-04-2001, 02:01 AM	#8
Cara Reelly HAtes All Guest Posts: n/a	oml I love it u must write more it is like 2 in da morning and I need more b4 I go to bed COME ONE i'll count to ten........................1.........................2............3...........4...............5.............6.............7............8................9.........10 I dont c any more hehehhe come on..... preeeeze gimme some more
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07-04-2001, 02:30 AM	#10
Cara Reelly HAtes All Guest Posts: n/a	I love u lol!!!!!!!!! yes u posted more i can sleep now!!!!!!!! u r da best good night all thanx for postin more u r da greatest person in da world hehehe go u
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07-04-2001, 12:31 AM	#2
BlairW_1 Mindanao Machiku Senior Member Join Date: Dec 21, 2000 Location: Temporarily in Ok, permanent location ^ there! Posts: 1,011	oh my goodness... oh my goodness... More soon!!!! Oh, welcome to the board, I noticed it was your first post! I'm Danielle, hope you can stay on here 4eva, and eva, and eva! Okay, just to warn you, I'm known widely on this board as a babbler. I'm a lot more babbley now, cuz I've been in a blonder-than-normal streak. Please don't think I'm stupid, I'm really not. Just to show you I can shut up when neccesary (sp? I'm tellin ya, spelling is my best subject, and I can't spell now! See? I get off topic easily...), I'm gonna Submit Reply now! (Oh, and I'll get closer to 700, too! ------------------ I'm the cutie with the booty, the hottie with the body, the honey with the money, I'm the baby, gotta love me! ¤.¸¸.·´¨`»Danielle«´¨`·.¸¸.¤ <3 ya!

07-04-2001, 12:57 AM	#3
Joanna Marie_1 Member Frequent Poster Join Date: Feb 03, 2001 Location: Sherwood, AR, USA Posts: 342	OMG this is soooooooooooo AWESOME! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE more soon! ------------------ (After the fake motorcycle accident) Jo:My head hurtz a lil Nat: A Concusion!!!!!! Jo's dad:The doctor examined her head and found nothing! Blair:Not even a lil bit of straw!

07-04-2001, 01:18 AM	#4
JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo A and J Forum 3000 Club Member Join Date: May 31, 2001 Location: .S.C. Posts: 3,070	Ohhh no.. says you didn't!! youc an't leave me in suspence like that!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! come on....please get it going!! it's great so far!! keep i tup!!!

07-04-2001, 01:41 AM	#5
PEZWCW Angry Aardvark Occasional Poster Join Date: Jul 04, 2001 Posts: 90	Sorry it isn't much TM: Let’s see what do I want. First I want all the people outside gone. Second I want all you to just leave me alone. K: I am sorry sir but neither of those requests are acceptable. But let me tell you this you can let me talk to my officer you have in their and then I will talk to you. TM: Listen lady I am the one who is in control here, not you. You will listen to every damn thing I have to say or I will blow this chicks brains out you got it. I’m in control. And with that he hung up K: Damn it. M: What?, what did he do to her, is she alright? Magda asked in a terrified voice. K: I don’t know Magda. All I know is that a man that has raped and murdered a possible five women has one of my people in there and there is not a thing I can do about it. Okay? CD seeing the Captains anger and frustration lead Magda to a patrol car a couple of feet away. CD: Magda you and the Captain yelling at each other isn’t going to help Jinny at all. You’re her partner and best friend and you have to stay clam and strong for her right now. Okay? M: Yeah, but CD I feel so helpless. My best friend is in their possibly hurt and I’m just out here chit chatting to people like nothing has happened I need to do something to help her CD. CD: Yeah I know what you mean. All of a sudden a scream ripped through the night and Magda and CD looked at the condeemed house in a horror, feeling useless> Should I keep going

07-04-2001, 01:45 AM	#6
Joanna Marie_1 Member Frequent Poster Join Date: Feb 03, 2001 Location: Sherwood, AR, USA Posts: 342	Hell yea u should keep goin!!!!!!! MORE NOW!UMMMMMMMMMM PLEASE? ------------------ (After the fake motorcycle accident) Jo:My head hurtz a lil Nat: A Concusion!!!!!! Jo's dad:The doctor examined her head and found nothing! Blair:Not even a lil bit of straw!

