New Fan Fic opinions wanted

[Ags2000]

This is my first Fan Fic. I am still writing it, but I wanted some input from y'all about what y'all think.

I finally wrote chapter 3. Check it out.

I've edited a few things that is whay it says this has been edited. As I've been writing, I go back and rewrite things. No biggie.


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DECISIONS

CHAPTER 1

The blonde looked at her watch, it said 12:30 am. She hoped nobody was up, especially Mrs. Garrett. It would be hard to explain to her why she was so late again. She would just have to come up with another excuse, and she was beginning to run out of excuses. Nobody would understand. It was all her fault, wasn’t it? Besides he DID apologized every time.

She decided to come in through the store as usual. If anybody were up waiting for her, they were always in the living room. They would not know she had come in. The blonde unlocked the door leading into Edna’s Edibles and went inside. She silently closed and relocked the door. She opened up her compact and looked at her face once more, just to make sure that the bruises were covered up incase she ran into anybody. She could explain the swelling, that wouldn’t be exactly a lie she DID fall down.

She walked into the kitchen, thinking she was in the clear when it happened. Sitting at the cabinet with a drink was, “Natalie,” she said, “What are you doing up?” she asked plastering a fake smile on her face.

Natalie looked at the blonde and then her watch in surprise, “I was just about to ask you the same question Blair,” Natalie said with a sly grin on her face.

“Oh, well, ah, you know how it is when you’re out with the college crowd,” said Blair.

“That’s funny,” replied Natalie, “According to Jo, the group split up at 10. At which time Jo said you and Robert went off on your own.”

“Well maybe both Jo and yourself need to mind your own business,” snapped Blair.

Natalie looked shocked, she didn’t mean to make Blair upset, she was just kidding with her. It was at that moment that Natalie noticed that the right side of Blair’s face was swollen. “Blair,” she exclaimed, “your face, what happened?”

A look of horror crossed Blair’s face for about half a second, until Blair remembered she had just checked to make sure that the bruises were covered with make-up. Natalie must be talking about the swelling thought Blair. “Oh, that,” said Blair thinking fast. “You see”, started Blair, “ I fell down, and I …hit the side of my face on the ground,” said Blair.

“Uh huh,” said Natalie, not believing a word of it, but knowing that it was not wise to pursue it at this time because Blair was being so defensive about it.

“Well, I’m off to bed,” Blair announced. “Good night Natalie.”

“Night Blair,” Natalie replied.

She watched as Blair went up the stairs to their room. Something wasn’t right here, Natalie thought. The journalist in her was just itching to ask Blair more questions about the swelling and her night with Robert, but she knew better. Blair would talk when she was ready. Until then, Natalie thought, I’ll just have to do some investigating on my own. Natalie grinned and went up to bed.

CHAPTER 2

The next morning, Blair got up earlier then usual. She wanted to fix her face up before anyone woke up. Blair went into the bathroom and looked into the mirror. “Oh my Lord,” whispered Blair. The entire right side of her face was black, blue and very swollen. Oh boy, she thought, I have my work cut out for me. Blair pulled out her make-up kit and got to work.

2 Hours Later

“Come on Blair,” exclaimed the brunette. “Other people have to get ready for class ya know.”

“I’m almost through Jo,” Blair sighed. “Don’t get so uptight.”

“Uptight, me?” asked Jo. “Why would I be uptight? I mean, I got up early this morning to get into the bathroom before you, and you were already there. What did you do, sleep in there?”

“Of course not you silly twit,” said Blair opening the door, “ The bathroom is yours.”

Jo stared at Blair, she looked different somehow but she couldn’t place what it was. Blair got a worried look on her face. “What’s wrong?” asked Blair worried that Jo would see the bruises.

“I don’t know,” said Jo shrugging, “I guess I figured that with all the time you spent in the bathroom this morning, that you would look really different. You know, you really shouldn’t have to spend all that time getting ready for ANY man. Oh well, what do I know,” Jo said as she walked past Blair into the bathroom.

Whew, that was close, thought Blair. Jo is the last person I would want to explain this to. She just would NOT understand thought Blair. Blair walked down the stairs and saw Mrs. Garrett and Tootie setting the table for breakfast.

“Good morning Mrs. G, morning Tootie,” said Blair hiding the right side of her face.

“Good morning Blair,” said Mrs. Garrett.

“Morning Blair, did you have a good time last night with Robert?” asked Tootie with a sly grin on her face.

Blair rolled her eyes, how many times was she going to have to answer questions about HIM Blair thought. Tootie was always after some gossip; well this is one thing that Tootie was NOT going to find out about Blair decided. “I had a wonderful time last night,” said Blair putting a fake smile on her face. She turned to Mrs. Garrett. “I’m not hungry this morning Mrs. G.,” said Blair. “I’m going to head on off to campus and I’ll be back early tonight.”

“Well, if you’re sure Blair,” said Mrs. Garrett.

Blair turned too her right and headed towards the store.

“Why are you going that way Blair?” asked Tootie. “The cars are out front.”

“Well, you see,” Blair started, “I parked my car out back when I came in last night so that I would not wake anybody up”

Tootie shrugged, “Okay.”

Blair sighed, at least they believed that, thought Blair, if I had to go out the front door, they would have seen the swelling for sure. Blair walked out the door and headed for her car. She had some things to think over, and someone to talk to.

CHAPTER 3

Natalie came down the stairs and looked around. “Has anybody seen Blair this morning?” she asked.

Tootie looked up at Natalie. “Hey Nat, yea I’ve seen Blair. She’s already left this morning.”

Natalie looked at her watch. It wasn’t even 7:30 yet. “She’s leaving kinda early this morning isn’t she?”

“What’s with 20 questions about Blair this morning Nat?” asked Tootie.

“Huh? Oh, nothing, I just wanted to talk to her this morning," replied Natalie.

"Oh, well she left about 10 minutes ago. She said she wasn’t hungry and that she'd be back early tonight," said Tootie.

"Oh, well I guess I'll talk to her then. Come on Tootie, let’s get to school," said Natalie walking toward the front door.

Tootie looked at her watch, "But Nat, it's barely 7:30. We've got plenty of time."

"I know," said Natalie, "I need to do some research at the library before class though."

"I didn't think you had any homework to do," said Tootie.

"I don't, it's for…something else," replied Natalie, "Come on Tootie, I really need to do this."

"Fine, fine, I'm coming," said Tootie, "Bye Mrs. Garrett. Nat and I are leaving now"

"Okay girls, have a good day at school," Mrs. Garrett called from the kitchen.

Natalie and Tootie walked out the door and headed off to Eastland. When they arrived at school, Natalie walked over to the library to start her research into Robert Michael Masterson III.

The first thing that Natalie did was to look up in the newspaper index to see if his name was listed. She found 3 articles that listed his name. Natalie copied down the information about which papers he was listed in. She then went and found the articles and made copies of them so that she could read them later. Natalie looked at her watch, she had to leave now if she didn't want to be late for class. Natalie grabbed the copies and raced out of the library to class.

After class, Tootie walked up to Natalie, “I thought you were going to be late there for a minute.”

“Hey, I made it didn’t I. That’s all that counts,” said Natalie grinning.

“Come on Nat, let’s grab some lunch,” said Tootie.

“You go on without me. I’m going to the newspaper office to do some research,” said Natalie.

Tootie looked at Natalie, “Ok, you want me to save you something?” asked Tootie.

“No that’s ok, I’ll have something sent up there,” said Natalie waving to Tootie, “See you later.”

Natalie took on off to the newspaper office so that she could read in peace. Natalie opened the door and looked in. Good, she thought, nobody is here yet. Natalie walked over to her desk and sat down to read the articles.

The first article was written in 1981. The article was in the society pages and it was about Robert’s family. Natalie decided to look into his background a bit more. Natalie picked up the phone and made a few phone calls to see about getting a copy of his birth certificate. A few minutes later, a man came to the phone, “Hey Nat."


“Hey Peter, how are you?” asked Natalie.

“Pretty good, what can I do for you?” asked Peter.

“I need some help. I’m trying to get some background information on a guy, and I can’t seem to be getting anywhere quickly. I was wondering if you could look up a birth certificate for me and maybe a drivers license as well,” said Natalie.

“Hey, I owe you with all the help you have given me over the years. Who is this guy?” asked Peter.

“His name is Robert Michael Masterson III. According to the society page, he was born in New York City in 1965. His parents are Barbara and Robert Michael Masterson II. I’d appreciate anything you can find out about him on your end. I’m still trying to dig some stuff up here,” said Natalie.

“No problem Natalie, I’ll do what I can and get back to you as soon as possible,” replied Peter.

“Okay, thanks. Give me a call at the newspaper office. I’ll be here until 4. I really appreciate this Peter,” said Natalie.

“It’s my pleasure. I’ll call you back soon. Bye Nat.”

“Bye Peter.”

Natalie hung up the phone and smiled. Well that’s one less thing to worry about thought Natalie pulling out the next article. This article was a newer article. It was written in 1982. Natalie started reading it and sucked in her breathe. “I remember this,” said Natalie out loud.

“Remember what?” asked a voice.

Natalie looked up startled. Standing there was Nancy.

“Nancy,” said Natalie standing up and walking up to her, “What brings you back to Eastland?”

“Oh not much,” Nancy replied, “ I was in the neighborhood and I thought I’d stop by.”

“Well I’m glad you did. Can I ask you a couple of question?” asked Natalie.

“Uh-oh, you have your reporters hat on, this must be serious,” said Nancy, “Fire away with your questions.”

“Okay, first, about 2 years ago you and Roger had a breakup right?” asked Natalie.

“I guess, I don’t really remember the dates,” replied Nancy.

“Didn’t you date another guy for a bit that was later arrested?” Natalie continued.

Nancy looked right at Natalie, “Why do you want to know that?”

“What was his name Nancy? This is important,” pleaded Natalie.

Nancy sighed, “His name was Rob, Robert Michael Masterson III. Now why do you need to know?” asked Nancy.

“I think he might be doing something to somebody, but I’m not sure. Nancy, how did you meet him?” asked Natalie.

“Well, he was dating Emily, and then they just broke up. Emily told me it was because her parents found out she was dating an older guy. I had just broke up with Roger and Rob showed up at the pizza place. He asked me out and we dated for a bit,” said Nancy.

“Why did y’all break up?” asked Natalie.

“I’d rather not talk about it,” said Nancy quietly.

“Look Nancy, if I’m right about this guy, all he is doing is hurting women. Did he hit you? Is that why you broke it off?” asked Natalie.

“N-no,” stammered Nancy, “What makes you think that?”

Natalie showed Nancy the 2 articles. “The first article says that charges were brought up against him for assault. The next article is about a month later and it says the charges were dropped. In both articles, it says that the complainant’s names were withheld because of their age. That IS the time period you were dating him, isn’t it Nancy?” asked Natalie.

Nancy looked at the articles and then looked and Natalie and back at the articles. “I-I didn’t think anyone would ever figure it out,” said Nancy starting to cry. “I started dating him because I thought he was a hunk, and to get back at Roger. It was never anything serious for me. I was really only doing it to make Roger jealous. Then Roger and I made up and I broke up with Robert. He went ballistic, he started yelling and screaming, and then he-he-he hit me. Do you remember, that nasty bruise I had on the side of my face you kept asking about? Well, that was from Robert. He scared me then Nat. I knew then it was a good thing to get out of the relationship. I filed charges against him. That did not make him very happy. He kept coming around the dorms at night and he would leave me notes to let me know he had been there. He kept asking me to come back to him and I kept saying no. He called me daily threatening me. I just started ignoring him, hoping he would just go away. One night, he followed me when Roger and I went to a movie. When we came out he was waiting for us. He jumped Roger and beat him up pretty bad. He said if I didn’t drop the charges, he would come after me next. I was scared, so I dropped the charges. I never saw him after that.”

“Oh Nancy,” said Natalie, giving Nancy a hug. “I wish I could have been there for you.”

“That’s okay,” said Nancy wiping away her tears, “It’s not like I put out what he was doing. I had trouble enough trying to keep the entire story from Tootie,” said Nancy smiling.

“Yea, she was a pretty good gossip hound wasn’t she?” said Natalie grinning.

“Listen, if he is going out with someone you know, tell her to dump him NOW, before it’s too late. He is dangerous. The littlest things would make him snap. I found out later from Emily that he had been hitting her. I’m sure the list of girls goes on and on from there. I don’t even what to know how many people he has done this to,” said Nancy.

“Well I do,” said Natalie with a determined look on her face.

“Please be careful Natalie, I don’t want anything happening to you,” pleaded Nancy.

“Don’t worry, I’ll be careful. I promise,” said Natalie.

“Okay. Well, I need to get going. It was really good seeing you Natalie. Take care, and be careful,” said Nancy getting up to leave.

