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Devon King · 12-18-2000, 12:13 AM

Thanks in advance to anyone who would scope out the preview of a story posted at
http://printworksunltd.com/thefacts/outofsight.htm

It's a change of pace from the "script format" entries we know and love.

crystalship · 12-18-2000, 05:29 PM

Hi! I thought that was a great introduction - I'm dying to see what happens next! Good work!

JoRocks87FOL · 12-18-2000, 05:48 PM

that was REALLY good! i can't wait so see what happens! i love it!

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~*~*~*JoRocks87FOL~*~*~*~
JO: Now, Natalie, when you hear these voices, are they friendly?

Jo: one minute you are happy and healthy, the next minute youre a pamento loaf on a gurny!

Jo: BOOZE!
Blair:booze? this is Puweefwize
Jo: gahzuntite!
Blair: it's the Michealobe of wine.
Jo: id ont think i can get this stuff down, i'll get some beer.
Nat: How will you get beer?
Jo: i'll get beer

Mrs G: no, but i have an idea, you girls got any ideas?
Nat:Nope, not me!
Blair: Not Muah! Jo?
Jo:Me? uh... no, i havent had an idea since '79!

Jo_Polniaczek · 12-18-2000, 06:55 PM

The page won't show up on my computer.

TVaddict · 12-18-2000, 07:07 PM

Great opening, I'm so intrigued. Nice to see it in narrative form rather than script also. Let us know when there's more!

lesliem14 · 12-18-2000, 07:30 PM

More, more, soon, please, please. In case you can't tell, I can't wait until you post the whole thing!!

Devon King · 12-18-2000, 10:14 PM

To Jo_Polniaczek: I'm sorry you had trouble accessing the page, but I appreciate the fact that you tried. There is some art involved on the page but the text should show up quick. I'll have to look around to see if it's problematic for some browsers. Thanks for letting me know about the glitch.

The T · 12-18-2000, 10:17 PM

I think it's really really great! FABULOUS! I mean really awesome! Man very detailed and great writting! I love it! Dude, you should like write books! Your really good!

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See ya~The T
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Jo: Well I'm startin.

Nat: Where'd ya get the beer?

Jo: I got the beer. Here's to all who wish me well, all the rest can go to.......Jersey.
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Devon King · 12-18-2000, 10:19 PM

Thanks for the kind words, everyone! The whole story should be posted at the first of the year. Glad you liked the preview!

Cokies · 12-19-2000, 12:12 AM

Pretty cool, very interesting...

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"It was just like Saturday Night Fever, except it was a Friday."

Jeanie · 12-19-2000, 01:18 AM

I really enjoyed the story. Can't wait until the rest is posted. Thank you.

flower · 12-19-2000, 03:29 PM

that was great, but hurry, finish it soon!!! i just hate waiting a long time to find out the ending of a story.

[This message has been edited by flower (edited 12-19-2000).]

Jo_Polniaczek · 12-19-2000, 07:54 PM

the page shows up but it says it can't find it

VicariousPeekskill · 12-20-2000, 01:43 AM

I'm very intrigued. You have good command of language and literary devices. I can't wait to read the rest!!

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"I have measured out my life in coffee spoons;"
T.S. Eliot, 'The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock'

LaverneShirley · 12-20-2000, 08:36 PM

Jo_Polniaczek, if you email me, (angoradebs@aol.com) I'll copy and paste the story in an email and send it to you (if that's all right with Devon King, of course). And if you do email me put "FOL Story" in the subkect or else I'll probably accidently delete it.

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"Well, Laverne is sort of childish" -Shirley

"Childish? Childish? Coming from a grown woman who throws tea parties for her stuffed cat!" -Laverne

"Well at least I don't sew L's on everything I wear!" -Shirley

"Well that would be pretty stupid considering your name's Shirley!" -Laverne

12-18-2000, 12:13 AM	#1
Devon King Member Frequent Poster Join Date: Nov 24, 2000 Posts: 204	Fanfic -- opinions wanted Thanks in advance to anyone who would scope out the preview of a story posted at http://printworksunltd.com/thefacts/outofsight.htm It's a change of pace from the "script format" entries we know and love.

12-18-2000, 05:29 PM	#2
crystalship Member Occasional Poster Join Date: Dec 11, 2000 Location: Seattle,WA USA Posts: 5	Hi! I thought that was a great introduction - I'm dying to see what happens next! Good work!

