One of the women gets kidnapped. Guess which one!

Jinny's alarm clock went off at it's normal time: 7:00 a.m. She Pushed the 'Snooze' button, and went back to sleep. She was in the middle of a GREAT dream. She was having sex with Brad Pitt.
(I'm not gay. My mother has a MAJOR crush on him. lol.) A few mintues later,the alarm went off again. So, Jinny shut it off, got out of bed, and went to the bathroom to take a shower and brush her teeth. She took a 15 min. shower, got out, and put her robe on. Then she brushed her teeth. After she did that, Jinny went to her bed room to get dressed. Wearing black slacks, a blue shirt, and her black leather jacket/coat (which ever you prefer), Jinny walked out of her house, thinking she'll get breakfast at the "Waffle House" on her way to T.D. But when she got in her car, somebody from the back seat put a rag over Jinny's mouth, smothering her! She tried to fight back, but couldn't! Her vision was getting blury. Finally, she passed out.

What do you think? More? :confused:

yah good start add more!

It caught me attention you should continue!

Originally posted by jinnygirl2005
It caught me attention you should continue!

Yea, ditto

Nice story so far... When you messaged me telling me about it first I thought you were talking about a FOL Fan fic so I was surprised when I saw it on here. You've got a nice start... LOL I was laughing over Jinny's dream. haha... See you've got more replies now then just the one when you messaged me. Keep going don't just abandon the fic... Looking forward for more...

It's really great.

Thanks for all the replys guys! Here's more! :)

Magda walked through the The Division doors, and into her office where she and her gal-pals worked. She looked over at Jinny's desk, which was empty. "Where's Jinny?" Magda asked. "She mainly gets here before I do. "I don't know." Her friend C.D replyed. "Maybe she's sick or something." But that wasn't it. Magda couldn't explain it.. but... a felling told her that just wasn't true. "I hope that's all it is."

Sorry so short, but I'm starting to write the next part now. I WILL post it soon! :)

Hey, good thing you're writing more now. People that like a fan fic get, ummm what's the word? ABUSIVE??! lol At least mine do... they have developed their own "Mafia" against me... It's scary. ;) lol Great fic... Keep going!! I have to add more to my fan fic today also- so you're not the only one. haha

Originally posted by #1_Nancy_McKeon
Hey, good thing you're writing more now. People that like a fan fic get, ummm what's the word? ABUSIVE??! lol At least mine do... they have developed their own "Mafia" against me... It's scary. ;) lol Great fic... Keep going!! I have to add more to my fan fic today also- so you're not the only one. haha

Oh, shut up and post. lol JK! Well, you can talk. For right now. lol

BlairFan101...you should post soon too! Its great!

I love it!!!!!! Post more as soon as you can!!!

Originally posted by JDS84
I love it!!!!!! Post more as soon as you can!!!

Thanks, guys! Here's the next part. It's short, and kind of a cliff-hanger *evil laugh* lol! Read in good health. :rolleyes: lol! Enjoy!

When Jinny came to, the room she was was TOTALLY dark. "Where the hell am I?"she asked out loud. She heard a noise. A creaking noise. "Who's there?" Nobody replyed. Jinny, starting to get a little scared, heard heavy breathing, then a GUN shot! Frightened more then ever, Jinny tried to get up from the thing she was laying on. (She couldn't see what it was, it was so dark), but she couldn't! She was tied down! Thinking fast, Jinny screamed: "HELP!!!!!!!!!!! SOMEONE PLEASE HELP ME!!!!!!!!!" Just then, a hand came across her mouth. "Shout like again, and I'll blow your f***ing brains out!" It sounded like a mans voice. The kidnapper took his hands off of Jinnys mouth and, thinking he was lieing, Jinny screamed again: "HELP ME PLEASE!!!!" The kidnapper pulled the trigger on the gun, then came a loud BOM! He didn't hear Jinny scream anymore more.

Is that cliff hanger enough for ya! lol! Will post more soon!

