Okay...first fan-fic I've ever posted

[JJ]

Okay um...remember in the ep were somebody was after Jinny? Well she said that her and Teddy had been out 4 times. This is one of the times they went out. I wrote this a while back like after the ep where Teddy first asked Jinny out and she kept saying no. So...tell me if you like and tell me if you don't like it. Please. Here's a little bit of it

Always


(((Station)))
Jinny: Yes, Teddy. Yea. Okay. All right. Bye (looks at her cell phone and presses the ‘off’ button hard)
Magda: (grins) Theodore bugging you.
Jinny: (shoots a glare at M) What does it look like? (Sweetly sarcastic)
Magda: He’ll stop. Where you going tonight? (Flips through papers on her desk)
Jinny: Anchorside, were else?
Magda: (nods, gets up and heads for K’s office)
Jinny: (answers the phone at her desk) Exstead? (Slams the phone down)
Magda: (stops on her way to door and looks at J)
Jinny: (looks at M pleadingly) I’ll take them in to Cap, tell him to go away. (Jumps up, and takes the folder from M)
Magda: Who is it?
Jinny: (stares at the phone as it starts to ring. She glares at M, and reaches for the phone) Exstead. Yes, Teddy. No where else. Huh? (Looks at M) All right, this one time. What is the- (pauses) what? Okay, see ya. No, Teddy, I’m a cop I think I can find it. Okay, bye! (Slams the phone down and glares at M)
Magda: What did he want?
Jinny: He wants to meet at some little Irish place called Spring Clovers.
Magda: Spring Clovers? I’ve never heard of it before.
Jinny: I’m gonna go run by it and check it out, make sure it’s clean and has bar.
Magda: (Grins) okay.
Kate: (sticks her head out her door) Jinny.
Jinny: (keys in hand looks over at Kate) Yea.
Kate: Got a call down in the mission district. An old lady said she saw a couple of suspicious looking teen guys. Looked like they were dealing drugs and they were hanging out near her place. 404 St.
Jinny: I’ll check it out.
Kate: (nods and looks M, who is standing beside her) are you coming in?
Magda: Oh, yeah.
Kate: (rolls her eyes)

((((In Car)))
Jinny: (Driving towards the mission district, when a sign catches her eye and makes her pull over. J looks at the sign and reads “Spring Clovers”) So this is this place. (All of the sudden J jumps when a face pops in front of her) Teddy! (Yells)
Teddy: (smiling, motions for her to roll down her window)
Jinny: What are you doing?
Teddy: I’ve known you long enough that you would check out the place before you came with me tonight. So…(bends down to eye level with J)
Jinny: Actually-
Teddy: (leans forward and kisses her)
(After a minute, T backs up)
Jinny: Actually I-
Teddy: (Gives her another quick kisses then opens her door) Wanna go in for a drink?
Jinny: (hesitates for a moment then follows Teddy inside)

Well, what do you think?? Should I continue

[NancyMcKeonFan8976]

good job, you should register!!! i love it!

[JJ]

Thanx! Here's some more

(((An hour later)))
Jinny and Teddy at the bar, each having a drink and talking.
Jinny: (reaches for her ringing cell phone) Exstead. (Her words are a little slurred) Cap? (Straightens up a little) What? I-I’ll be there in ten. (Shoves her cell in her coat pocket and grabs her keys)
Teddy: What’s the matter?
Jinny: Oh, jeez I gotta go. (Starts to leave)
Teddy: (grabs her arm and stops her) Jinny what’s the matter?
Jinny: (jerks her arm away and hurries out of the restaurant)