12-18-2000, 05:48 PM	#3
JoRocks87FOL Member Frequent Poster Join Date: Dec 08, 2000 Location: CALI!!!! Posts: 134	that was REALLY good! i can't wait so see what happens! i love it! ------------------ ~~~JoRocks87FOL~~~~ JO: Now, Natalie, when you hear these voices, are they friendly? Jo: one minute you are happy and healthy, the next minute youre a pamento loaf on a gurny! Jo: BOOZE! Blair:booze? this is Puweefwize Jo: gahzuntite! Blair: it's the Michealobe of wine. Jo: id ont think i can get this stuff down, i'll get some beer. Nat: How will you get beer? Jo: i'll get beer Mrs G: no, but i have an idea, you girls got any ideas? Nat:Nope, not me! Blair: Not Muah! Jo? Jo:Me? uh... no, i havent had an idea since '79!

12-18-2000, 06:55 PM	#4
Jo_Polniaczek Professional Lurker Forum Regular Join Date: Dec 07, 2000 Location: The middle of Nowhere Posts: 783	The page won't show up on my computer.

12-18-2000, 07:07 PM	#5
TVaddict Member Forum Regular Join Date: Oct 30, 2000 Location: NH Posts: 562	Great opening, I'm so intrigued. Nice to see it in narrative form rather than script also. Let us know when there's more!

12-18-2000, 07:30 PM	#6
lesliem14 Member Forum Regular Join Date: Dec 01, 2000 Location: Frankfort, KY Posts: 650	More, more, soon, please, please. In case you can't tell, I can't wait until you post the whole thing!!

12-18-2000, 10:14 PM	#7
Devon King Member Frequent Poster Join Date: Nov 24, 2000 Posts: 204	To Jo_Polniaczek: I'm sorry you had trouble accessing the page, but I appreciate the fact that you tried. There is some art involved on the page but the text should show up quick. I'll have to look around to see if it's problematic for some browsers. Thanks for letting me know about the glitch.

12-18-2000, 10:17 PM	#8
The T Member Senior Member Join Date: Jun 22, 2000 Location: Baraboo, WI US Posts: 1,108	I think it's really really great! FABULOUS! I mean really awesome! Man very detailed and great writting! I love it! Dude, you should like write books! Your really good! ------------------ See ya~The T ^^^^^^^^^^^^* Jo: Well I'm startin. Nat: Where'd ya get the beer? Jo: I got the beer. Here's to all who wish me well, all the rest can go to.......Jersey. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^

12-18-2000, 10:19 PM	#9
Devon King Member Frequent Poster Join Date: Nov 24, 2000 Posts: 204	Thanks for the kind words, everyone! The whole story should be posted at the first of the year. Glad you liked the preview!

12-19-2000, 12:12 AM	#10
Cokies Head Goonie Senior Member Join Date: Oct 28, 2000 Location: Benicia, CA USA Posts: 1,719	Pretty cool, very interesting... ------------------ "It was just like Saturday Night Fever, except it was a Friday."

12-19-2000, 01:18 AM	#11
Jeanie Jinny & Theodore Fan Forum Regular Join Date: Nov 12, 2000 Location: NE Posts: 910	I really enjoyed the story. Can't wait until the rest is posted. Thank you.

12-19-2000, 03:29 PM	#12
flower Member Occasional Poster Join Date: Dec 03, 2000 Location: Union City, California, USA Posts: 35	that was great, but hurry, finish it soon!!! i just hate waiting a long time to find out the ending of a story. [This message has been edited by flower (edited 12-19-2000).]

12-19-2000, 07:54 PM	#13
Jo_Polniaczek Professional Lurker Forum Regular Join Date: Dec 07, 2000 Location: The middle of Nowhere Posts: 783	the page shows up but it says it can't find it

12-20-2000, 01:43 AM	#14
VicariousPeekskill Member Occasional Poster Join Date: Dec 17, 2000 Location: Oak Ridge, TN, USA Posts: 11	I'm very intrigued. You have good command of language and literary devices. I can't wait to read the rest!! ------------------ "I have measured out my life in coffee spoons;" T.S. Eliot, 'The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock'

12-20-2000, 08:36 PM	#15
LaverneShirley Mission Doll Senior Member Join Date: Jul 26, 2000 Location: Liberty Twp, OH Posts: 1,552	Jo_Polniaczek, if you email me, (angoradebs@aol.com) I'll copy and paste the story in an email and send it to you (if that's all right with Devon King, of course). And if you do email me put "FOL Story" in the subkect or else I'll probably accidently delete it. ------------------ "Well, Laverne is sort of childish" -Shirley "Childish? Childish? Coming from a grown woman who throws tea parties for her stuffed cat!" -Laverne "Well at least I don't sew L's on everything I wear!" -Shirley "Well that would be pretty stupid considering your name's Shirley!" -Laverne