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04-29-2001, 11:24 AM
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"Missed Opportunities"
A/N: This is my first ever DIVISION fanfic, so please give me your honest opinion. Any ideas or suggestions will be greatly appreciated! I should have the next chapter up this afternoon if you all like it!
Please Review! ------------------------ “Missed Opportunities” Jinny and Casey sat on a park bench. Casey had his head in his hands with a distraught look on his face, and Jinny had a worrisome look on her face as well as she stared at him. She leaned over and put her hand on his knee. “I know you’re probably getting some bad reps about your eh…situation…but you are a darn good cop. Don’t let what those guys at the station say effect you. They’re just talking about gays in general, not you. They don’t know about you. Don’t let dad bother you either, he’ll come around in his time.” Jinny patted her brother on the leg and watched for any sign of conformation that he understood what she was saying. She breathed a small sigh of relief when he looked up at her and forced a smile. She smiled back. “It’s who you are. You’ll be accepted for it, it just takes longer with some than with others. Trust me, I’ve been in situations similar to this before, just give it time.” She looked him in the eyes. “In the meantime you have my apartment, cell, pager, and work number. There is no reason that you can’t get up with me to talk, cause I’m always there to listen.” Casey nodded, “Yeah, Jin. Thanks, I’ll remember that.” “You better,” she said playfully. They sat in silence for a moment and a call came over Casey’s radio and he stood to leave. “Thanks.” Jinny rose to her feet as well and gave him a hug. “Anytime.” She watched as he walked out of sight… Once Casey was out of sight Jinny sat back down on the bench and put her face in her hands. “I don’t know how much more of this I can take,” she muttered under her breath. [Commercial] STARRING: Bonnie Bedelia-Kate McCafferty Nancy McKeon-Jinny Exstead Lisa Vidal-Magda Ramirez Tracey Needham-C.D. DeLorenzo Lela Rochon Fuqua-Angela Reid Guest Starring: Theodore Blumenthal: Jay Harrington The Captain walked out of her office and took a look at the clock on the wall. She then looked around the room. “Eight o’clock and it seems all’s here…except Ms. Exstead of course.” She didn’t even bother guessing where Jinny was, nor did she asked Magda if she had heard from her. Instead she just begin passing out files… “Jackson and Young, two bank robberies in as many hours. We’re thinking they were done by the same group--get on it.” She tossed the files to the two detectives and pulled out another one. “Kilven and Sylanne, murder downtown outside a Mervin’s Bakery. Suspect in custody, but we need some hard evidence against him or he’s free by noon.” The two detectives nodded, took the file, and left. The Captain looked down at another file and then up and Angela and C.D. and smiled. “Delorenzo and Reid, how are your babysitting skills?” C.D. dropped the papers she was holding on the desk and placed her hands on her hips, staring at the captain in disbelief. “You’ve gotta be kidding me.” “Nope,” the captain shook her head. “I think it will be fun,” Angela said with a cheerful attitude. “You would,” C.D. muttered as she took the file from the Captain and walked out of the Division. “Have fun,” Magda said as Angela followed C.D. out the door. The Captain turned to Magda with the last file. “Any idea where your partner is?” “Not a clue, Cap,” she responded shaking her head. The Captain sighed and crossed her arms. “If this continues then I will have to put Jinny on probation. There is no known need for this continued tardiness of hers…” Before she could finish her sentence Jinny walked in the door. Once seeing the Captain staring at her she stopped dead in her tracks. “This better be good, Exstead,” the Captain said. Jinny sighed, “At six this morning I got a call from Casey, my brother, saying he needed to talk. I’ve been with him ever since.” “Is everything ok with him?” the Captain said, still