:eek2:

Originally posted by #1_Nancy_McKeon
Hey, good thing you're writing more now. People that like a fan fic get, ummm what's the word? ABUSIVE??! lol At least mine do... they have developed their own "Mafia" against me... It's scary. ;) lol Great fic... Keep going!! I have to add more to my fan fic today also- so you're not the only one. haha

Yupp and if you don't post soon we will have to get it started up again!

as for this fan fic I think "Ewan" said it all... Oh but there is one last thing POST, don't turn into Miranda on us!

"Mag." Angela said. "Don't worry. I'm sure Jin's fine!" Just then, Kate walked in. "Hello, ladies." she said, going into her office.
Magda got an idea. She got up from her chair and followed Captain Kate into her office, closing the door behind her.

"There." The kidnapper said. "Maybe death will teach you to close your mouth!" He walked over to to the thing Jinny was on (a chair.) and felt around to see if she was alive, but... the chair was EMPTY! "What on hell!" The kiddnapper said out loud. He stumbled in the dark to find the light switch. Once he found it he turned it on, looked over at the chair, and Jinny was not sitting in it. Just then, he fell to the floor. Once he did, he reavled the person behind him.
It was... Jinny!

Will post more soon! I'm on my summer break so I won't have school work interfear with the thing I love to do: WRITE! :clap:

your on summer vacation already!!!! god my school sucks!!!

post more! It's good who is the kidnapper

I get to go see down with love tomorrow I'm soo excitied and then I'm going to see it saturday too! and my parents leave for a week saturday too, if you and miranda and michelle post twice a per day It will be the best week of my life, maybe...

Hope you enjoy the movie, jinnygirl2005! Here's the next part:

"What do you want, Magda?" asked Kate when she turned around and saw her.
"I was wondering about Jinny. Did she call you?"
"Why would Exstead call me?"
"Because." Said Magda, getting a little worried. "She isn't here!"
"I'm sure there's nothing to worry about. Besides what could happen to her?"
"Well, let me see... rape, died in her sleep or... kidnapping."
"Magda-" Kate began. "So, me get this right." Magda interupted. "Jinny could be hurt or even WORSE and you don't give a damn?! Why can't you send one of our cops over to her house? That IS what they are there for. Not just to scratch there as- butts and eat doughnuts after every football game."
"I swear. Your begining to begin to act like Exstead everyday." Captain replyed. "Alright. I'll send a few cops over to her house, but if she is there, you'll shut up about this for the rest of the day! But if she isn't there-" Magda had an answer: if she isn't there at her house, let the search party begin."

What do you think so far? There are ALOT of GREAT stuff ahead. Will post more soon! ;)

I Love it!!! Post more!!!!!!!

This part is VERY SUSPENCEFUL! I'm telling you now so your blood sugar won't hit the roof! :lol: Enjoy! ;).

Jinny dropped the thing she hit with the kidnapper, and just stood over him. "Piece of-" She was cut off by voices. Far away voices that came from behind her. Jinny looked, and saw 3 people coming. They were carring guns and knifes. "Must work for the slimball." Jinny said to herself. "Were going to rip her heart out!" One of the men said, very pissed.
Jinny looked around for away out, but didn't see any. They where coming closer, closer. She could hear there footsteps on the hard floor. Thinking fast, Jinny hid in a closet, and just in time, too. Becasue as soon as she did, the men came into the room. They saw there leader on the floor, knocked out. One of the men bent over him, calling his name: "Calab. Calab, wake up." Calab opened his eyes. "How many times do I have to tell you, Larry," Calab said, taking off his mask." To call me Master. You know I'm a Vampire." He pushed himself up. Where is that bitch?" Jinny backed away as one of Calabs men walked past her, and the floor creaked. He looked at Calab, then started to walk to the closet, holding a knife.

Suspenceful huh? Maybe I'll leave you in this state for a few days (maybe longer.) lol! Tell me what you think so far!

Since oneone is replying to this The Divsin fan-fic. I'[m closing it down. Thanks to every one who DID reply!

YOU CAN'T CLOSE IT DOWN!!!


well at least e-mail it to me. PM it to you

Originally posted by jinnygirl2005
YOU CAN'T CLOSE IT DOWN!!!


well at least e-mail it to me. PM it to you

Hey, guys! I decied not to close it down. Unless you want me too. Do you? :confused:.

-Brandon.

That's easily answered......No we don't want you to.




The great lords have spoken..... WHA HA HA HA lol j/k but dont close it.

you know that I want you to post soo I think you should!

:eek: Don't leave us hanging? Okay maybe a day at most. Help! I can't wait. Great Job! Keep on Writing.....

Originally posted by toadwilliams
:eek: Don't leave us hanging? Okay maybe a day at most. Help! I can't wait. Great Job! Keep on Writing.....

Thanks. Sorry I haven't been on the board in awhile. I was on vaction and didn't get back until today. Anyways, I should post more tonight. ;).

Like I promised, here's the next part. Hope you like it!

Magda paced back and forth in Captain Kates office, worring about Jinny and a bunch of other stuff.
Kate, then walked in. Magda ran over to her boss.
"Well?"
"Jinny isn't home. We knocked on her door several times. No answer. But-" Kate said, seeing Magda's eyes building up with tears. "We did find this in her car." She handed Magda a rag. She took it, and smelled of it. Then looked at Cap and said: "Clorophrome."

If you don't know what clorophrome is, it's something that knocks you out for a few hours.
Will post the next part tomorrow. I'm almost done writing it.

Keep up the great work!!!!!!!!

Here's the next part.

The man walked closer to the closet. He put his hand on the knob, and turned it, very slowly. Finally, the man yanked the door open and when he did, Jinny pushed him, and he fell to the floor. Then she ran as fast as her feet could carry her, dodging every bullet that came from the guns Calabs men were shooting.
One of them hit her in the sholder, but that just made Jinny run faster. She jumped through a closed window, shattering the glass into a million, tiny pieces.

With her face cut and bleeding, Jinny ran until she came to a water fall. Her vision was getting blurry.
"Magda." Jinny said, in a hoarse wisper. "I-I-I'm dieing."
Finally, Jinny closed her eyes, and fell to the ground.

I welcome any feed-back, good or bad. I would like to know what you guys think! :)

I love it! Continue! Continue!

I think u shud post more! and soon

Post more this is great!!

A FEW DAYS LATER

Kate sat behind her desk, reading the latest murder case in the news paper, when Magda came in.
"Did anybody call?" She asked.
"No. But I'm sure sumebody will. We put up posters with Exstead's picture on it all over town. Relax."
Just then, Magda's cell phone rang. Luckily, she had it in her hand, so all she had to do was turn it on, and put it to her ear.
"What?! I mean.. this is Magda."
A weak voice on the other end of the line said: "Help...... me. Help me."
"Who is this?" After that all Magda could hear was the dial tone. She turned the cell phone off, confused.
"Who was that?" Asked Cap., putting the paper on her desk.
"This is going to sound crazy" Magda replyed, still stunned. "But it sounded like... it sounded like Jinny."

Will post the next part soon. Feed-back welcome.

I think you better post more

im confused:confused: how could Jinny run to a waterfall-unless she ran to Napa or sumthing-oh well,who cares,this is great,post more A.S.A.P

Originally posted by *Nancy Mckeon*
im confused:confused: how could Jinny run to a waterfall-unless she ran to Napa or sumthing-oh well,who cares,this is great,post more A.S.A.P

You'll see where Calab took Jinny in this post. Hope you like! :)

Magda was at her desk, asleep. She was tired from the lack of rest she got, worring about Jinny.
She was quickly jolted out of a dream she was having by the sound of Caps. voice, calling her name.
"What is it?" Asked Magda, yawning.
"I've got a phone call you might want to take." Cap. replyed. "It's about Exstead."
With these words, Magda shot out of her chair, and ran into Captain Kate's office. She ran over to the phone, and picked it up.
"Hello? Yes, this is the person that put up the posters of Jinny Exstead. You what?! Thank you so much." Magda replaced the phone back into the cradel. Then, she turned around and saw Cap. standing in the door way. "Somebody found Jinny. In Napa."
"Napa?" Asked Kate, stunned.
"Yep."
"Let's go then."

