WRITER NOTE: This is my new fan-fic. It gets better as it goes along. So, please hang with me. lol!
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Raina sat on a stool at "Anchor-Side Bar and Grill." She seemed to be waitng for someting. Then, Jinny and Magda walked in.
"Where is she?" Jinny asked, looking around the busy resturant, which was always busy on Friday nights.
"There she is!" Replyed Jinny's partner in crime, Magda. The two cops walked over to the other cop and sat down on both sides of her.
"Spill." Magda said.
"What?"
"Oh, come on!" Jinny said back. "You had to invite down here for SOMETHING!"
"Well, I didn't. I just wanted to-" But before Raina could finish, Magda's cell phone rang. She dug it out of her purse, turned it on and put it to her ear.
"Magda." A few minutes later, she hung up. "That was Cap. She said to get to 13th street on the double." She walked out, follwed by Raina, then Jinny who said: "I LOVE this job!"

You'll find out later why it's called "Raina cracks up." But what do you think so far? Good or bad. Please reply. :)

I like it :)

Thanks for the message. Come on... keep going. :-p Good job so far.

It's good keep going sorry it took me so long to responde I have not had a good week


POST!!!

:typing: <----- Me sitting at my computer waiting 4 u 2 post more.

Originally posted by MovieHuntress17
:typing: <----- Me sitting at my computer waiting 4 u 2 post more.

Thanks, moviehuntress17! Glad you like it! I just posted the next part to "Kidnapped" so, I guess I'll be nice and post the next part to this one. lol!

"Thank God!" Kate said, walking over to Magda, Jinny, and Raina.
"What's going on?" Jinny asked, looking at the house behind her Boss. Police men and women were going this way and that.
"Murder." Cap. replyed. "Two little girls. Twins about 10-years-old." She handed the women pictures of the victims.
"Parents?" Magda asked, looking at hers.
"Don't know. Baby-sitter said she found the girls laying around. One in the closet. Other: under he bed."

As Capatin Kate said this, Raina was looking at one of the officers. He winked at her. She smiled.
"Excuse me." Raina said, after Cap. was doen talking. She walked to the cop. "Hi. My names Raina." She extended her hand.
"Luke. Luke Dash." He exstended his own. They shook hands, gazing into each others eyes.
Kate saw the whole thing.
"Well." She said, turning back to Jinny and Magda.
"Why is she flirting at a crime scene?" Asked Jinny, sounding very upset.
"Don't worry." Magda replyed, patting Jinny on the back. "You'll get your turn at love."
"I don't know. Ever since Teddy and I broke up-" Jinny didn't finish the sentence. She walked away, crying.

Now, if your saying 'Jinny and Theodore broke up?!' I have a plan. It'll come later in the story. That's it for now.
I welcome any feed-back. I would like to know what you guys think. :)

-Brandon

"Ever since me and Teddy broke up"

awww, she misses him,i hope they get back together again. By the way why did Raina invite Jin and Mag to anchorside?

i think its great, you should deffinetly (sp) post more

Can't wait to se you doing this again ~~:typing: :

I think iz good, can't wait 2 find out wut ur plan is lol

Keep up the great work :)

Originally posted by JDS84
Keep up the great work :)

Thanks! This part is SO good (I think it is anyway.) lol! Hope you think it's good as well! :)

Jinny walked into her house, crying. She took off her jacket, and threw it on the floor, then she walked back to her bed room.

A few minutes later, Jinny fell asleep, but was instantly woken by the sound of a closing door. Thining it was a robber, Jinny got up, got her gun and went to where she heard the noise: the kitchen.
When she got to the kitchen, Jinny looked around very slowly for any find of movement, and heard foot steps!
Her fingers trembling from fright, Jinny turned away, and pulled the trigger. A BOM was heard, follwed by the body hitting the floor. Crying, Jinny turned on the light, ran over to the body, and turned it over. She got she shock of her life.
Laying on the floor, bleeding to deat was... Theodore!