“I will. It was good seeing you Nancy. Don’t make yourself a stranger, come by anytime,” said Natalie watching Nancy leave.

After Nancy left, Natalie sat down, this is worse then I thought. About that time the phone rang, Natalie answered it, “Hello?”

“Natalie? This is Peter, I’ve got something for you, but all it is, is confusing.”

“What do you mean Peter? What did you find out?” asked Natalie.

“I found out that he is dead,” said Peter.

“Say what?” asked Natalie.

“Let me clarify myself. There was a Robert Michael Masterson III born in New York City 1965 to Barbara and Robert Michael Masterson II, but he was a sick baby. He died before he was a week old. Who ever this guy is, he has taken this kid's identity. I’ll keep searching and see what I can find out. I’ll call you at home when I find out anything,” said Peter.

“Okay, thanks a bunch Peter,” said Natalie, “I owe YOU one now. I’ll talk to you later, bye.”

“Bye Natalie, good luck.”

Natalie hung up the phone and sat there thinking for a few minutes. I wonder, thought Natalie, if he dated both Emily and Nancy, whom else did he date from Eastland? Well, only one way to find out she thought. Natalie got up and went to go find Emily to ask her some questions.


CHAPTER 4

When Blair didn’t come in early that night like she said she was going to, Natalie started to worry. She had investigated Robert that day, and what she found worried her. Natalie was waiting for Jo and Tootie to come home so that she could tell them what she had found out about Robert that day.

Natalie was pacing the floor when Jo and Tootie finally got home. “Jo, Tootie, where have you guys been,” exclaimed Natalie. "Look, it doesn’t matter we have to talk now. I think Blair might be in big trouble and we have to do something before she gets hurt bad,” said Natalie.

“Hey, slow down Nat,” said Jo.

“Yea,” agreed Tootie, “I mean it can’t be all that serious, can it?

“It can and it is,” exclaimed Natalie. “Look I’ll start at the beginning okay?”

“The beginning is always good,” agreed Jo as she and Tootie sat down on the couch.

“Okay,” Natalie started, “I was up late when Blair finally came in at 12:30 this morning.

“12:30!” exclaimed Jo and Tootie at the same time.

“Wow,” said Tootie, “If Mrs. Garrett finds out, somebody’s gonna be in trooouble.”

“Knock it off Tootie,” said Natalie sounding exasperated, “This is serious you guys, just listen.”

“Okay, okay,” said Tootie.

“Go on Nat,” said Jo.

“Anyway,” Natalie continued, “Blair and I got to talking about her night and she became really defensive when I asked her where she had been. She tried telling me she lost track of time what with being out with the gang and all.”

“But,” interrupted Jo, “she left with Robert at 10.”

“That’s what I said,” exclaimed Natalie. “Then Blair said that we, you and myself Jo, should mind our own business.”

“That doesn’t sound like Blair,” interjected Tootie, “even when she is being snooty.”

“I know,” replied Natalie, “I was about to point that out to her when I noticed her face” Natalie paused for dramatization. “The entire right side of her face was swollen.”

“Swollen!?!” exclaimed Tootie and Jo in unison. A shocked look appeared on their faces.

“And that’s not the worst of it,” continued Natalie, “ She was wearing more make-up then usual, almost like she was trying to hide something. When I asked about the swelling, she said that she had fallen and hit her face on the ground. She was just so nonchalant about it, like it didn’t matter that her ‘perfect’ face wasn’t anymore. She was just not acting like herself.’

“If Robert did ANYTHING to her I’ll, I’ll…” Jo started.

Tootie still had the shocked look on her face. “Why wouldn’t she tell one of us? She must have been so scared.”

“This explains what was up with Blair this morning,” said Jo.

"What do you mean?" asked Natalie.

"Well, " Jo started, "I got up early this morning because I was going to meet some classmates at the coffee shop before class. I go to the bathroom because Blair is NEVER up that early and she is already in there. I waited for an hour and a half on her. No telling how long she had been in there before that. When she finally came out, I noticed her face was swollen. I figured it was just from one of her face product things that had done that to her face so I didn't say anything. She got real paranoid when I was looking at her though. Now I know why."

"Hey Nat," said Tootie, " you said that the right side of her face was swollen right?"

"Yea, why?" replied Natalie.

"Well, when Blair came down the stairs this morning she kept her left side to us at all times," said Tootie, "She even left through the store. When I asked her why she was going that way, she said that she parked back there last night so she wouldn't wake anybody up."

"She probably went out that way," continued Natalie, " so that you and Mrs. G. would not see the swelling."

"Man she was sneaky," said Jo, "I can't believe she did all that just to keep us from knowing."

"I wish I could say that that's all," started Natalie, "but…"

"But, but what?" asked an exasperated Jo, "How much worse can this get?"

"Plenty," replied Natalie, "See I started looking into Robert's past. You know, asking questions, that sort of thing. Anyway, it seems that Mr. Masterson has quite a temper. Do you all remember that guy Nancy was kind of interested in a few years back when she and Roger had broken up?"

"Oh yeah," said Tootie, "I remember that. It was some of my best gossip. When Nancy broke up with the guy and went back to Roger, the guy had a fit. He called Nancy daily threatening her and when she ignored him, he went after Roger. He jumped Roger one night and beat him up pretty bad. After that, he never bothered Nancy or Roger again."

"Right," said Jo, "I remember now. Wow, was that Robert?"

"The one and only," replied Natalie, "Not only that, but his temper has gotten worse. If something doesn't go his way he snaps and attacks whatever or whoever is closest to him at the time. The problem is that no one has ever pressed charges against him."

"I wonder why?" asked Tootie.

"Oh, he probably put the press on'em," said Jo.

"Say what?" asked Tootie.

"You know, he pressured them to back off by threatening them somehow," replied Jo, "Happened in the Bronx all the time."

"Oh," said Tootie.

"Where do you get all this information from anyway Nat," asked Jo.

"Hey, I'm a journalist, I always get my story." replied Natalie,

"Anyway, this is why I am so worried about Blair not being home already," said Natalie looking at her watch, it was 7:10 pm.

"Any idea where they might be Jo?" asked Tootie.

"Well," began Jo, "Blair once told me that Robert has taken her to the old drive in a few times for some privacy."

"I thought they tore it down and built something else in its place," said Tootie.

"Oh they did," replied Natalie, "but the screen and a few of the parking spaces are still there behind the new buildings. It definitely makes for a secluded spot."

"Well, what are we waiting for, lets go," said Jo getting up and grabbing her jacket.

"I'll write a note for Mrs. G." said Tootie, "to tell her where we are and what is going on."

"Good idea Tootie," said Natalie, "We'll meet you outside in the car."

CHAPTER 5

Meanwhile

Blair looked at her watch. It was already past 7:00 p.m. She knew if she did not get home soon, the others would start to worry about her because she said she would be home early. Where was he anyway thought Blair? After reading all of her messages from Robert, she finally called and agreed to meet him. They agreed to meet here at 6:30. What was she thinking of, agreeing to meet Robert at the old Drive-In by herself this late at night. I must be crazy, thought Blair. If he’s not here in 5 minutes, Blair told herself, I’m leaving.

Just as Blair was giving up and heading for her car, she saw the headlights of Robert’s car. Her heart started beating fast. The last time I saw him, she thought, he hit me. What was I thinking agreeing to see him again? I’ve got to be strong Blair told herself.

Robert stopped his car and got out. He looked at Blair with longing in his eyes. Man he looks gorgeous, thought Blair. There he stood, 6’2” light brown hair and the darkest green eyes Blair had ever seen. It was those eyes that first attacked me to him, Blair remembered. Incidentally, it was those same eyes that scared her so much last night. Blair shivered as he came closer to her.

“Hi Blair,” said Robert, “You look great.”

“Yeah right,” retorted Blair, “Did you forget that you left your signature on my face last night, and the night before that, and the night before that. Shall I go on?”

Robert looked away with an ashamed look on his face. “I’ve been trying to talk to you all day,” he said.

“Oh yes,” said Blair, “I know, but I DO have a life other than you.”

“Come on Blair,” Robert pleaded, “Don’t be this way, I said I was sorry.”

“YOUR SORRY!!” yelled Blair, “YOUR SORRY! Look at me. LOOK AT ME!” demanded Blair when Robert looked away. “Because of the fact that you got a ‘little’ angry last night my face is swollen with several bruises. Not only that,” she continued stepping closer to Robert, “I have bruises on my arms from where you grabbed me, and bruises on my back from where I fell. You know what Robert you're not sorry I'm sorry. It's over between us."

"What do you mean?" Robert asked, anger flashing in his eyes.

"What do you mean what do I mean?" Blair asked. "It's over between us Robert. I am NOT going to be in any relationship with a man that hits me and then tries to make me feel that it was my fault. I’ve given you the benefit of the doubt long enough Robert. I was hoping you were just having some bad days or that you would stop, but after last night I realize that you will NEVER change. Jo was right, I shouldn’t have to spend an extra couple of hours in the bathroom getting ready for the day just because you got mad the night before, and frankly, I am tired of doing it. I refuse to live that way any longer," declared Blair.

Robert looked over at Blair, anger and hatred written all over his face. The look frightened Blair. She started backing up towards her car when Robert grabbed her.

"You're going to regret breaking up with ME Ms. Warner. When I'm through with you," stated Robert pulling out a knife, "nobody will EVER care how much time you spend getting ready in the morning, it won’t matter. Nobody will ever want to go out with you ever again." Blair's opened her eyes wide when she saw the knife and screamed. Robert laughed evilly as Blair gasped and turned white when he made that statement.

Robert threw Blair to the ground while Blair was hitting him; he shifted his knife from his right hand to his left and grinned. "What's wrong Blair?" he asked, "Not so high and mighty now are we? I'll tell you what Blair, if you are really good and stop fighting me, I'll leave your pretty little face alone."

"Please!" Blair pleaded thinking quickly, "I'm sure we can work something out Robert. There is no need to take it this far."

"Oh no," said Blair, "You have disgraced my honor by breaking up with ME Robert Michael Masterson III. You had your chance Blair, now it's my turn."

Robert clenched his right hand into a fist and punched. Blair screamed as the first punch hit her in the face. The next one cracked a rib. The third punch broke a rib. The fourth punch was aimed right at Blair's head. As she was screaming and trying to fight him off, he struck. Suddenly, where screams had been filling the air seconds before, there was silence. Blair lay unconscious on the floor with no way to defend herself as Robert leaned over her, his knife in hand laughing wickedly.


[This message has been edited by Ags2000 (edited 10-02-2001).]

[BlairandJo]

OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG
OMG OMG OMG OMG (I'll say it again)OMG.This
is gr8 I think I know what happened I have two ideas.You gotta post more NOW!!!!!! please;o)

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Its my life!This is
who I am!And you tell me
it does'nt matter!
-Jinny
~~~~~~~
If you want something bad
enough you go after it no
matter what the outcome may be
-My Quote
~~~~~~
"Love beliver
So take the love He's giving to you
A love receiver
Cause everything He's
Promised is true
Love beliver
Listen to the song that I
sing
You are the child of the
King"
-Love Beliver.
~~~~~~~
Be a good girl(why be a good girl?)be a good girl
(why be a good girl?)she
is a see-saw seeing if it
matters she is a game of
Chutes and Laders.
be a good girl (why be a good girl?)
she needs the one who wrote the definition of
a love without condition
be a good girl.
-Good Girl.

[JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo]

oh wow, this is REALLY great!!!!!!!!!!!!! You have GOT to finish it!! That Robert must be a jerk....urgg.... LoL, please finish!!

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Teddy Is Hott!! --pretty plain and simple.

Blair: Hold it, you ruined my watch.
Jo: No I didn't, it's a stop watch...it stopped


Blair: Jo, you've got some power, but you're not wearing it right. You don't want to
throw it onlike a motorcycle jacket, you want to slip it on, like a negligee.
Jo: I'm not doin' anything weird!!!

Natalie: She's always saying what a great kid you are
Andy: Kid?
Natalie: Guy. Did i saw kid? Why would i say kid? Man, she said man!

[TVaddict]

Very good start. On top of the interesting plot, you've also got good writing skills, which always makes these things so much more pleasant to read. Can't wait to read more.

[KerriBerri687]

great start! u should go on!

[FOLrocks1]

I really liked it! I was cool Post more soon!

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[Ags2000]

I'm glad y'all like this story. I have about 10 pages written right now and I am still writting. I will try to post parts of the story as I have the time to type it.

I have added more parts of the story to the top. I will try to put as much there as it will alow me. The story is coming along pretty well, but my problwm is that my typing is not so great, so bare with me as I am writing until I get writer's block then I go and type. I will try to add to the story every day as I can. If it is not finished by the beginning of next week I might not be able to post for an entire week. I will be going out of town and am trying to get a laptop to come with me. Enjoy the story.

D


[This message has been edited by Ags2000 (edited 07-09-2001).]

[80skid]

More! I need moooore!

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"You're born, you die, and the rest is just window dressing." - Jinny Exstead

[BlairandJo]

OK I really really need more asp.I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!;o)

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Its my life!This is
who I am!And you tell me
it does'nt matter!
-Jinny
~~~~~~~
If you want something bad
enough you go after it no
matter what the outcome may be
-My Quote
~~~~~~
"Love beliver
So take the love He's giving to you
A love receiver
Cause everything He's
Promised is true
Love beliver
Listen to the song that I
sing
You are the child of the
King"
-Love Beliver.
~~~~~~~
Be a good girl(why be a good girl?)be a good girl
(why be a good girl?)she
is a see-saw seeing if it
matters she is a game of
Chutes and Laders.
be a good girl (why be a good girl?)
she needs the one who wrote the definition of
a love without condition
be a good girl.
-Good Girl.

[BlairW_1]

GREAT!!!! I was gonna write a story sorta like this, but now... hmm... I think not! I'd be embarrased! You know, I think you're up there in Devon King's catagory. Y'all are sooooo good! yer gonna have to write more!!! (If you haven't noticed, 1st fanfics are usually the best ones on the board... Unlike mine, mine have yet to be even good on the board...) Plz post more soon since you have so much more written!

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Treat life like it's your last day to live, never pass up any opportunities for better ones, love everyone, never hate, tell everyone important to you that you care... Because it just might be your last day on this earth...

Please pray for Brookshire Rowe, he's on life support this very minute, thanks to some careless driving...

Danielle

[BlairW_1]

:::gasp::: I found a fellow southerner!!! You said y'all, and spelled it right, too! I think you're the first one that's done that... Wow, a great writer, and you're not a Yank, either! I have a feeling we can be kindred spirits, don't you? I feel that it's tome to discontinue blabbering on so, and stop quoting Anne, for goodness sakes! <3 y'all, buh-byezies!

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Treat life like it's your last day to live, never pass up any opportunities for better ones, love everyone, never hate, tell everyone important to you that you care... Because it just might be your last day on this earth...

Please pray for Brookshire Rowe, he's on life support this very minute, thanks to some careless driving...

Danielle

[Swimfan85]

awesome, i have a ? why did u stop!!!!!!!!!! this is awesome, please please add more~!

[Ags2000]

Originally posted by hockeybabe528:
awesome, i have a ? why did u stop!!!!!!!!!! this is awesome, please please add more~!

The reason I stopped is because I am still in the process of typing up the story. I write quicker then I type so I have more written down then I have typed up right now. I am typing every night when I get home from work, and before I go to bed I am posting more of the story. I am typing as fast as I can because y'all seem to really like this story. I'll post more tonight after work.

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[triple19]

AGS, this is a GREAT story. Your writing skills are good, and you've picked a good subject to tackle. Blair having an abusive boyfriend is very realistic.
I have one question though. Natalie using her reporters skills to get the goods on Robert was a great idea. We know that he was a problem for Nancy and Roger, but who else has had to deal with his abuse? Does Natalie know other people who know Robert? Is she friends with girls who have dated him recently? Did she talk to these people in person, or by phone? You could even have Natalie say who she talked to when she tells Tootie and Jo what she's discovered.
This would fill in the gap of how she dug up the recent information, and I think it would make your story even more interesting. I know you've written a lot and it's taken a lot of time, but please condsider this suggestion.
Dont worry about taking time to type the story, just get it out when you can.
Keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to reading your next installment.



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Natalie: A flashback within a flashback..I'm so brillant it scares me

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[Ags2000]

Originally posted by triple19:

I have one question though. Natalie using her reporters skills to get the goods on Robert was a great idea. We know that he was a problem for Nancy and Roger, but who else has had to deal with his abuse? Does Natalie know other people who know Robert? Is she friends with girls who have dated him recently? Did she talk to these people in person, or by phone? You could even have Natalie say who she talked to when she tells Tootie and Jo what she's discovered.
This would fill in the gap of how she dug up the recent information, and I think it would make your story even more interesting. I know you've written a lot and it's taken a lot of time, but please condsider this suggestion.

That is a good idea. I'l write that up as well. I write notes to myself as I am writing so I can go back and elaborate later, I hadn't thought of that though, but that is why I am asking for people's opinion. Appreciate it.

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