Tell me if you think this is any good:

"Benjamin's Song"
Benjamin was an alcoholic
But he still managed to tend the bar
He took a few sips every now and then
Although he knew he shouldn’t by far
Benjamin he blamed his ex-wife
She ran away with the pool boy
Benjamin he sure loved his wife
But right now he knew he should end his life
So he took that gun and he put it by his head
In just a few seconds Benjamin will be dead
Just Then he was reminded of his daughter
7 years old
Blonde hair,Blue eyes
Curly hair
She looks like her mother
She has such innocent eyes
Can she live without a father?
Benjamin he smiled and then rethought his decision
He put down that gun he held
He didn’t want to end his life
Even though he no longer has a wife
So the moral of this story
Is as simple as can be
If you want love then look inside and
Crawl to your family
Crawl to your family
It’s as simple
As can be
If you want love
Then Crawl your family

Good job. That song has an incredible message!:thumbsup:

i don't like it

its pretty good

Kinda depressing.... but okay, I suppose

It sounds pretty good, but it's too dramatic.

It's better that what I could do. I suck at stuff like that.

Originally posted by ~*Hannah_Lee*~
Good job. That song has an incredible message!:thumbsup:

I agree. More songs should be written like that to show what the effects that alcohol can have on people and their families.

Not bad. I like the ending. :cool: