Part1 of Stranded in the woods

[JoPol_wannabe]

It’s the middle of summer the girls were all at the house, they had nothing to do, nowhere to go, and the air conditioner was out. Tootie: So when is Bev getting the air
conditioner fixed. Blair: Well she called the repair man yesterday but he can’t come till next week. JO: I said I’ll do it but no Blair: Last time you fixed it, it was like the North Pole in here JO: Ya but it’s better then being a baked potato. Bev & Andy come in talking. Andy: So this trip will only last for a week. Tootie: What’s going on Andy: Oh Bev wants to take me to her cabin by the lake. Nat: Lake did you say lake, that sounds cool and refreshing. Tootie: So how big is this cabin Bev: Well there are 4 bedrooms why? Nat: Oh nothing Girls: WHAT! Nat: Well I just thought maybe we could come along Bev; Well I don’t know who would take car of the shop? Blair: We’ll Just close for a week I mean who ever comes in leave in 5 minutes because it’s so hot in here. Tootie: Ya come on the repair man isn’t going to be here for a week Bev: Well.... ok you guys can come along Girls: Alright! So the girls get packed JO: 4 suitcases geez Blair were going camping it’s not like were going to Hawaii Blair: There will probably be guys there so I have to look my best Tootie: All I care about is getting into the lake and getting a tan JO: Not me I learned my lesson down in Florida when we were Nat grandma’s, So I’m just going to hick up the mountains Nat: Same here except for the hicking up mountains part Bev: So are you girls ready to go camping Girls: Yep

Bev: Ok is everyone situated Tootie: Hey Nat I wanted to sit by the window Nat:
I got this seat first Tootie: Ya and the only seat left is the bed. JO: Tootie just be happy your going and that you don’t have to stay home in that hot house, so seat on the bed Tootie: Alright since you put it that way Blair: I think were ready Bev: hey wear’s Andy Andy: I’m here just had to make sure I had everything JO: What all of this you almost brought more then Blair Blair gives Jo a glare. Bev: Ok Andy you sit next to me and be my navigator. About 2 hours later Tootie: I need to go to the restroom Bev: Boy I haven’t seen a rest area for a long time Andy: I haven’t seen anything that this map shows Bev: Are you sure your looking at it right Andy: Ya Girls look at the map Blair: Yep Andy is right this road looks nothing like this one JO: It’s a black line on a piece of paper Bev: you know about 40 minutes ago I did take this turn off Bev: Well there was this sing that said this road was a detour to the camp ground. Tootie: Well can I go to the restroom or not Andy: I haven’t seen any cars go by Blair: don’t tell me were lost Tootie: Were lost oh no that means there’s no restroom nearby Nat: Yes there is acres of them Toote: Oh no way I’m not going out there JO: That’s smart Tootie just hold it in till we find a rest area which would probably take 4 hours Bev: Andy go get the map Andy: I can’t find it Bev: Keep looking it’s got to be back there somewhere Blair: Beverly Ann look out! Bev serves the car to avoid hitting a deer that is in the middle of the road and she ends up hitting a tree.

Are the girls ok or our they hurt?
To be Continued.

[TVaddict]

Good start, I like it so far but can I make one little suggestion? If you start a new line every time a new person is speaking it will be a lot easier to read. But that's the only thing wrong, so keep it up!

[JoPol_wannabe]

Hey thanks for the suggestion I'll do that next time

[FOL-FAN]

Originally posted by TVaddict:
Good start, I like it so far but can I make one little suggestion? If you start a new line every time a new person is speaking it will be a lot easier to read. But that's the only thing wrong, so keep it up!

Ditto. It's a good start but it's a little messy to read. Other than that it's really good. Keep it up!