trying to keep her tough demeanor. Jinny looked at the floor and then at the Captain. “We’re working on it.” Kate nodded and handed the remaining file to Magda. “Try not to let it happen again.” With that she turned and entered her office. Jinny breathed a sigh of relief. “Everything ok?” Magda asked. “Yeah, for now I think so.” Magda nodded, and knowing not to push Jinny any further she dropped the subject. “Ready to go.” “Let’s do it.” They both left the Division… A girl of about 5 feet 7 inches in height stood in front of C.D. and Angela with her arms folded across her and her eyes looking each of them up and down. C.D. and Angela stood sizing up the girl as well… “Inspectord Delorenzo” “and Reid” The girl slightly nodded her head. “Jeffcoat, no fancy title.” C.D. turned to Angela and smirked, “Looks as if we have a comedian here.” “Yeah, but there’s nothing funny about watching somebody be beaten to near death is there?” Angela said bluntly. “I would certainly think not,” C.D. answered. They both turned to the young teenager and motioned to the nearest conference room. “Shall we?” C.D. asked. “Like I have a choice,” the girl mumbled. … … … … … … … … … … … … … Jinny and Magda sat in Jinny’s car outside “Jim Bob’s Drugstore.” They observing the place, while trying to determine how they should handle the case. “So somebody’s really been robbing this place nightly, and the local TV station hasn’t even heard about it yet?” Jinny asked. “At least we know this isn’t a ‘fame crime’.” “Yeah, but whatever is happening just isn’t making sense. I mean don’t you think its odd their security camera conveniently doesn’t work at the times of these robberies?” Magda said. “Yeah, but there’s a different employee at work during every robbery…Conspiracy maybe?” “It’s something.” They sat in silence for a minute. A smile slowly crept across Jinny’s face. She cranked the engine and drove around the block, so their car wouldn’t begin to look suspicious. “I have an idea,” she stated bluntly to Magda. “You look like someone in need of a new job…” Magda nodded with a smile, catching on to what Jinny was getting at… … … … … … … … … … … … … “Sweetheart, are you sure we can’t talk this over?” Kate begged to her daughter who was on the other end of the phone. “I mean two months is a long time.” There was a pause. “I know your aunt can afford it, but still, I will miss seeing you.” Yet, another pause. “I know we don’t see each other much as it is…” Yet, another pause. “New York isn’t just down the road, dear.” Kate bit her tongue, as it looked like she had aged five years within the past fifty minutes. “I guess there’s nothing I can do about it then…I’ll see you when you get back. I love you.” With that Kate hung up the phone, not giving Amanda another chance to say anything. Kate walked around her desk and then out of her office. She looked up at the clock, and seeing it was noon, left the Division… … … … … … … … … … … … … … [Commercials] [This message has been edited by ks (edited 04-29-2001).] |
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04-29-2001, 11:44 AM
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04-29-2001, 11:53 AM
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04-29-2001, 02:08 PM
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I totally agree here. MORE!!!!
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04-29-2001, 02:36 PM
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------------------ CD- And how long has it been since you got some Jinny? 24 hours. Jinny- Yes, mom, but i rountinly practice safe sex! Jinny- We're cops. Sworn to protect and serve. Jinny- I guess I'm just a dumb cop. Why don't you spell that out for me. |
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04-29-2001, 04:07 PM
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Thanks for the reviews! I'm really just setting things up in these first two chapters, so it will be getting interesting next time around I hope. I am going to TRY and write and actual police case, so sorry if I get my "terms" wrong and such. Any ideas and suggestions are greatly appreciated!