07-04-2001, 01:58 AM	#7
JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo A and J Forum 3000 Club Member Join Date: May 31, 2001 Location: .S.C. Posts: 3,070	damn!! just leave @ the best part!! come on...your killing me!!! If you stop now i will kill you!! lol......please continue, this sig reat!!

07-04-2001, 02:25 AM	#9
PEZWCW Angry Aardvark Occasional Poster Join Date: Jul 04, 2001 Posts: 90	Inside TM: Now you listen to me. Don’t move don’t speak don’t do anything. Do you know who I am* jinny nodded* So you know what I am capable of* once again she nodded* So you probably shouldn’t make me have to hit like I just did. * Jinny just looked at the wall. She couldn’t believe she was in this mess. Even if she did live the Captain would probably kill her for being so stupid. # the Phone rings# TM: Who is it? K: It is the captain what the hell just happened? TM: Well, your stupid ass inspector just tried to take my gun away and I just could not allow that, it wouldn’t make me a very good bad guy now wouldn’t you agree Captain K: let me talk to my inspector. TM: Ah, let me think for a second , no, I don’t think so. K: you know your stubbornness is getting both of us nowhere. TM: Fine if you must here’s your little inspector. J: cap, what’s going on. K: Are you alright Jinny? J: Not really Cap, my head is bleeding really bad and I feel really dizzy. K: does he have only one gun J: Yeah, Cap. TM: Okay that is enough. So Captain I gave you what you wanted now you give me something I want Outside 25 minutes later. K: Listen everybody it sounds like Jinny is hurt really bad, and I can’t let this man be in control any longer so I need two volunteers to go in and try to get control of the man without any one getting hurt. Any takers? Both CD and Magda raised their hands before any one had a chance. K: Okay go get ready you go in in 30 minutes. I'll post more tomoorw if you think it is any good

07-04-2001, 03:18 AM	#11
Nancy Exstead Member Occasional Poster Join Date: Apr 09, 2001 Location: Nebraska Posts: 42	yes, yes, yes, more, more, more. oh you need to post more now, but I guess I have to wait till morning. If I go to bed the night will go faster, good night. I can't sleep, I'll count sheep: 1...2...3..

07-04-2001, 04:09 AM	#12
PEZWCW Angry Aardvark Occasional Poster Join Date: Jul 04, 2001 Posts: 90	K: You ready? M: Of course, Captain, I was ready 5 hours ago. K: Well, when you go in please be, careful, I don’t need anymore hurt people. Also we want this man alive, okay? Magda I know Jinny is your beast friend, but you can’t think like that right now, okay? M: Yeah, whatever Cap. CD: Let’s go. Inside TM: Now what the hell do you think they are doing. J: I have no clue, remember I’ve been stuck in here with you. The man ripped his head around and ran at Jinny in anger. TM: I have had enough of your opinion He grabbed Jinny and punches her twice in the stomach and throws her to the ground and falls an top of her. Jinny tries to get away, but she is too weak to overpower him. The man tore Jinny’s shirt away from her body and started to lower his Put your hands up NOW Magda roared at the man when she saw what he was doing to her best friend. But the man reacted with rapid speed and quickly had the gun to Jinny’s bleeding head. M: Let her go. NOW TM: Ah, I don’t think so. CD: There is no where for you to go. J: Besides hell. TM: Shut-up you stupid bitch. In anger the man shot at Magda and CD> Jinny jumped out of the way and CD shot at the man and hit him in the shoulder, before he fainted in pain he turned to Jinny who was defenseless and shot her. M: NOOOOOOOO!, and she turned and opened fire at the man killing him. CD: Officer down, get in here now, officer down Magda ran to Jinny’s lifeless body and held her in her arms and chanted, O God please no, as blood gushed from Jinny’s body

07-04-2001, 09:49 AM	#13
Jinny_JoFan TD~FOL~ Senior Fan Occasional Poster Join Date: Jun 23, 2001 Location: Rhode Island Posts: 89	speechless this is so good!!!! keep writin pleeze

07-04-2001, 10:53 AM	#15
hockeychiC518 Member Forum Regular Join Date: Apr 06, 2001 Location: MA Posts: 539	omg how could just leave me there!!!??!?!!! u better add more soon!!!!!!!