NAPA

Kate and Magda walked into Calab's shack, calling Jinny's name.` They got no reply, and didn't see anyone in sight.
"I'm going to look outside." Said Magda, walking to the door. She walked out.
Cap. walked further into the shack. She, then, felt a draft. Kate shone her flashlight on the broken window Jinny ran into.

Outside in the almost dusk sky, Magda looked around, flashlight in hand.
Something red cought her eye. She walked over to it, kneelt down, and put her index finger in it. Then, Magda smelled of it.
"Blood. Jinny's?"
Magda looked down into the woods, and saw a whole tail of BLOOD!
Magda pushed herself up, and started running, following the red trail. She stopped at a waterfall, and saw nothing but a jacket.
Magda picked it up.
"Oh, no! This is Jinny's!"
She walked closer to the edge.
"Jinny!!!!!! It's me... Magda!!!!! Jiny-AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH"
Magda fell over the edge, getting closer and closer to the waterfall, which could kill anybody from a fall that high.

What do you think so far?

Sorry. I meant to saw 'water.' Magda was getting closer to the water, which could kill anybody from a fall that high.'

hi i've been gone for awhile and your ff is the first i've read since i got back and it's great!
more please!

Originally posted by extead
hi i've been gone for awhile and your ff is the first i've read since i got back and it's great!
more please!

Well, I'm glad you like you like it! Here's the next part.

Magda came to the surface of the water, gasping loudly becasue it was so cold.
She could here struggling from where she just fell. Thinking it might be Jinny, Magda swam to the banks, and pushed herself up. She, then, ran to see what was going on.
It was Cap., beating the life out of somebody. The mystery person attacked Kate, knocking her to the ground. The person stood over her, holding a knife!
Thinking fast, Magda found a big rock. She picked it up, and threw it at the the person, knocking him/her into the water.
Magda ran over to her boss, and helped her up.
"Thanks." Said Cap., breathing heavily. "Thought I was a gonner."
Magda walked over to the edge, and looked down at the water. She didn't see the perseon come to the surface.
"Who was that?" She asked, turning back to Cap.
"That was the person that pushed you into the water."

Now that Magda found out she was pushed, what do you think she will do next? Feed back welcome! :)

This is a great story. Post more as soon as possible.

:crazy: Oh no I have to wait again? I am going crazy while waiting for more......I need more.........Okay I guess I can wait.
Keep up the GREAT JOB!! --:o)

I posted parts to both my fan-fics yesterday (Raina Cracks Up; and my new one A Mother's Fight) that I forgot about this one. Here goes! :)

"Yes, Ben. You can go to the sleep over tonight." Magda sat behind her desk, talking to her son on the phone. Then, a woman, dressed like a bum walked in.
"Listen, Pappi. I gotta go. Love you. Bye." After her son said his good-byes, Magda hung up the phone, and faced the woman.
"May I help you?"
"Yes." The mystery woman replied. "I'm here to aply for the job as your partner."

WRITER'S NOTE: (since Jinny's gone, Mag. needs a replacement)

"You'll have to talk to our boss, Kate about that." Magda pointed to Caps. office, and the woman went into it.
Magda couldn't put her finger on it, but that woman reminded her of somebody. Then she knew who it was!