"Missed Opportunities 2" The manager of “Jim Bob’s Drugstore” eyed Magda cautiously. He was a man of about fifty, with greying hairs and a moustache. He rubbed at the edge of his moustache as he looked over Magda’s application once more. “Well, Ms. Loreana Elpirez, I see no reason as to not hire you. Is the morning shift good for you? It’s from 6 to 10.” “Why so short?” “It’s just a trial thing, but you will get paid regular amount.” “Four hours, and I still get the same amount of pay as if it were seven hours?” “Yes, ma’am. I’m not prejudice, and if this works, then it will all even out.” Magda nodded her head and smiled. “Sounds good to me, sir.” The man nodded and slowly stood. “The assistant manager will be in shortly, and it will be his duty to show you the ropes and such, because I have a business meeting in a short while.” The man looked at his watch. “If you come back at two I’m sure he will be glad to show you around.” Magda stood and nodded her head in agreement. She then shook the man’s hand and thanked him. “Have a nice day.” She left. … … … … … … … … … … C.D. walked around the table, never taking her eye off the girl. She wasn’t sure what to do. She hadn’t been instructed to question the girl, but she felt odd just sitting there in silence. Angela sat across from the girl, wondering what it would be like to witness such a brutal attack. She too had no clue what to do, for she had never been put in this situation before. She was secretly looking to C.D. for leadership and guidance on this one… Cynthia Jeffcoat folded her arms and stared up at the ceiling. “You two are real fun to be around. I thought I’d get stuck with a bunch of bozos who wouldn’t shut up, but instead I got stuck with a bunch of bozos who won’t talk.” C.D. stopped her pacing and bent so she was eye level with the teenager. “Cynthia, if you want to talk then feel free to do so. It’s obvious this is something you’ve never been through before so we’re trying to not push your buttons too hard. If you want to get into interrogations then please let us know and we will begin questioning you until you turn blue from lack of oxygen. Please, however, do not get on our case for trying to give you a break.” The girl starred at C.D. and then looked at the floor, not saying a word. A small smile crept across Angela’s face at seeing how C.D. had just handled the situation. She then watched as C.D. motioned for her to step out in the hall. C.D. closed the door behind her and turned to Angela. “This kid is gonna be torn to shreds on the witness stand, and she isn’t even talking to us. I say we take her one and one, see if she’ll give either one of us an inch.” Angela nodded in agreement. “We can do it over lunch. I’ll go order us something.” C.D. nodded and watched as Angela walked off. She then positioned herself against the wall, deciding to give the girl some time to herself. … … … … … … … … … Jinny and Magda sat in Jinny’s car outside a Wal-Mart. They were each eating their lunch that they had just bought at a fast-food joint. “So he offered you normal pay, for just four hours?” Jinny questioned, making sure she had heard Magda right. “Weird, I know. The guy’s place has gotten ripped off six times in the past two weeks, and he has the money to pay his employees twice what the average store clerk makes, for shorter shifts. …It just doesn’t add up.” “And you’re supposed to go meet with assistant manager and start tomorrow? He didn’t even run your application to any of your references.” “Good thing, too. I think he would’ve gotten suspicious.” “Yeah, well he’s gotten me suspicious just hiring you on the spot like that.” “I know, Jin. Soon we’ll find out what’s going on though.” “Yeah, I guess… Something is feeling odd though.” They sat in silence for a few minutes… “So, are we gonna tell the Captain about this?” Jinny asked. “It’s policy to inform her of all our operations.” “Yeah, but you and I both know this is something she shut down immediately.” “But if she does find out about it second hand…” “Yeah, I guess you’re right. She’s on my case as it is.” Magda laughed and took a sip of her drink… “Everything ok with Casey?” “Yeah, he’s just having a hard time living a ‘secret life’.” “I thought your family knew.” “His fellow cops don’t though.” Magda nodded knowingly and then smiled at Jinny for encouragement. “It’ll be ok though, Jin. You’ll see.” “Hope so.” Jinny put her food aside and cranked her car. “Better get you to work so you can meet your new boss.” “What about Cap?” “I’ll go tell her about it as soon as I drop you off.” Magda nodded as they pulled out of the parking lot and began their drive to “Jim Bob’s Drugstore”… … … … … … … … … … … Kate McCafferty took out her cell-phone and put in a call to the Division. “Dianna, hey, it’s McCafferty here. Please direct all my calls to my cell, and if anyone needs me please inform them I’m at Anchorside.” She pushed the END button on her cell phone and motioned for another drink… [Commercial] |
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04-29-2001, 04:29 PM
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This Rules can't wait for more!
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04-29-2001, 04:47 PM
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This is great!! i can't wait for more.
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04-30-2001, 08:37 PM
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MMAAANNNN, this is great, I can picture everything you type. It's really good. Keep it up.
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06-15-2001, 06:58 PM
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Okay I just read this like today, because, well I just registered like today. But I've been reading the fics for a while. Anyway I really like the idea on this one. I've noticed that nothing has been posted in a long time, so I didn't know if anything else would be, but I'd really like to read more. Thanks!
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06-21-2001, 09:48 AM
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Just wanted to say I'm sorry for not posting in like forever. I'm gonna finish this fic today and post ALL of it tonight. Hope someone is still interested!
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06-21-2001, 09:59 AM
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THIS WAS TOTALLY ATD!!! please post more soon cuz u know you want to~
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