(((Station)))
Jinny enters. CD, Angela, Magda and Kate are all huddled around M’s desk.
Jinny: (slows down when she sees the group huddled together)
Kate (looks up and sees J) Where were you? I told you to get down to the district immediately.
Jinny: I’m sorry.
Kate: What happened?
Jinny: (sighs and looks upset)
Teddy: (walks in behind J) Jinny, what’s the matter? You left the bar in such a hurry I though something was wrong?
Kate: (Sees T and glares at J)
Jinny: (shake her head and closes her eyes) No, no, no.
Kate: Get rid of him then in my office. (Leaves)
Jinny: (turns to Teddy and glares at him) Why did you follow me?
Teddy: I wanted to know what was the matter Jinn. You left in such a hurry I thought-. (Puts a hand on her arm)
Jinny: Teddy will you leave me be for just a day or two. I need some space. You know you’ve been calling me every five minutes ever since we’ve been so called ‘dating’. I’m a big girl and I’m sick and tired of being called after. I can take care of myself, now will you back off. (Glaring at T)
Teddy: (looks hurt) If that’s what you want Jinny. (Pulls his arm away and leaves)
Jinny: (Watches him leave, then turns towards the M, CD, and A)
(They stare for a minute then, turn back to what they were doing)
Jinny: (towards the group) Not a word from you three.(Leaves for K’s office)
CD: (winces) Oh, bad move Jinny.
Angela: I think she just lost a good guy.
Magda: (shakes her head)

(((Kate’s Office)))
Jinny: What!? I can't go home ''till I found thouse kids...that could forever(Yelling at K)
Kate: (pulls off her glasses) Jinny, because of you an old woman was beat up and thank-fully in stable condition at the Med. Her house was stripped clean of everything and all because Inspector Jinny Exstead, decided to have a drink with her boy friend and not do her job.
Jinny: (looks mad) Teddy is not my boy-friend.
Kate: (sarcastically speaks) Oh, I’m sorry. The word around the Division says different.
Jinny: What?
Kate: (looks at J) You heard my orders.
Jinny Your gonna kill me one day working like this.
Kate: (sits) I wouldn’t have to if you for once in your life did your job right.
Jinny: (glares at K then leaves)

[BlairW_1]

Great, I can't wait for more! You should write fanfics more often.

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From Lisa Whelchel's book, "Creative Corrections"

"The eyes of the Lord are everywhere, keeping watch on the wicked and the good." Proverbs 15:3

"Give thanks in all circumstances, for this is God's will for you in Jesus Christ." 1 Thessalonians 5:18

"A gossip betrays a confidence; so avoid a man who talks too much." Proverbs 20:19

~*^Danielle^*~
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[JJ]

Here's some more-

(((That night)))
( In Flashes- Teddy driving in his car- back to Jinny, flipping through papers on her desk sighs and puts her head in her hand. Teddy- gets to his apartment and unlocks the door. Jinny- gets up and gets something to drink. Teddy- slouches on his couch and looks in a daze. Jinny- drinking her water slowly crumples the cup and looks like she is thinking. ((Next day- still in flashes)) Jinny: looks tired as she drops some papers on K’s desk. Teddy- getting in his car and heading to work. Jinny- gets a call, grabs her keys and leaves. Teddy- arriving at work. Jinny- in mission district, holding gun to two teenage kids with drugs in their hands. Teddy- fumbles for his keys in his pocket and unlocks the door to his office. Jinny- Pushing the two kids in her patrol car and heads back to the Division. Teddy- slumps in his chair, closes his eyes, thinking of Jinny. Jinny- Leaving the two kids with another officer, she goes to her desk and sits in her chair, leaning forward she puts her head in her hands and sighs, looking at fresh paperwork on her desk. ((That night)) (Still in flashes) Jinny- taking notes from a young woman whose house was robbed. Teddy- locking the door to his office, he gets in his car. Jinny- sitting back in at her desk, she rubs her eyes and yawns. Teddy- pulls up to Anchorside, hesitates, then gets out. Jinny- washing her hands, she looks at herself in the mirror and sighs. Teddy- drunk, walking out the bar, swaying, gets in his car and fumbles around for his car then takes about a minute to find the ignition. Back to Jinny)
Jinny: (enters K’ so office and drops a folder full of papers on her desk.
Kate: (looks up and pulls off her glasses)
Jinny: I’m going home. (Points to the lady outside) there’s all the info. (Leaves)

Well??

[hockeychiC518]

awesome, please add more soon!

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[NancyJoJinny]

I LOVE IT!

[BlairW_1]

Great! I can't wait to see what happens! I can't believe Teddy's drunk!

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From Lisa Whelchel's book, "Creative Corrections"

"The eyes of the Lord are everywhere, keeping watch on the wicked and the good." Proverbs 15:3

"Give thanks in all circumstances, for this is God's will for you in Jesus Christ." 1 Thessalonians 5:18

"A gossip betrays a confidence; so avoid a man who talks too much." Proverbs 20:19

~*^Danielle^*~
LYLAS/LYLAB!

E-mail me at Basketbaiichick@aol.com, BlairWarner33@yahoo.com, BlairWarner@gurlmail.com, MagdaRamirez1@AIM, or Magda_Ramirez_033@hotmail.com

[JJ]

Here's more

(((Next day)))
Jinny (walks in the station, looking more tired then ever. Bags are under her eyes, her hair a little messed up. She slumps in her chair and puts her head in her hands)
Magda: (looks over at J) what’s the matter? I thought your double shifts were over?
Jinny: (groans) it is. I went home and I tossed and turned in bed all night. I felt like something was wrong. I could not sleep for the life of me. I drifted off for about ten minutes then woke back up. Over and over again, it was terrible.
Magda: Yea well, trying having a boy who has the flu. That’s terrible. He’s up all night and I’m up with him.
Jinny: Flu? Poor Ben. I’ll come by and see him later.
Magda: All right. Just no stories. (Grins at J)
Jinny: (grins, then reaches for the phone at her desk) Exstead? Yes. No, I don’t. I haven’t seen him in two days. That’s not like him. (Looks at M) When was the last time you saw him? Last night? (Scribbles stuff on a piece of paper) Which way? Okay, I’ll check it out.
Magda: ( looks at J as she hangs up the phone) what was that?
Jinny: A guy that works with Teddy said that he never came in this morning. That he was in and out of it yesterday and that when he left last night, he seemed…well he didn’t go home in his usually direction. (Looks at her piece of paper)
Magda: How did this guy know to call you?
Jinny: My name and number was pinned on Teddy’s bulletin board in his office.
Magda: (sips her coffee) Maybe he got sick and hasn’t had time to call in.
Jinny: (shakes her head) No. He would call in no matter how sick. (Thinks a minute) Something isn’t right. (Gets up and grabs her coat)
Magda: (looks at J) Where are you going?
Jinny: (pulling on her coat) I’m gonna go to Teddy’s place and if he isn’t there I’ll call back here and then I want you to send out some people to look for him. I’ll be looking on my own.
Magda: (nods as J leaves)

(((At apartment)))
Jinny: (walks into Teddy’s apartment building and goes straight to the information desk) Yea, have you seen the tenant who lives in Room B7, Theodore Blumenthal, at all since yesterday? (Shows lady her police ID)
Lady: (thinks a minute) Come to think of it, last time I saw him was when he left for work yesterday morning. I’m not here all of the time so, he might’ve come back. I’m usually here in the evenings though, and see him when he comes back, but my little girl got sick and my assistant took over.
Jinny: Give me the key to his apartment.
Lady: (takes a key from her pocket and opens a locked drawer. Pulling out the key, she hands it to J) Here you go.
Jinny: (goes up the stairs at a face pace. Reaching T’s door, she first checks to see if it is locked. A surprised looks comes on her face when the door isn’t locked)
(After a thorough check, and no sign of T. J returned the key and sat thinking in her car)
Jinny: Magda. (Calls M on her cell) Yea, no Teddy. No I’m not worried, it’s just…not like him. Look I’m gonna search around and if I find nothing, send out a warrant. (Pauses) Yes, a warrant. A definite way to get him. Yea thanks! (Starts her car up and pulls out. A couple streets down, J stops at a red light. All of the sudden a car goes flying past her and smashes the side of another car going across)
Jinny: (ducks down. Then looks back up. The car that had run the red light was flipped over and J knew any minute it was going to explode. The other car’s side was smashed in the driver was hanging over the steering wheel. Running out of the car, J goes to the car that ran the red light. Bending down she looked through the cracked window into the driver seat. What she saw almost made her yell. Teddy was hanging upside, blood covered, in the seat) Oh, no! Hang on Teddy. (Smashing the window with her foot, there was now a crowd of people and in the distance fire engines could be heard. Reaching in, J fumbled for the buckle that strapped T in)
Teddy: (groans)
Jinny: Hold on Teddy. Hold on. (Carefully J pulled T out and laid him on the sidewalk. Crouching over J checked for a pulse) Come on Teddy! Come on. (J cradled T’s head in her lap and looked up a the gathering crowd) (Shouts) Somebody get an ambulance over here now! (mumbles) Hold On, Teddy, hold on.
(All of the sudden the car shoots up in flames and explodes. Metal goes flying everywhere. J, with all of her effort, pulles T away, but then, a piece of the car door went flying through the air and crashed into J’s side)
Jinny: Ahh! (Let’s go of Teddy and falls to the ground, banging her head on the concrete, J blacks out)

Well?

[Teddys_Angel_Jinny]

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is soooooo awesome! You have to write more soon!

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God bless you one and all.
~~~<@ Kenzie @>~~~

"Greater love hath no man than this, that he lay down his life for his friend."
§ John 15:13 KJV §

[BlairW_1]

I agree wiff Kenzie, OMG, more!!! This is ATD!!!

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From Lisa Whelchel's book, "Creative Corrections"

"The eyes of the Lord are everywhere, keeping watch on the wicked and the good." Proverbs 15:3

"Give thanks in all circumstances, for this is God's will for you in Jesus Christ." 1 Thessalonians 5:18

"A gossip betrays a confidence; so avoid a man who talks too much." Proverbs 20:19

~*^Danielle^*~
LYLAS/LYLAB!

E-mail me at Basketbaiichick@aol.com, BlairWarner33@yahoo.com, BlairWarner@gurlmail.com, MagdaRamirez1@AIM, or Magda_Ramirez_033@hotmail.com

[Jo's Girl]

OMG!!!! You gotta write more

[Jo_Po]

Great Job!!!!!!!! This story is really good, please post some more soon!

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Blair: (sighs)
Jo: "I hate it when you do that!"
Blair: "What?"
Jo: "Sigh!"
Blair: "I don't sigh!"
Jo: "Well if it isn't a sigh you've got a slow leak!"
Blair: (sighs)
Jo: "You did it again!"
Blair: "That's called breathing."
Jo: "You do it just to annoy me!"
Blair: "No,I do it to keep from dieing."
Jo: "Now there's an idea!!"
~Steph

[JJ]

Here's more:


(((In Magda’s car)))
CD and Magda are in the car heading for a call about a serious accident.
Magda: Wonder what kind of accident it was? (Turns a street)
CD: The usually probably. Teen D.U.I, partying to all hours of the nights then heads home and crashes into another car.
Magda: (grins) Probably. (They arrive at the site. And see firemen putting two people on stretchers, and a couple other getting a man out of the other car) Hey, that’s Jinn’s car. (M points to J’s red patrol car)
CD: Yea, you think she’s here?
Magda: (looks closely at the two people getting put on stretchers) Oh my- is that Jinny?
CD: (looks hard, then hurries out of the car with M)
Magda: What happened? (M asked a guy watching from the corner)
Guy: The car ran red a light and crashed into that one. Then a lady got the guy out of the car that ran the light. She was yelling his name and then the car exploded (pauses) there were so many fumes, I didn’t see what happened after that.
Magda: (turns to CD) Could it have been Jinny?
CD: (turns to the guy) Did you see the whole thing.
Guy: (nods)
CD: Where did the lady come from?
Guy: (looks around and points to J’s patrol car) That car.
Magda: (wastes no time and runs for the ambulance)

More later. I just finished cutting the grass and I gotta take a shower.

[Jo's Girl]

Awesome i'm practicing for my voice competition tonight sort of so i gotta go!