New LITB fan fic (Beavers fall from grace)

[scanman17]

hi everyone
im new to this site. LITB is my all-time fave show. look forward to talking with you

[BBF]

Welcome to the Boards Scanman17!
BeaversBiggestFan


P.S. Sami dg, I can't wait to read more of your story, its great!

[sami dg]

Im glad everyone is enjoying the fan-fic so far and please dont hesitate to keep giving your comments good or bad I try to use constructive criticizm to the best.
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The scene changes to the following Morning Thanksgiving morning to the Cleavers, June, Ward, and the Beaver enjoying breakfast. All are trying to be pleasant and try not to bring up anything about Beavers decision, Beaver not minding this at all is keeping somewhat silent.

June- Beaver, How are your eggs?

Beaver- Oh fine mom.

Ward- They must be you've eaten three helpings.

Beaver- Oh, I didnt really notice, they are good though

June- Well , Im glad you like it Beaver.

Ward not being able to resist it any longer changes the subject some.

Ward- I dont suppose you'll get meals like these when you join the Army, No sir when I was in the Navy the cuisine wasnt what you would call delightful.

Beaver(obviously agitated)- No I dont guess so.

June- Please, can we avoid this conversation at least today it being Thanksgiving and all.

Ward- No June, I think it needs to be addressed, I certainly will not encourage the Beaver to throw his life away...

The conversation is ended abruptly when the back door is knocked and June goes to answer it thinking it is Wally and Mary Ellen, however to her surprise it is Wally's longtime friend Eddie Haskell. Eddie is now a Banker and the Mayfield Savings and Loan and the years have been good to Eddie and being the same old Eddie he is quite boisterous about it.

June(opening the door finding Eddie) Oh hello Eddie

Eddie- Hello, Mrs. Cleaver, my my you are lovely as ever.

June- Thank you Eddie. Wont you come in and have some breakfast.

Eddie- Oh no, My maid Lena prepared a srumptuos meal for me this morning, I was just wondering if Wally were here?

June- Not yet Were not expecting he and Mary Ellen for a couple of hours.

Eddie- Oh thank you Mrs. Cleaver (noticing Beaver) Oh hello Theodore, I didnt know you were home from State? How is everything at the old Ivy halls?

Beaver- Allright I guess Eddie.

Eddie- I suppose you and Mr. Cleaver are very proud of Theodore he may perhaps show the potential we all knew he had.

Beaver(losing his cool) No Eddie, I dont suppose I will reach my potential and no one is too proud of me either, Im not doing well at State my grades are barely good enough to get me by and to top it all off to finish out my dissapoint ment to everyone Im quitting and joining the Army this Monday.

Eddie for the first time in history was stunned without a reply.

Ward- Beaver! You have no right snapping at Eddie that way I think you should apologize.

Beaver- I will not, you cant control me anymore dad?

Eddie(obviously knowing he came at a bad time and that his sarcasm would not be needed) Hey thats ok Beav, Ill just come back later to see Wally.

Beaver leaves the room and June and Ward just looks at each other. What had happened to their little boy, Why would he choose to volunteer for a war that was an obviousl losing battle, How could a friend mean so much that he would throw his own future away.

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More later

[bktFan]

This story is so good. Please write more of it soon, and add Eddie in it more if you can, i love him.

[Impressions]

I can't wait to hear the ending, please write some more soon, I wonder what Beaver will decide, going to the army or going to state, post some more soon!

[sami dg]

The scene changes to Ward, June, Wally, Mary Ellen, Eddie Haskell, and the Beaver all sitting in the living room after a delicious Thanksgiving dinner that was prepared by June and Mary Ellen. Eddie had attended because Wally found out that his parents were out of town and Eddie had no one to spend Thanksgiving day with, June then obviously invited Eddie to join in.

Eddie- Mrs. Cleaver it was good of you to invite me to partake in the meal this evening it was quite delicious.

June- Im glad you enjoyed it Eddie.

Eddie- Oh yes, I was quite fond of the stuffing. Lena was going to prepare Goose but your turkey was quite good Mrs. Cleaver.

June- Thank you Eddie.

Everyone is engaging in small conversation except for the Beaver who seems to be in his own world.

Ward- Beaver, do you want to go into the den with Wally, Eddie and I and watch the game?

Beaver- No thanks dad

June- But Beaver you have always enjoyed watching football on Thanksgiving.

Beaver(sounding irritated with everyone) Can a guy not just sit here without getting the third degree.

Ward- Now listen here Beaver Ive had just about enough of your attitude this evening, now just because you have decided to do the most irresponsible thing of your life does not mean.....

At this time the doorbell rings and the room goes silent. June goes to answer the door because she knew who the visitor was.

June- I'll get it

Ward- Were you expecting more company dear?

June doesnt answer Wards question she just goes to the door to let in her visitor. When she opens the door to everyones surprise they all see Mrs. Mondello at the door. She had definitely aged quite a bit but she seemed to be strong. The Mondellos had moved back to Mayfield a few years before and shortly after the move Larry was drafted into the Army and shipped off to Vietnam, and of course later killed.

June- Oh Mrs. Mondello Im so glad you could make it.

Mrs. Mondello- When you phoned this morning I made plans to come by this evening.

Ward- Its so good to see you Mrs. Mondello, here let me take your coat, can we offer you some Turkey or anything?

Mrs. Mondello- Oh no Mr Mondello and I have already eaten, I just came by so I could speak with Beaver, could we be alone?

Ward- Why yes, of course you can use my den

Mrs. Mondello (addressing Beaver)- Wont you come talk to me for a minute?

Beaver obviously stunned by Mrs. Mondello's visit obliges her and follows her into the den and he takes a seat on the couch and she sits next to him.

Mrs. Mondello- Beaver, its so good to see you, you have become so handsome.

Beaver- Thank you.

Mrs Mondello- I understand from your mother that you have made a big decision in your life?

Beaver- Yes maam

Mrs. Mondello- May I ask the reason your choosing to join the Army?

Beaver no longer able to control his emotions just starts crying and Mrs. Mondello hugs him tightly and when he regains his composure a bit he tries to explain himself to her.

Beaver- I know its not gonna bring Larry back and I know that I will be risking my life, but we were blood brothers and I promised to never leave him and I did he died and I wasnt there to help him, maybe I couldnt have but maybe I could have. I miss him so much I betrayed him. I feel like I have got to do something, I owe Larry that much.

Beaver loses his composure again and cries, and Mrs Mondello reaches into her purse and hands Beaver a hankerchief.

Mrs. Mondello- Beaver look at me I want to show you something.

She reaches into her purse again and hands an envelope to Beaver. He does not open it and just awaits an explanation.

Mrs Mondello- Thats the last letter Larry wrote me from Vietnam, he wrote at least once a week. He always spoke of you in his letters Beaver, he dearly loved you, but in this letter he spoke of how horrible it was in those jungles and how glad none of us were there to see what was going on. He went on to say how proud he was of you at State and how he wished he could have applied himself more in school and maybe went with you. He said he was glad you werent in that awful place. Beaver he loved you very much and I dont think he would want you to to this.

Mrs. Mondello hugged Beaver again got up.

Mrs. Mondello- Beaver I want you to have that letter, please Beaver reconsider.

Without saying anything else Mrs Mondello leaves the room and exchanges pleasantries with the Cleavers before leaving

The scene changes to the kitchen where Ward and June are cleaning up.

Ward- My that Eddie sure went on and on about his job at the bank didnt he.

June- You would have thought he was chairman of the board.

Ward-(being a bit humorous) its almost unnerving knowing that Eddie Haskell is in charge of so much money.

The two exchange smiles, when Beaver enters the room.

Beaver- Mom, Dad Ive decided to not join the army and go back to State

June(obviously elated)- Oh Beaver Im so glad you changed your mind.

Ward- Yes Beaver I think your making the right decision.

The mood changes a bit when Beaver starts crying.

Ward- Beaver! What is it?

Beaver(crying) Why did he have to die?Why?

June drops her dish rag and embraces her son and Ward does the same. All are relieved that Beaver is not joining the Army but they know the pain of the War will be felt for years to come.

The scene fades to black
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Well thats it I hope you all enjoyed it!

[BBF]

Oh My GOSH!!!!!!!! Sami dg, that story was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Have you considered a career in writing? It made me want to cry!!!!! (I held it in though) You need to write another one soon!!!!! That was great!!!!!

BBF

[DarleneIllyria]

Originally posted by BeaversBiggestFan
Oh My GOSH!!!!!!!! Sami dg, that story was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Have you considered a career in writing?

I agree. You have such a talent Sami dg. You are an awesome writer.

It made me want to cry!!!!! (I held it in though)

You are quite lucky BBF. I'm over here crying my eyes out again over Sami's story.

You need to write another one soon!!!!! That was great!!!!! I'll add a big ditto to that!

BBF [/QUOTE]

[Impressions]

Wow! That was very brilliantly written and well thought out, you are very talented I hope you keep writing more stories! I'm glad Beaver decided not to join the army, and when Mrs. Mondello came to talk about Beaver and that Letter, was a good way to wrap-up the storie, good job!

[sami dg]

Thank you, I have written one other LITB fan fic which was a bit more light hearted it was Wally's Drag race I believe it is on page 3 of the archives of this forum.

[scanman17]

that was an excellent story sami dg. i particularly liked the fact that you let june use her quiet motherly wiles to save the day by beckoning mrs. mondello. she did that a couple of times in the run of the show, and it was always so cool because she never said boo about what she was doing. she just did what she had to do. i also thought you did an excellent job with the dialect all of the characters used. when i read the stroy and pretended i was hearing their voices, it sounded exactly as they would speak.
you have a knack for writing. i would say you should lean towards screenplay writing since you set up your scenes well, have excellent dialogue, and wrap up scenes well.
since you said you welcomed constructive criticism, my only extremely minor complaint was that i thought beaver changed his mind too quickly, or at least told them that he changed his mind too quickly. but maybe its just because i wanted to read more of you fine story.
thanks again

[sami dg]

Thank you scanman for your compliments. I also agree with you on the issue of Beaver changing his mind too quickly, however I couldnt think of a way to bring it in without being way to melodramatic,so I just let be quick. Thank you however I always welcome constructive criticism because it helps me with future writings.

[Fred G Cleaver]

you turned Beaver into a *****

[vze3t9q9]

SAMI Good job. All I did was cry on 8=15-02 post. I'm glad shows were a bit fluffy in those days. I can't take shows where I cry. I felt for Mrs Mondello.

[Waterston_Fan]

That was really good...