My plan is developing. Will post more soon. Feed back welcome. :)

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Sorry I haven't posted in a few. It's just that I was so busy with my other new fan-fic. (House on Haunted Hill <The Divsion style>) that I forgot about this one. Anyways, here's the next part. :)

Angela, C.D, and Magda were sitting at there desk, when Raina walked in, with a big smile on her face.
"Hi." She said, cheerful.
"How was your date last night with Luke?" Magda asked.
"Isn't it abvious?" Replyed Angela. "They slept together!"
"We did NOT!" Raina protested.
"Then why does it look like you slept with a hanger in your mouth?' C.D joked.
Raina was about to say something back, when Kate opened the door to her office.
"Raina." She said. "May I speak to you?"
Confused, Raina went into Caps. office, and sat down in a chair, while Cap. sat on the egde of her desk, closer to Raina.
"I need to talk to you about something" Cap. said. "About you and Luke."
Outside in The Division, everybody was going on about there business, when Jinny walked in, her eyes puffy and red. She walked to Magda's desk.
"Mag." Jinny said. "I need to talk to you." She took Magda's hand, and they left the room.
They walked into the girls bathroom, and Jinny looked under the stalls, faced Magda, and said.
"I shot Theodore!"

KATE'S OFFICE

"Why are you so concerned about Luke and me?" Raina asked, still confused.
"Well." Cap. said, heaving a big sigh. "I think you should stop seeing each other."
"My personal life is none of your concern!"
"But your job is."
"Are you threating me?"
"I just don't want you to get hurt just becasue Luke is white and your black." Said Cap. "In this day-in-age, you could get hurt pertty badly. So, it's eithier your love life, or your job here at The Divison."
"I am NOT going to stop seeing Luke!" Raina shouted, her eyes feeling up with tears.
"Then your fired!"

Feed back welcome! Will post more soon! :)

This is great. Keep up the good work.

Here's more! :)

"You SHOT Theodore?!" Magda said, very shocked at what she just heard.
"It was an accident." Replied Jinny, crying. "I-I thought he was sombody else! A robber. It was dark, and I couldn't see anything."
"Is he ok?"
"I don't know. When I found out it WAS him, I called the police. I lied and said I found him like that."
"You need to go see him."
"And what...... Magda?! Say, 'Hey, I shot you because I thought you were a robber'? I don't think so!"
"You don't have to tell him. Just go see him. Your going to have to face him sooner or later, Jin."
"Your right." Jinny said, with a minutes thought. "I owe him that much. Thanks, mag." She huged Magda and walked out of the bathroom.
"Damn I'm good!"

THAT NIGHT

"Thanks for walking me to my door." Said Raina, to Luke.
"Rain, I need to talk to you. I hate to tell you this after what Cap. said this afternoon, but... I think she should see other people."
"I understand." Raina replied. Luke kissed her, and walked back to his car. "I understand just prefectly! I'm going to get you AND Kate back for hurting me. Even if it kills me, I WILL get you BOTH back!"

What do you think so far? Good or bad, I like getting replies from you guys. Will post more soon! :)

This is great!:) post more a.s.a.p:wave:

Keep up the great work :thumbsup:

This part is short.

Jinny walked over to Theodore, and looked at him. He was asleep. She knelt down beside him, and Theodore opened his eyes, and looked at Jinny.
"Hey." He said, weakly.
"Hey."
"Glad you came."
"So am I." Jinny didn't know what she was thinking, but she leaned in close to Teddy's face, and gave him a passionate kiss.
They heard someone's footsteps stop in the door way. Jinny broke off the kiss, turned around, and saw... Jack!

What do you think? Will post more soon. Maybe tomorrow if I get enough replys. :)

I think this is great!! I hope you decide to post more.

:wave: ditto

I wasn't going to post any until tomorrow, but I think I've kept you in suspence long enough. lol! BTW, I used one of Lisa Marie Presley's songs for this post. So it's kinda long. Enjoy! :)

OUT ON THE ROAD BETWEEN NOWHERE AND HELL, I CAUGHT A GLIMPS OF MY REFLEXTION IN YOU.

Raina walked into her house with mixed feelings. Part good. Part bad.

BUT THEY CAN'T BELIEVE I STILL WANT YOU AROUND. HUNG ON THE LINE BETWEEN ADDICTION AND THIS. I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU SAID I HURT YOU AGAIN.

Jinny, her eyes hooked on Jack, pushed herself, and she walked over to him.

BUT I CAN'T AFFORD TO LET YOU GET AWAY. AND I CANNOT TAKE THE DARKNESS WHEN YOU STAY.

Raina walked into the kitchen, and went to the knife drawer.

YOU'RE ALL I SEE. AND IT'S DEFINITLY MY FAULT. YOU'RE ALL I SEE. BUT DON'T COME NEAR ME AT ALL.

"I'm sorry." Jinny said. "But we're no longer married." Jack slapped Jinny across the face, and went out of the room.

HOW MANY ROADS BETWEEN YOUR WORLD AND MINE? HOW MANY BROKEN DOORS AND HOW MANY FIGHTS?

Raina opened the knife drawer, and took out a knife. She looked at it's sharp, silver blade, and grinned.

I CHANGED MY FURNETURE TO MAKE YOU GO AWAY. BUT I'M STILL OVERWHELMED AT HOW MUCH SPACE YOU TAKE. YOU'RE ALL I SEE.

Her hand over her cheek where Jack slapped her, she watched him walk away. "Bastard!" She said under her breath.

AND IT'S DEFINITLY MY FAULT. YOU'RE ALL I SEE. BUT DON'T COME NEAR ME AT ALL.

Raina put the knfe in her pocket, and went out the door of her house.
Few minutes later:
She walked to Luke's door, and rang the door bell. Luke opened it.
"Raina?" He said, surpised. "What are you doing here?"
Raina took the knife out her pocket, and stabbed Luke in the chest. He fell to the floor.

YOU'RE ALL I SEE. AND IT'S DEFINITLY MY FAULT.

The phone rang in Theodore's room. Jinny walked to it, and picked it up.
"Hello? Magda? What?!?! Oh, my God. OK. I'll be there in 5." Jinny hung up the phone, and ran out of the room.

YOU'RE ALL I SEE. BUT DON'T COME NEAR ME AT ALL.

"Jinny?" Jack asked, when he saw Jinny running into the waiting room, crying. "What's the matter?"

THIS IS- THIS IS DEFINITLY MY FAULT.

"It's Cap." Jinny said. "She's been shot."

HUNG ON THE LINE BETWEEN ADDICTION AND THIS. I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU SAID I HURT YOU AGAIN.

He watched Jinny run out of the hospital. Jack, suddenly had an idea. A BAD idea. He walked back to Theodore's room, with a big grin on his face.

What do you think? Will post more soon.

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Oh my god this is great!!!

"Where's Cap.?" Jinny asked, walking up to Kates house. Magda walked over to her.
"She's been taken to the hospital." Replied Magda. "We don't know if she's going to live. Do you reconize THIS?" Magda held up a bag with a Gun in it. "We found it at the crime scene."
"That looks like Raina's gun." Jinny replied, looking at the gun, hardly. Jinny couldn't explain it, but she had the feeling to turn around. So, she did and saw... Raina.

Sorry so short. But I'll make it up next time. I'll make a long post.
Feed-back welcome. :)

This is great post more soon!:)

Post more soon!!!

Like I said this is going to be a long post. Hope you like! :)

"Why are you two looking at me?" Asked Raina, looking at Jinny and Magda.
"No reason." Magda replied. "Raina, is this gun yours?"
Raina was about to answer, when Jinny's cell-phone rang.
"Damnit!" Jinny said, taking the phone out of her pocket. She looked at who was calling. The hospital Theodore was in. "Excuse me?" She put the phone to her ear. "Hello? OK, I'm on my way!" Jinny put the phone back in her pocket, and turned to Magda. "I have to go. It's some thing about Theodore.. I'll see you later. Good luck, Raina." With that, Jinny walked off.
"Raina, is this gun yours?" Magda asked again to Raina.
"Yes. Why?"
Magda tackeled Raina to the ground.
"I need hand-cuffs!" Said Magda. A police men walked over to them, and gave her hand cuffs. Magda put them on Raina's wrist while saying:
"You're under arrest. Anything you say can and will be held against you in the court of Law."

Jinny walked into the hospital, and over to the check-in lady.
"Hey." Jinny said to the lady, whom looked about in her 50's. "My name is Jinny Exstead. You called me about Theodore-"
"Yes." The woman said. "I hate to tell you this, but he's dead."
"How the hell did that happen?"
"Apparently, he was shot, several times, in his sleep."
"May I see the gun?" Asked Jinny, tears stinging her eyes. "I work with the cops."
The woman showed Jinny the gun. It was in a plasic bag.
"Thank you." Jinny continued. She knew who did it. She stromed out of the hospital on the way to his house.

I hope that was worth the wait. What do you think? More soon!

Keep up the great work!!!

Alright!!! It's October, and where are you?! I don't know. But I am hoping you'll get back here and POST MORE SOON!!! Coz I'm getting board, and it's a really good story!!!

~Jordan