A FEW MINUTES LATER

The woman walked out of Kates office, and left the Division.
Magda looked at Cap who was standing in the doorway to her office, and said: "Is it me or did that woman look like-"
"Jinny?" Cap. finished Magda's sentence. "Magda, that woman WAS Jinny!"
Magda got out of her seat, got the jacket she found at the waterfall in Napa and chased after Jinny.

What do you think so far? Will post more soon. :)

I love it!!! Post more!!!

"Wait!" Magda yelled, running after Jinny, and still holding the jacket. Jinny stopped, and turned around.
"What?" She asked, looking at Magda like she was crazy.
"You may not remeber me, but I'm Magda. You used to work here. We used to be partners, you and me."
"I don't recall."
"OK. You were kidnappped or something and we couldn't find you until now."
"I don't remeber." Jinny said, getting a little pissed off.
"Exactly."
"Would you just leave me alone?!"
"Wait!" Magda said, giving Jinny the jacket. "Take this and tell me if you remember ANYTHING." Jinny took the jacket from Magda's hands, and looked at it.
"OK." Jinny said. "I'll take it, and call you tomorrow."
"Great." Replied Magda, watching Jinny walk into the darkness. "Believe me, Jinny. You'll remember."

Keep up the great work!!!

:wave: ditto

This part is short, and a cliff hanger. Enjoy!

Jinny walked into her house, holding the jacket Magda gave her.
She went into her bed room, sat on her bed, and studied the strange leather jacket vey hardly. Then, she gasped.
"I remember!" She said. "My name is.... Jinny. Jinny.... Exstead. I was.... kidnapped.. by this guy named...."
"Calab." Jinny heard a voice say behind her. She tuned around, and saw the person that kidnapped her. Calab; whom was holding a gun at Jinny.

Cliff hanger? Tell me what you think. Will post more soon!

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!great post more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:happyface

You better post more this is great!!!

Are you threating me? lol! :joke: :lol: Here's more. This, too is a cliff hanger.

"What the hell are you doing here?" Jinny asked, her voice shaking with fear.
"Visting my old friend Jinny..... Exstead is it?" Replied Calab, mocking her. "To bad you have to die!" He was about to pull the trigger when Magda rushed in.
"FREZEE!!!!!!" Magda yelled, holding a gun of her own, which was raised in the air. "Put the gun down, and nobody gets hurt!"
Calab, slowly, put his gun on the floor, but attacked Magda! The gun flew out of her hands, and hit the floor. The two dodged to get the gun, trying to see who cold get it first.
Jinny covered her eyes. Then she heard a gun shot! She took her hands off her eyes, and gasped.

Cliff hanger enough fo ya? :lol: Tell me what you think. :)

great! post more NOW!!

AAaaaaaaaahhhh!! I have to wait again......I must have more.....:happyface :crazy:

OK! OK! :lol: Here's more.

"Here." Said Kate, giving Jinny a cup of coffee. She sat in the chair beside her. They were in the hopital.
"I hope Magda will be alright." Jinny said. She took a sip of her coffee. "I have to go see her." She put her coffee cup on a table that's beside her, and gets up. She then, went to find Magda's room.

MAGDA'S ROOM

Jinny opened the door, and saw Magda laying in bed. She had wires all over her. Jinny closed the door, softly. Magda, whom was alseep woke up.
"Hey." She said, weakly.
"Hey, Mag. Thanks for saving me. And your never-endless fight for looking for me when I was gone."
"That's what friends are for."
Jinny walked over to Magda and gave her a hug.

THE END

Feed-back welcome. And Tell me if I should write ANOTHER "T.D" fan-fic. Be honest. lol!

That was great! you should definetly make a sequel or sumthing:)

*Nancy McKeon* PM-ed me and asked a very good question: "What happend to Calab?"

Well, when he shot Magda, Jinny found a piece of wood, and rammed it into his heart. Being a vampire, he exploded into dust. Sorry! :crazy:

That was a great story!!!!

Awesome story!! Work out the little kinks and post it on FanFiction.net. Keep writing you are a great writer.
:cool: :p :wave: