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Sitcomwriter · 03-01-2001, 11:02 PM

Her is part 2 of my must read "The Wedding"
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(Tootie and Jeff are at Tooties and Blairs Place)
Jeff:Give me another chance
Tootie:I can if I want but...
Jeff:But what honey
Tootie:I have a wedding to go to
Jeff:Yes ours
(Jeff walks out)
Tootie:The one that got away
(Rick and Jo are at the party hall)
Rick:I lost the ring
Jo:Lost the ring?
Rick:Um..Yes but Andy...
Jo:Uhh yeah and....BLAh...BLAH...BLAH
Rick:Josaphene Rosanne Marie Pollnazec Bonner
Jo:Only my mom can Middle name me
Rick:That was 8 namin' ya(Laugh track laughs wildly)
(Blair and Rich Man are talking)
Rich Man:So then I say Darlinggggggggg
Blair:I love that Darlingggggggg(Laugh Track laughs wildly)
(Pippa enters the room)
Pippa:Andy here?
Blair:No
Pippa:Good oh just tell him I've got the ring(Laugh track Screams)
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WHAT DO YOU THINK SO FAR.REPLY

lesliem14 · 03-01-2001, 11:14 PM

I have read all of what you posted so far and I have a few suggestions. First, if you post in sections, which a good number of people do not like, post it as a reply to the original story instead of a new post. It saves room on the board and prevents other stories from getting pushed down further. Also, you are really rushing and it's hard to follow your stories. And Jo's real name is Joanna Marie Polniaczek. They're not bad, but you start reading and then it's over with. I'm just a fan of lengthy ones.

BlairW_2 · 03-02-2001, 06:23 PM

If your making Tootie marry a girl, then its horrible.

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..*Cassandra*..

Sitcomwriter · 03-02-2001, 06:38 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by BlairW_2:
If your making Tootie marry a girl, then its horrible.

NO WAY.ANDY AND PIPPA ARE GETTING MARRIED.NO I WOULD NEVER DO THAT.TOOTIE(Just for a little while)Is experimenting.

[This message has been edited by Sitcomwriter (edited 03-02-2001).]

BlairW_1 · 03-03-2001, 02:22 PM

I'm sorry, I've tried, but I can't follow along or understand your stories. Just a suggestion, could you please try to make them a little clearer? It could really make a big difference.

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"God grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference."

~*Danielle*~
Go #33! Lady Bulldogs all da way! Basketball rulz!

03-01-2001, 11:02 PM	#1
Sitcomwriter Member Forum Veteran Join Date: Feb 27, 2001 Posts: 7,356	"The Wedding"part 2-A must Read Her is part 2 of my must read "The Wedding" ******************************************* (Tootie and Jeff are at Tooties and Blairs Place) Jeff:Give me another chance Tootie:I can if I want but... Jeff:But what honey Tootie:I have a wedding to go to Jeff:Yes ours (Jeff walks out) Tootie:The one that got away (Rick and Jo are at the party hall) Rick:I lost the ring Jo:Lost the ring? Rick:Um..Yes but Andy... Jo:Uhh yeah and....BLAh...BLAH...BLAH Rick:Josaphene Rosanne Marie Pollnazec Bonner Jo:Only my mom can Middle name me Rick:That was 8 namin' ya(Laugh track laughs wildly) (Blair and Rich Man are talking) Rich Man:So then I say Darlinggggggggg Blair:I love that Darlingggggggg(Laugh Track laughs wildly) (Pippa enters the room) Pippa:Andy here? Blair:No Pippa:Good oh just tell him I've got the ring(Laugh track Screams) ******************************************* WHAT DO YOU THINK SO FAR.REPLY

03-01-2001, 11:14 PM	#2
lesliem14 Member Forum Regular Join Date: Dec 01, 2000 Location: Frankfort, KY Posts: 650	I have read all of what you posted so far and I have a few suggestions. First, if you post in sections, which a good number of people do not like, post it as a reply to the original story instead of a new post. It saves room on the board and prevents other stories from getting pushed down further. Also, you are really rushing and it's hard to follow your stories. And Jo's real name is Joanna Marie Polniaczek. They're not bad, but you start reading and then it's over with. I'm just a fan of lengthy ones.

03-02-2001, 06:23 PM	#3
BlairW_2 Member Forum Regular Join Date: Jan 13, 2001 Location: New Jersey Posts: 860	If your making Tootie marry a girl, then its horrible. ------------------ ..Cassandra..

03-03-2001, 02:22 PM	#5
BlairW_1 Mindanao Machiku Senior Member Join Date: Dec 21, 2000 Location: Temporarily in Ok, permanent location ^ there! Posts: 1,011	I'm sorry, I've tried, but I can't follow along or understand your stories. Just a suggestion, could you please try to make them a little clearer? It could really make a big difference. ------------------ "God grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference." ~Danielle~ Go #33! Lady Bulldogs all da way! Basketball rulz!