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03-01-2001, 05:19 PM
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"Pocketbooks" Part 3:"THE FINALE"
Heres the final part of my first FOL Fanfic "Pocketbooks"
********************************************* (Pippa,Andy,Rick and Jo are at the coffee house) Jo:So whats this big announcement? Pippa:We have to wait for Blair and Tootie (Blair and Tootie come in) Rick:Toot Toot heres comes Toot. Tootie:Jo tell your Husband to shut up Jo:At least I have one(Laugh Track goes wild laughing)Now Pippa and Andy have an announcement Pippa:Thats right we... Blair:What a Wild day at Eastland.Mrs.Porter got into... Jo:Blair stop yabberin' Pippa and Andy have Tootie:Today at the resturant I ment Chad Pippa:No one cares about your studpid Chad Jo:Back to Andy and Pippa Pippa:Thanks Jo Andy:The other day at the grage My friend Rod Pippa:Honey no one cares about Rod Jo,Rick,Tootie and Blair:HONEY!!!!!!!! Pippa:Oh yes Andy and I are Engaged. (Laugh Track screams) THE END LOOK FOR MY MUST READ "THE WEDDING" COMING SOON |
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03-03-2001, 09:40 PM
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Join Date: Dec 08, 2000
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i am sorry, i don't mean to be rude, but you keep bragging about being a sitcom writer, if you really were, you would know that the average half hour sitcom would first of all, make sense, secondly,the "laugh track" would go off when something was funny (which BTW, nothing was) and, you would know that most sitcoms are filmed in front of a live audience, so there wouldn't even be a laugh track! and lastly, your script would have to be approximately 10 times longer than that! that thing you called a script (pocketbooks) made no sense, it kept jumping around all the time and it had no plot to it. it didn't even live up to the expectations of a commercial! sorry, but you better shape up if you want to sell a script ever in your lifetime!
------------------ ~*~*~*JoRocks87FOL~*~*~* Jo: what do you see? Blair: i see an assortment of various candies Jo:look harder, it's a mine field. You've got your ROLLOS your JUNIOR MINTS, your GOOD AND PLENTIES, your RAISINETTES, and your RED licorice. Any combination, pleasent evening, mix the wrong stuff-i can't be held responsible. you know one guy mixed peanut butter cups and black licorice, the nex day he walked in front of a train. folfan1@hotmail.com AIM- punky80zchick |
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03-04-2001, 12:03 AM
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Join Date: Feb 01, 2001
Location: Boyton Beach FL usa
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I have to agree,
Your scripts are cute.. But they really don't have anything to themIn the scripts for the student films and things like that that i've done that use laugh tracks they dont have "(laugh track goes wild)" and even if they did, you don't have it in the right places.. Plus I really don't think a real sitcom writer would be posting here.. I mean really, if you were writing a for a sitcom I don't think you would have time to come here and post all this fan fiction.. I'm sorry if I seem rude but you shouldn't lie about that.~Jess ------------------ So things change your born, you move on, you die-thats life!- Jo ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Mrs G: (Points to Jo's butt) You've got something fat back there! Jo: (Gives her "The look") ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ C.D: Why don't you let me talk to her? Jinny: What's that about!? C.D: Jinny, She just needs a little coddling right now.. (leaves) Jinny: I can "Coddle" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "Buddy, I got PMS and a Gun, Any questions?"- Jinny Exstead |
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