The Poetry Thread

[Courtnee]

This thread is for posting and criquing poetry
Here's mine:

MY ONLY

Sun on our faces
wind in our hair
spending the moment together
with out a care
your hand in mine
our lips meet
for the first time in two weeks
the air never tasted so sweet

(chorus)
My onliy weakness
my only strength
my only life
and my only death
your my only
(end chours)

Your fear becomes mine
as does your guilt
don't worry a minute about me..
I'll be just fine

(bridge)
Your the only person I can say this to but your..

My only lie
my only truth
my only reality
and my only dream
your my only

(chours x2)

(END BITCHEZZ)

let me know what you think!!!

[Courtnee]

[TJL]

Nice work.

[robyrob]

[Ireneparalegal]

I love poems...this is a very kewl poem...keep up the good work...you should make a thread of poems for those of us who would like to add our own work, or add a poem that we may not wrote, but love.

[EmoJoe]

Thats awesome! Good job

[Courtnee]

Originally Posted by Ireneparalegal

I love poems...this is a very kewl poem...keep up the good work...you should make a thread of poems for those of us who would like to add our own work, or add a poem that we may not wrote, but love.

I'm going to reaname the thread so everyone can post poetry


Thanks for the compliments everyone!!

[Ireneparalegal]

This is not by me...but i found it so funny, i would like to share it...lol



When a girl asks you "does this make me look fat?"
how the heck are you supposed to answer that?

You could answer yes, but you better be ready,
cause if you say yes, on the floor is where you'll be,
she'll have your arm behind your back and begging for mercy,
making you wish you would have answered differently,

You could answer "no", but make sure she's smiling,
cause if you say no, and your not looking,
she'll assume your lying, and pain is what she'll bring,
making you wish you hadn't said anything,

You could answer with a shrug, but what will that do,
all that will do is get her pissed at you,
so don't lie, and tell her what you think is true,
before she chokes you, and your face starts turning blue,

Now when a girl asks you "does this make me look fat?"
this is how your supposed to answer that,
this is the sentence you should say that shows you care,
tell her nicely, "you look beautiful no matter what you wear"
and if that sentence doesn't work to make her happy,
tell her "Yes, no" or give a shrug, but be ready,
cause theres no greater rage that a womens fury,
and if you answer her wrong, she'll have you begging for mercy,

[Courtnee]

Originally Posted by Ireneparalegal

This is not by me...but i found it so funny, i would like to share it...lol



When a girl asks you "does this make me look fat?"
how the heck are you supposed to answer that?

You could answer yes, but you better be ready,
cause if you say yes, on the floor is where you'll be,
she'll have your arm behind your back and begging for mercy,
making you wish you would have answered differently,

You could answer "no", but make sure she's smiling,
cause if you say no, and your not looking,
she'll assume your lying, and pain is what she'll bring,
making you wish you hadn't said anything,

You could answer with a shrug, but what will that do,
all that will do is get her pissed at you,
so don't lie, and tell her what you think is true,
before she chokes you, and your face starts turning blue,

Now when a girl asks you "does this make me look fat?"
this is how your supposed to answer that,
this is the sentence you should say that shows you care,
tell her nicely, "you look beautiful no matter what you wear"
and if that sentence doesn't work to make her happy,
tell her "Yes, no" or give a shrug, but be ready,
cause theres no greater rage that a womens fury,
and if you answer her wrong, she'll have you begging for mercy,

[TheGreatPretender]

One I wrote recently:


The Shell
The Shell may slip put from under your fingers
And the regret from that still may linger
As The Shell drifts and floats out to sea
This may be the way it has to be
You may not have handled it with proper care
Maybe the sun cast a distracting glare
You mourn more and more at how things went wrong
The Shell has more value now that it's gone
Pressing on despite the one thing you lack
The sun seems to beat harder on your back
The shell was so special it sparkled and gleamed
In an array of shells, it stood out it seems
Just when you think there could be no more
Another shell is washed up on the shore
The sparkly galore catches your site
You scoop it up with beaming delight
Now you know to handle it with care
Seeing oppurtunity when it is there
Although this might not be the same shell for which you yearned
At least now you know you lost and you learned
You win you lose, you cheer and you pout
In this tidal wave ocean-washing in and washing out

[Ireneparalegal]

Originally Posted by TheGreatPretender

One I wrote recently:


The Shell
The Shell may slip put from under your fingers
And the regret from that still may linger
As The Shell drifts and floats out to sea
This may be the way it has to be
You may not have handled it with proper care
Maybe the sun cast a distracting glare
You mourn more and more at how things went wrong
The Shell has more value now that it's gone
Pressing on despite the one thing you lack
The sun seems to beat harder on your back
The shell was so special it sparkled and gleamed
In an array of shells, it stood out it seems
Just when you think there could be no more
Another shell is washed up on the shore
The sparkly galore catches your site
You scoop it up with beaming delight
Now you know to handle it with care
Seeing oppurtunity when it is there
Although this might not be the same shell for which you yearned
At least now you know you lost and you learned
You win you lose, you cheer and you pout
In this tidal wave ocean-washing in and washing out

Very nice!!!! i like the underlying message it sends...

[EmoJoe]

Originally Posted by TheGreatPretender

One I wrote recently:


The Shell
The Shell may slip put from under your fingers
And the regret from that still may linger
As The Shell drifts and floats out to sea
This may be the way it has to be
You may not have handled it with proper care
Maybe the sun cast a distracting glare
You mourn more and more at how things went wrong
The Shell has more value now that it's gone
Pressing on despite the one thing you lack
The sun seems to beat harder on your back
The shell was so special it sparkled and gleamed
In an array of shells, it stood out it seems
Just when you think there could be no more
Another shell is washed up on the shore
The sparkly galore catches your site
You scoop it up with beaming delight
Now you know to handle it with care
Seeing oppurtunity when it is there
Although this might not be the same shell for which you yearned
At least now you know you lost and you learned
You win you lose, you cheer and you pout
In this tidal wave ocean-washing in and washing out

Wow thats really good

[swedeace]

Great poetry, everyone!

Once I set aside time and motivation, I can go crazy with poetry writing. Here's a quick, rough draft I wrote in a matter of minutes this past summer. I am going to modify it sometime because some parts don't make sense. But you can all read it and let me know what you think.

Untitled - I can't decide on a title!!! ???

Call me crazy,
call me unique,
but please don't be so bleak,
trust my words,
trust my heart,
I don't intend on tearing us apart.

Words and suggestions are deeply heard,
I just like to be heard,

When no one understands,
this unempathic relationship runs amuck,
all my faith is stored up as luck,

the unknown force is driven,
which makes this relationship lean on a balance beam,
to which a foreseen reason is deemed,

two like persons are alike and unlike at once,
slowly this friendship is opened both ways,
tolerating each other's silly stays,

only life's journey knows which path it will go,
enjoying each other's conflicting company,
both in strange ways,
despite my complaints,
never will I give up,
on this friendship I treasure so dearly....

I love writing poetry as a means of expressing my thoughts, feelings and emotions. I don't write a lot of it because of time, but when I get the ball rolling with motivation, I can go on and on with them....

[consentida]

I love to write poems/songs. I'm weird about putting them online anywhere because I'm afraid someone's going to steal it or something. lol. I'm so paranoid about everything.

[platinumblondelife]

a short little poem I wrote. . .

Change
Late night, swirling navy clouds
Hover above a mind blocked from happiness:
Alone now, wearing masks with painted smiles
Laced with thought of insecurities
Present. Future. Doubt and insecurity
Do dance on shoulders -
Through faith: beauty in the unknown awakens the soul
While memories of a hallmark past linger.
letting go becomes a reality:
visions of change begin to emerge;
Visions of the future bring peace.