Hi, this is my first fan fic so I hope you guys like it.

*At the Division*
Cap walks out of her office with a folder in her hands.
Captain: Okay, everyone listen up, we have an unusual case here. *everyone stops what they were doing and looks up at the Captain* We've gotten word that Ralph Wilson, the very wanted drug dealer, is going to be at the Hilton's restaurant tomorrow night. He is going to be there waiting for a girl that was set up for him by a friend of his. We recently caught this "friend" of his dealing drugs and we've made a deal with him that if he cancels the girl he had set up to go we will lessen the charges.
C.D.: What's the plan, Captain?
Captain: We've come up with an idea to catch him. We will have one of our female inspectors go undercover as this girl, have dinner with him, then take him back to her apartment, where some officers will be waiting for them, and they can arrest him. We don't want to arrest him at the restaurant as he will have a gun with him, and we don't want anyone to get hurt. The female officer who goes undercover will have to get his gun away from him once in the apartment, then it will be safe for our officers to come out from where they will be hiding and arrest him. We need a female officer who is good with men, will know how to get him to her apartment smoothly, etc.
*all eyes went to Jinny* LOL
Jinny: *seeing everyone staring at her* WHAT?!
Captain: Exstead, was that a volunteer?
Jinny: Well, as long as I've already been unanimously voted...
Captain: Good, excellent choice, if you ask me. *Captain smurks at Jinny*
Jinny *just glares at her*
Magda: * smiling at Jinny* So..Jinny..you think you can get him up in your apartment?
Jinny: *rolls her eyes and laughs* Just watch me!

Hope you guys are liking it. More later!

MMMMMMMMOOOOOOOORRRRRRREE!!!!! That was kinda rude, so maybe I should say More Please!

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*at the end of that day, everyone is leaving, people are coming in for the night shift*
Captain: *poking her head out of her office* Exstead, would you come in my office?
Jinny: Sure, Cap. *coming into Captain's office and sitting down in chair* What is it?
Captain: Here's what's going to happen tomorrow. I'll give you a picture of Wilson so you'll know what he looks like. The restaurant should be cooperative as we've informed them of everything. You'll charm him, make some remark to let him you know you want him to go to your apartment *looks at Jinny* I'm sure you'll know what to say. *Jinny folds her arms and glares at her* Once you get him in your apartment, first thing you need to do is get his gun away from him. Tell him to take off his clothes for you or something, then once the gun is a safe distance away from him, preferably in your hands, yell "Ready" and the cops that we'll have hidden in your closet and bathroom will jump out and handcuff him. Any questions?
Jinny: Nope.
Captain: *stares at Jinny for a while* Do you have something to wear?
Jinny: Do you want me to wear a dress?
Captain: Preferably.
Jinny: I have a black, spaghetti strap, few inches above the knee dress. Will that work?
Captain: I should think so. *stares at her some more* Gonna do something with your hair?
Jinny: *kinda sick of the Captain questioning how she'll look* What did you have in mind?
Captain: Could you wear it up?
Jinny: Up?
Captain: Yes, up. *goes over behind Jinny and starts messing with hair, trying to find some way to make it all stay up*
Jeff: (an officer at the division) *sticks his head in her office* Captain do you find that- *seeing Captain messing with Jinny's hair* Am I interrupting something?
Captain: *has that deer in the headlights look, lol* Uh..no..Here's that file. *goes over to her desk and fishes it out then hands it to him*
Jeff: *looks at Jinny and laughs on his way out, Jinny just shakes her head*
Jinny: Will that be all?
Captain: Uh...yes... that's all. * Captain puts her hand to her head in embarrassment, Jinny starts to leave her office* Oh, one more thing. Exstead, don't get carried away tomorrow.
Jinny: *Looks at her with a 'what's that suppossed to mean' look then turns and walks out*
*Magda is sitting at her desk, waiting for Jinny cause Jinny's gonna give her a ride home*
Jinny: Ready?
Magda: Yup.
*in the car, on the way to Magda's house*
Magda: *still wanting to tease Jinny, playfully* So..have you planned out what you're going to do tomorrow?
Jinny: *angrily, sarcastically* Of course, Magda! I'll just do to him what I've done to all the other billion guys I've slept with! It that all you people have to think about?!
Magda: Sorry, Jin, I didn't know you were taking it so seriously.
Jinny: *almost yelling* Can we just drop it?!
Magda; Sure, Jin, whatever you want. *looks out her window kind of wondering what made Jinny so touchy all of a sudden, she certainly didn't want to hurt her best friend* Look, Jinny-
Jinny: *cuts her off* We're here, bye Magda. *not looking at her, just looking out her window*
Magda: *really confused* Yeah, bye, Jin. *gets out and walks up to her house*
Jinny: *under her breath* and good riddance. *thinking to herself* Jin, you've done it again. You've made your best friend feel like your worst enemy. When will you ever learn?
*Jinny gets to her apartment and walks in the door, Theodore or "Teddy Dearest", as you guys call him, lol, is sitting on her couch looking at the T.V. Guide*
Teddy: Hi, Jinny! *he's had a great day at work so he's really happy and upbeat* How's it going?
Jinny: *looking at the floor, kinda mumbling to herself* Oh..fine.
Teddy: There's nothing on T.V. so do you want to go out to eat?
Jinny: *she's still looking at the floor* I'd rather not, I'm kinda tired.
Teddy: You do look kinda tired. Come here and I'll rub your shoulders.
Jinny: *really touched* Thanks, Teddy. *she goes over and sits on the couch and sits facing away from him, he sits behind her and starts to massage her shoulders* Teddy, can I ask you something?
Teddy: Sure.
Jinny: Am I a mean person?
Teddy: Of course not, who gave you that idea?
Jinny: Come on, be honest Teddy, surely you know I'm tougher than that.
Teddy: Well, sometimes you can be a little...uh...moody, but-
Jinny: Moody? Moody! *yelling* I am not- *stops cause she realizes she's proving his point, she laughs a little and hangs her head, she gets more serious* When I was younger I wouldn't have admitted it, but I wanted to be liked. I figured being sarcastic and funny and flirty would make me likable, and it did, but that only works with teenagers. Now, I don't know what to do. *pauses* Have you noticed how everyone's always looking for other people's flaws? People will do anything to find that little crack in your personality. They're just looking and criticizing and making fun of your problems so theirs don't seem so bad. Well, I guess I'm just rambling. *pauses and yawns* I guess I'm just tired.
Teddy: *By now he's stopped massaging and was listening intently, he rested his head on her left shoulder and started rubbing her back* Feel better now?
Jinny: Yeah, I guess so.
Teddy: You know, Jin, I love you exactly the way you are, *kisses her on the cheek* and your friends like you because of who you are. You don't need to change if that's what you're saying.
Jinny: I don't know what I'm saying anymore.
Teddy: I made some hot dogs for us, it was all you had in your refrigerator. Do you want one?
Jinny: *smiles* Sure, you spoil me, Mr. A.D.A.
Teddy: *gets up and gets them, they look like a work of art, all the mustard, ketchup, and relish is artistically placed on the hot dogs, in perfect patterns*
Jinny: *looks at the perfect hot dogs* They look to pretty eat!
Teddy: *smiles at her, happy that they pleased her* Well, I thought they'd be rather fitting, beautiful hot dogs for a beautiful woman.
Jinny: *smiles at him, kisses him on the cheek* Thank you.

awesome so far, post more soon!!

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"My dad said, 'If you want a pet, then you'll have to feed it', but instead I grabbed a story-book, I cannot wait to read it"- I have one word for you -READ- Its one of the best things to do to reach your goals.

Here's a little more, and thanks you guys for being so nice and responding!

*later that night, their plates are on her
coffee table, she has her head resting on his arm, he has his feet up on her coffee table*
Teddy: Anything interesting happen today at work?
Jinny: Well, actually, yeah...(she explains the whole thing she has to do tomorrow)
Teddy: *gets a little worried* Are you gonna be okay? I mean with him coming up to your apartment and all?
Jinny: I'll be fine. Like I said, several cops are going to be in here, you don't have to worry.
Teddy: Well, I just don't want you to get hurt. I love you too much. *puts his hand behind her head and draws it to him, he kisses her forehead gently*
Jinny: I'll be fine.
Teddy: *after a while* What are you going to wear?
Jinny: Geez, you and the Captain. I'll wear that black dress I wore to your birthday party. And- *puts her hand up so he doesn't have to ask* I'll wear my hair up.
Teddy: Ohhh, up, huh?
Jinny: Yup.
Teddy: You'll look real pretty. *smiles at her*
Jinny: I hope that dress still fits, I feel like I've gained a little weight.
Teddy: You look just as skinny as you always do, but for my sake, would you go put that dress on?
Jinny: *looks sexily at him* Sure. *she gets up and goes in her room leaving Teddy sitting on the couch, she comes in a while later with her hair up and in the dress, she even put on some black hose, black shoes, and little lipstick* Well, what do you think? *she spins around a few times*
Teddy: *stunned at how beautiful she looks* Gorgeous!
Jinny: Why, thank you, Assistant District Attorney! *She stands there for a moment looking at her dress, then looks at her watch* Oh, it's getting late, I've got to get some sleep.
(Sorry, folks, but I'm with Lisa Whelchel on the whole no sex before marriage thing so Teddy's gotta go home now)
Teddy: Well, I guess I'll be going then. *goes and gets his brief case that he set down by her door*
Jinny: Thanks for everything, Teddy, the hot dogs and the massage...
Teddy: Don't thank me, it's a pleasure doing those things for someone you love.
Jinny: *just smiles at him, then kisses him* Bye.
Teddy: Bye, see you tomorrow.
Jinny: *after closing the door she just stands there leaning into the door for a moment thing how lucky she is to have a guy who loves her so much, and makes her hot dogs, and listens....she goes to her room, changes into some P.J.s and snuggles in her bed thinking about tomorrow*

Hope it's not too bad, it's my first fan fic, thanks for reading, more soon!

I checked the board I don't know how many times today, I don't know how I could've missed this story!!! How can you hope this isn't too bad? You should be hoping it isn't too good! Not that you don't want it really good... It's all ready the best story I've read on this board, including mine! (lol) Oh my goodness, this story is sooooooooo great!!! Oh, I also agree with Lisa Whelchel on that issue, and on a lot of other things she believes in! http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/smile.gif Do you get her weekly email? (Back to the topic, I'm working on not getting as off topic as I used to.) I just love this story!!! Write more as soon as you can, and a very warm welcome to you! IM me or email me if ya wanna, that goes to all y'all other peepz out there. Basketbaiichick@aol.com or Magda_Ramirez_033@hotmail.com (I have MSN IM)
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[This message has been edited by BlairW_1 (edited 06-30-2001).]

Wow, BlairW_1, thanks for that VERY warm welcome and for the compliments! I've read and enjoyed your fanfictions, so coming from you, I take that as quite an honor! No, I don't get Lisa Whelchel's weekly e-mail, but being a Christian myself, I do agree with what she believes, too! Uh, oh, I'm getting off topic. (Where have I heard that B4? lol)
Well, here's some more, and thanks for reading!

*next morning at the Division, Jinny walks in and goes and sits down at her desk, Magda is sitting at her desk but she doesn't say anything because she doesn't want to make Jinny mad*
Jinny: *looks over at Magda then wheels over to her desk* Look...uh...I'm sorry about yesterday. I didn't mean to snap at you like that.
Magda: Oh, it's okay. I'm sorry that we were kidding about how you- *she stops herself not knowing how to put it*
Jinny: *puts her hand up* It's okay, I understand. *the two women smile at each other, happy that their little conflict had been resolved*
Captain: *pokes her head out of her office* Exstead?
Jinny: *turns and looks over at the Captain* Yeah?
Captain: Oh, you're here. *surprised Jinny's on time* Could you come in here, please?
Jinny: Sure. *to Magda* I wonder what the old battle-ax wants now.
Magda: *turns back around to her desk and laughs*
*Jinny goes into Cap's office and sits down in a chair, as before*
Captain: Are you ready?
Jinny: *acts like she doesn't know what she's talking about* Ready for what? Am I doing something today?
Captain: *starts to remind her of the case, then realizes she's just joking* Your name will be Elizabeth McShafer and-
Jinny: *cuts her off* Wait a minute, Cap. Do I look like an Elizabeth? *Cap just stares at her blankly* I mean Elizabeth is a name for sweet, innocent, blonde girls, not a tough, experienced, brunette like myself.
Captain: *looks totally blank, wasn't expecting this at all* Elizabeth's not experienced enough for you, huh? *Jinny shakes her head* How's Trixie do it for you?
Jinny: Now that's a little too far into the experienced side.
Captain: *kinda angry that Jinny's taking up her time finding a name, putting her hand on her hip* Well, what name would you prefer?
Jinny: *thinks for a moment* Uh...how about...Jackie? Yeah, I always wanted to be a Jackie.
Captain: Well, hmmm, *sarcastically* Jinny to Jackie, what a stretch, whatever, you'll be Jackie McShafer, and-
Jinny: *cuts her off* Now I don't think McShafer-
Captain: *cuts her off, says with authority and finality* You'll be Jackie McShafer. *Jinny laughs to herself, she could take a joke only so far with the Captain* Now, C.D., Angela, Magda, and Jeff will be in your apartment. C.D., Angela, and Magda will be in your bathroom, and Jeff will be in your closet, so be sure not to go into either one so Wilson doesn't see them too soon. We would like you to bring him to the apartment sometime between 10:00 p.m. and 11:00 p.m. I have the-
Jinny: Wait a minute, between ten and eleven, isn't that a little soon? When does dinner start?
Captain: He's planned to meet this girl at 8:00 p.m. From what I've heard from his past girlfriends, he likes to move fast.
Jinny: Ooooooohhhhhhh.
Captain: And besides, I have complete faith in you, Exstead, where this is concerned.
Jinny: *sarcastically* Oh, thanks.
Captain: Here's his picture. *gives Jinny a head shot of Wilson* Have any questions, all clear about tonight?
Jinny: Yup, all clear. *looking at the picture* Ewwwwwww. Can I go now?
Captain: Uh, uh. *Jinny gets up to leave, then turns back around*
Jinny: Uh, what am I supposed to do till then, any cases I'm supposed to be working on?
Captain: Umm, not that I can think of right now. Ask Magda, and if she's got everything covered then you can take the rest of the day off, until 8:00, of course.
Jinny: Okay, thanks, Cap. *Jinny walks out of Cap's office, asks Magda if she needs any help with anything, she says she's got everything under control so Jinny leaves* Bye, guys! See you tonight!
Everyone: Bye, Jin!

Please, don't take any offense to anyone with those names, actually, my middle name's Elizabeth, and I had this great part once in a play as Trixie St. James, I was stripper from Brooklyn! You guys should have seen my costume, it was great! But anyway, more later, hope you're enjoying it!



[This message has been edited by sue z q (edited 07-01-2001).]

Please Post more ASAP!!

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"My dad said, 'If you want a pet, then you'll have to feed it', but instead I grabbed a story-book, I cannot wait to read it"- I have one word for you -READ- Its one of the best things to do to reach your goals.

Originally posted by Division_Fan_Lisa:
Please Post more ASAP!!

Ditto!

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"You're born,you move on,you die,that's life."-Jo
Nancy McKeon is #1!!

Originally posted by Division_Fan_Lisa:
Please Post more ASAP!!

SAME HERE!

post more soon pleasE!

Thank you guys for reading! Here's some more!

*Jinny gets in her car and is just driving aimlessly, not sure of where to go or what to do. She passes the Anchorside a couple of times, but keeps her promise to herself to quit, or at least cut down, she thinks about going to see Teddy, but she remembers he has a case that day in court, and she wouldn't want to distract him. Her brothers are probably working, her dad's probably sleeping, she thinks to herself 'Whose left?' An image of her mother comes to her mind. She pulls over and thinks about her mother. She was so beautiful, big, green, loving eyes, a warm, gentle, caring face, long, thick, black hair, she was very petite, sometimes she almost seemed too fragile for life and its problems. Jinny had vowed never to be like that, she'd rather be really tough and alive than really gentle and suicudal. Jinny put her hand to her eyes and rubbed them to prevent herself from crying. Her mouth tightened, she then put her hands back to the wheel and decided to do something she hadn't done, which she should have done years ago. She drove to the cemetery to visit her mother's grave.*

*She arrived at the stone, and just looked at it for a long time, all the good memories of her mother came back, the way that she would stay up till three in the morning just to see an old Cary Grant movie, as he was her favorite actor. The way she smelled, like fresh roses, her little pearl earrings, which she always wore. The way she laughed, her smile, with that one bottom tooth that leaned into her tongue just a little bit. The way that she would always try to make Jinny act like a lady, trying to put her in a dress, curl her hair, put some make-up on her. Jinny had acted like she hated it, of course, but she really loved the attention. The way her father and mother used to tease each other, playfully calling the other names, all in good fun, of course. It had always amazed her how her mother, who was so tiny, so sweet, so peaceful, had tamed a wild man like her father. Her family was so different then. Her father was so much livelier, happy, and her parents were so in love. Casey was and still is very sweet, but there's something about him now that is sort of a sad sweetness, a sweetness that comes out of suffering and enduring something painful. John had always been wild, but then his wildness had been channeled into having fun, now it stemmed from his anger. Her mom was so fun, loving, and so sweet, everyone loved Carrie Exstead. Why did she commit suicide? What had happened? What went wrong? Sure, dad got drunk once in a while, John did get a little out of control sometimes, Jinny wasn't her idea of the perfect "girl", and Casey didn't get the best of grades, but why did she see no way out of whatever problem she had? She was so fragile, so delicate, Jinny thought to herself. Everything just must have been too much for her. By now, all Jinny could see was a blur of the gray stone and the green grass, as she had teared up. She silently wiped the tears from her face, and said, "I love you, Mom."*

awesome!!!!!!! please post more soon~

Judgin by the title of this story and whats goin down, I have a feeling of whats gonna happen... PLEASE POST MORE SOON!!!!!

Okay, here's a little more. Don't worry, I'm getting to the good part.

*Jinny drives home, the whole time just reminiscing about her mother, she arrives at her apartment, kind of worn out, so she lies on her bed, sets her alarm clock for 7:00 p.m. cause she knows if she doesn't she'll wake up too late, and goes to sleep*

*at 7:00, her alarm clock goes off, Jinny's eyes open a little bit, and she hears knocking at her door, she gets up and answers it, it's C.D., Angela, Magda, and Jeff*
Jinny: Hi, guys, you here to get set up?
C.D.: Yup.
Jinny: Come on in. I just have to get dressed real quick and then you guys can take your positions.
Angela: Okay.
Jinny: While I'm getting dressed tell me exactly what you guys plan to do. *Jinny goes into her room, closes the door, and starts to get ready*
C.D.: Well, you'll bring him to your apartment, obviously, and whenever you yell 'Ready' we'll come out. Angela and Magda are going to have their guns up, while Jeff and I tackle him and try to restrain him on the bed.
Jinny: *from inside her room* What should I do when you guys come out? Do you want me to help restrain him since I'll be right by him?
Jeff: I'd suggest you first get out of his way so he doesn't try to hurt you, cause he'll probably be a little angry his date is actually a policewoman.
Jinny: Good point. *comes out of her room, all dressed up and ready* Well? *turns around once*
Magda: Ooooooo. Nice!
Angela: Don't we look stunning?
Jeff: *has a stunned look on his face, he's never seen Jinny all dressed up before* Wow, look at those legs!
Jinny: *playfully hits him* Watch it, this chick's taken. *he laughs and smiles at her, still in shock*
C.D.: Go get 'em, Jinny.
Jinny: Okie, dokie. *looks at her watch* Well, time to go. Bye, guys, I'll try to get him here between ten and eleven, but I can't guarantee anything.
Everyone: Bye, Jin.
C.D.: *once Jinny's left* I hope she'll be okay.
Magda: Oh, I don't worry about her.
Jeff: Well, ready to get in place?
Angela: I'm ready. *looks over at C.D.* Are you ready, C.D.?
C.D.: I'm always ready.
Magda: Well, let's do it. *they each get in their positions, Jeff in Jinny's closet, the women in her bathroom*

Please respond, I really want your opinions. Thanks 4 reading!

OMG this is so awesome......PLEASE keep it goin!

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(After the fake motorcycle accident)
Jo:My head hurtz a lil
Nat: A Concusion!!!!!!
Jo's dad:The doctor examined her head and found nothing!
Blair:Not even a lil bit of straw!

This is sooooo good http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/smile.gif please continue soon.

such an awesome story! How did you come up with the great story-line? This is great, keep going. http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

Here's a tad more, thanks for responding!

*Jinny arrives at the restaurant, secretly shows her badge to the guy at the register, he nods and shows her to where the guy is sitting. As she approaches the table she gets a good look at him. He's quite a big man, very overweight, with a big belly, he's dressed very nice though, at first this throws her, she was expecting a sleazy jeans and T-shirt type, but then she remembers how rich he is from selling drugs. He has dark brown hair and is balding very early and is in his thirties. He has dark brown eyes and a dark brown mustache to match, along with a huge bulbous nose. As she gets nearer, he looks up and down her body and smiles sexily at her and reveals his yellow, tar-stained teeth. Smoker, she thinks to herself, well that's one habit I avoided*
Ralph: Well, Mike knows exactly what I like, tall, green-eyed brunettes, but I thought he said you were blonde?
Jinny: *caught off-guard, but doesn't let him see it, she is sooooooo smooth* Well, contrary to popular belief, I've found that brunettes have more fun. *every word she says is dripping with sensuality, sits down, she turns her head this way and that* You like?
Ralph: Ooooooh, yes. *he smiles at her and his nostrils flare revealing a whole bunch of black nose hair* You got a name?
Jinny: Jackie McShafer.
Ralph: Oh, Jackie, I like it, but like Shakespeare said, "What's in a name?"
Jinny: Oh, a literary man. Then you've probably read the Scarlet Letter.
Ralph: Actually, I have.
Jinny: I loved the deep passion between Hester Prynne and her lover, the preacher. Their lust for each other made the book completely come alive. Even though it was very subdued, it was still very clear how much they wanted to be all over each other and touch each other's bodies, *she pauses, trying to be as explicit as possible to give the guy the message* if you know what I mean. *Ralph just sits there, practically drooling, she can tell this is going to be easy, men are such suckers* So...tell me what's good, I've never eaten here before. *she knows he'll be really flattered at being asked for advice, it'll make him feel in control and manly if she lets him make all the decisions*
Ralph: Ohhh...uh... *recovering from Jinny's little spiel* The mesquite salmon is good, that and the prime rib.
Jinny: You know what, why don't I let you surprise me, you *puts her finger on his knuckles and goes over them, rubbing them, back and forth, left to right* can order for me.
Ralph: *is totally buying this* Why, I'd be glad to! *the whole time he's giving her these sexy looks, she returns them even though she's totally disgusted, she withdraws her hand and bends down and pretends to straighten her hose, while he leans over to look at her cleavage, she looks up and sees that he's practically standing over the table to look down her dress, lol, he sits back down in his chair kind of embarrassed, he knows everyone was looking at him*
*the waiter takes their order, Ralph orders the prime rib for both of them, she just keeps working on him with her eyes, and he is very receptive, their food arrives and they begin eating*

Keep responding, and thank you for your nice replies!

OMG!!!!!! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!! I need more! Hi I'm Brittney and I'm a fan-ficahloic!!!!!! I need more!!!!!

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(After the fake motorcycle accident)
Jo:My head hurtz a lil
Nat: A Concusion!!!!!!
Jo's dad:The doctor examined her head and found nothing!
Blair:Not even a lil bit of straw!

THIS IS TOTALLY ATD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE ADD MORE SOON!!! http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/smile.gif

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!~!Lisa!~! *not Vidal or Whelchel, just 'Lisa'*

Check out my Division Website!
http://www.geocities.com/inspector_exstead2001

"My dad said, 'If you want a pet, then you'll have to feed it', but instead I grabbed a story-book, I cannot wait to read it"- I have one word for you -READ- Its one of the best things to do to reach your goals.

Thanks guys! Here's more!

Jinny: So...*as she's chewing* What do you do?
Ralph: Oh, didn't Mike tell you? I'm a janitor.
Jinny: *almost spits out her food, laughing* A....janitor?
Ralph: Uh, huh. *he chews with his mouth open, showing the slosh of food in his mouth with every chomp*
Jinny: Oh, so that's where you get your muscles. *She reaches over and runs her hand along his arm. Yup, flatter him, Jin, works ever time, she thinks*
Ralph: *looks at his saggy arms which, of course, have no muscle at all* Well, thanks for noticing. *smiles at her compliment*
Jinny: *she moves her finger around the rim of her glass (she ordered lemonade, she didn't want to get drunk and screw everything up) then looks at her watch, it's 9:30, good, Jin, you're doing good, you'll have him in your apartment and arrested in no time. She remembers about the gun, she pretends to be looking him over, but she's really looking for where he's got his gun *
Ralph: So, what do you do?
Jinny: *hadn't thought about that so she says the first thing that comes to her mind* Ummmm...I.....uh...make watches. *looks down again at her watch* Uhh...yeah, that's what I do, I make watches.
Ralph: Make watches, huh? Sounds interesting. *a piece of his prime rib is hanging out the side of his mouth*
Jinny: *looking straight at the hanging piece of meat* Oh, it's very interesting, *looks back up at his face* It's been in my family ever since my great grandfather.
Ralph: Wow, that long, huh? So tell me, how do you make a watch?
Jinny: *Totally blank look on her face* Ummm....you know what, *Jinny puts her right index finger to his lips* enough talking, why don't we go someplace private, where we can get to know each other better. *gives him that same look she had at the end of the pilot episode, know what I'm talking about?* Somewhere...oh...say...my apartment?
Ralph: That's one of the best ideas I've heard all night. I thought you'd never ask.
Jinny: *leans back in her chair* Good. *satisfied that she's reeled him in*
Ralph: I love a woman who knows what she wants and goes after it. Waiter? Check please. *he smiles again at her while they're waiting for the waiter, revealing his nose hairs, once again. Jinny looks away from him as if she's looking for the waiter and makes the most disgusted face, the waiter coming towards them, sees it, and smiles at her, giggling to himself, cause he knows. Ralph pays the waiter, and they get up from the table. When he gets up she looks for a bulge that would be his gun. She sees a slight bulge in his left pocket, but is not sure whether that's the gun or not, it could just be a big wallet. He puts his hand on her back as they're walking out, gradually his hand moves south, if you know what I mean. Jinny wants to haul off and slap him, of course, but she just grins at him, as if she's enjoying it*

Keep those opinions coming, thanks!

Ahhh! Make my birthday even better and post more soon! It can be your present to me! Please??? It's all I want! I promise! I won't ask for another thing, not even at Christmas! Plz?

ok so my bday not for like 21 days, but hey early presents are always nice, so add more soon!

Happy Birthday Teddys_Angel_Jinny! And even though it's a little early, happy birthday to you too hockeychiC518! Here's more!

*They get to the front door of her apartment. He's got his hands moving all over her, kissing the back of her neck, she acts like she's loving it, but once her face turns away from him, towards the door, she makes another grossed out face, she can smell his tobacco breath on her neck. She opens her door gradually just to make sure no one is where they shouldn't be*
Ralph: *He sees her kinda stalling at the door* Come on, baby, hurry up, open the door. *all this is said in between kisses on her neck*
Jinny: Just be patient, my friend, you'll get what's coming to you.

*inside Jinny's bathroom, the women heard her open the door and talking with him, so they stood straight up, as they'd been resting and slouched against her sink*
C.D.: *whispering* That must be them.
Magda: Okay guys, ready?
Angela: Ready.
C.D.: *calls Jeff who is in Jinny's closet with her walky-talky thing, still keeping her voice very low* Jeff, they're here, we're ready anytime she is.
Jeff: *through the walky-talky* I'm ready, C.D.
C.D.: Good, bye. *turns it off and puts it in her holster*

*They make their way into her apartment, she breaks away from him and puts her finger up, making that gesture that means 'Come here.' He follows her into her bedroom, then she jumps on top of him, kissing him very passionately. She starts feeling around his hips while she's kissing him for a gun to see if it's in his pockets, she feels something in his left pocket, and slowly puts her hand in to get whatever's in there out. As she's laying on him, the right part of his chest feels really hard and is raised a little bit, she realizes that must be the gun. She takes her hand out of the pocket and starts to feel around his chest*
Ralph: Oh, yes, baby, yes... *he can feel her feeling around his chest, particularly where his gun is, then realizes she must be going for it, he grabs her hand, stopping her* Now, didn't your mother ever teach you not to play with guns?
Jinny: *the mother reference stopped her for a moment, then she regained her demeanor* I was just trying to get your jacket off. *trying to change the subject so he doesn't suspect anything* Why don't you take your clothes off for me. I think it's sooooo sexy for a man to undress in front of a woman.
Ralph: Well, you know what I think is even sexier?
Jinny: *disappointed that didn't work* What?
Ralph: A woman being undressed by a man. *starts to reach in back of her dress to unzip the zipper*

Hope you guys are liking it, please reply!




[This message has been edited by sue z q (edited 07-03-2001).]

Originally posted by Nancy Exstead:
such an awesome story! How did you come up with the great story-line? This is great, keep going. http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

Sorry, I'm a little late in responding to this. I already had the first scene in mind, where the Cap would present some case and everyone would look at Jinny. I figured it'd have to be a case dealing with men. LOL! http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/biggrin.gif I then figured out the case from there. Glad you're enjoying it! More tomorrow!



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"Somebody's gonna pay!" -Blair
"Blow it out your gucci bag!" -Jo
~God Bless~

this keeps on getting better and better!!!!!!(and it was awesome to begin with!!!!) but thanks for the early present, only 20 more days http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/smile.gif

I just started reading this and I loooooooooove it!!!!!!! MORE!!!

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"If you touch my ass one more time, I'll kick yours." - Jinny Exstead

"Nice girls don't throw trees!" - Jo Polniaczek

Hello, my name is Sourbabie and I'm an ERoholic and a The Divsionoholic.

Do you know that real eyes realize real lies?

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Here's a little more!

*back in Jinny' bathroom*
C.D.: *still whispering* What's taking so long? Come on, Jinny, get his gun away from him so we can arrest him and go home!
Angela: Maybe something's gone wrong.
Magda: Well, whatever's happening I'm sure Jinny's got it under control. *looks towards the door with a worried look on her face* I hope.

*back to Jinny's bed*
Jinny: *she can't think of anything to do and she doesn't want to look very obvious about the whole gun thing* Well, how about tonight you do something different? Why don't you let me *points a finger at herself* undress you. *points a finger at him, then has two of her fingers walk up his chest then go over his lips*
Ralph: *looks at her like he's thinking about it*

*back in her bathroom*
*by now, all three women have their ears pressed against the door to hear what's going on and their guns out ready anytime*
Angela: Sounds like she's getting somewhere, but I can't here his response, did you guys here him say any-
C.D.: Shhhh.
Angela: *after a little bit* I haven't heard him say any-
C.D.: *says in a yelled whisper* Shut up!
Magda: Be quiet, both of you! *puts her ear back to the door*

*back to Jinny's bed*
Ralph: Well.....okay.
Jinny: *breathes a huge sigh of relief, not that she was scared or anything, lol, she starts to untie his tie, not wanting to do the jacket first and be really obvious about the gun. She then starts to take off his jacket*
Ralph: Can't you hurry up?! *she starts to take off his jacket faster and harder, she gets the jacket off and throws it to the farthest part of her room, she's just about to yell ready* Oh, forget it! *he grabs her shoulders and throws her underneath him, making a loud thud, and before she can scream, he puts one of his hands over her mouth, his other hand is holding her two hands in them. She can't move her legs cause he's on top of her. She tries to make a lot of noise by moving around, but it's useless. He gets out from his left pocket two thick pieces of material and ties the first around her head covering her mouth and ties the other around her hands. That's what was in his left pocket. She can't move because he's so big on top of her, he's practically stifling her*

More later! Keep those responses coming!

You've got to post more soon! I'm dyin here! By b-day isn't until April, but you could give me a really, really, really, really, really, early b-day present by posting more soon!

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Okie dokie artichokie?!

OMG.....MORE.......AWESOME!

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(After the fake motorcycle accident)
Jo:My head hurtz a lil
Nat: A Concusion!!!!!!
Jo's dad:The doctor examined her head and found nothing!
Blair:Not even a lil bit of straw!

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"If you touch my ass one more time, I'll kick yours." - Jinny Exstead

"Nice girls don't throw trees!" - Jo Polniaczek

Hello, my name is Sourbabie and I'm an ERoholic and a The Divsionoholic.

Do you know that real eyes realize real lies?

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this is great!1 please finsih it!!!!! awwwwww, i can't wait fo rmore!!!!!!!

Okay, here's the last part, this'll be my present to all you guys with birhdays (oh, wait, I guess that'd be all of you! lol!). Oh, well, happy birthday to everyone! It's kinda long, but I couldn't think of a good way to break it up anywhere, so without further adieu, the conclusion of "Everyone's Looking"!

*in her bathroom*
C.D.: Did you hear that? *referring to the thud*
Magda: Yeah, I don't like what I'm hearing out there. I say we just come in on him. Angela and I will have our guns pointed right at him, he'd be an idiot to try and shoot.
Angela: Yeah, I'm with Magda.
C.D.: *gives Angela a look like she's just some spineless person agreeing with everyone else's ideas because she doesn't have any* Okay, me, too. *she takes out her walky-talky* Hey, Jeff, did you here that thud?
Jeff: *from the walky-talky* I sure did C.D., I think we'd better just burst in on him now. I've got a really bad feeling about what's going on in there.
C.D.: You took the words right out of mouth. Okay, on three. *looks over at Magda and Angela, they nod, meaning they're ready* One......two.....THREE!
*Magda, C.D., and Angela burst threw the door, while Jeff comes running out of the closet*
Angela: SFPD! *holds her gun up, aimed right at him*
Magda: Put your hands behind your head! NOW! *aims her gun also*
*Jeff and C.D. tackle him, pulling Ralph off from on-top of Jinny, Jinny is in her slip (he'd ripped off her dress), with her hair all messed up and the gag still around her head and tying up her hands, Jeff handcuffs Ralph and starts to lead him out*
Ralph: Hey! What is this?! *looking over at Jinny* How'd you call the cops?!
Jinny: *Magda unties Jinny's hands, Jinny takes the gag out of her mouth* I am the cops. *takes her badge out of the bra part of her slip* Inspector Jinny Exstead, brother, you messed with the wrong girl.
*Ralph has a dazed and totally confused look on his face, Jeff starts reading him his rights on the way out*
Magda: *goes over and sits on Jinny's bed* You okay? He didn't do anything did-
Jinny: *sitting up on her bed, next to Magda* No, but one more second there and...
Angela: *smiles at Jinny* Well, we're just glad you're okay.
Jinny: Thanks guys.
C.D.: Anytime, Jin. *she goes over and picks up Ralph's jacket with the gun in it*
Jinny: You know something tells me this wasn't the first time he's raped or attempted to rape a woman. He came prepared and everything.
Magda: We'll check it out. Maybe we can show his picture to some of our unsolved rape cases.
Jinny: Yeah, give the jerk as many charges as possible. *she just glares out her door, still shaken from the whole thing*

*Teddy walks in her room just then, he came in while Ralph was on his way out*
Teddy: *sees Jinny in her slip, and the red marks where the gags had been and on her shoulders where he'd grabbed her so roughly* Oh, my gosh, Jinny, are you okay? *he sits on the other side of Jinny and puts his arm around her*
Jinny: *looks down at the ground* Yeah......uh.....I'm fine.
C.D.: *looks around to the other Inspectors, signaling for them to leave since Jinny and Teddy probably want to be alone* Well, I guess we'd better get going now. Bye, Jin, good work tonight. Don't worry about anything, we'll write it up. You don't have to do any paper work. *she lets Jinny off the hook because being a rape victim herself she knows she'll want to forget what happened as soon as possible*
Angela: Yeah, bye, see you tomorrow. *she picks up Jinny's torn dress off the floor and lays it nicely on a chair in Jinny's bedroom*
Magda: Yeah, we'll see you tomorrow, Jin. *leans into her* If you want to talk or anything, just call.
Jinny: Yeah, I know, thanks, Mag. *to the other Inspectors* Bye, guys, thanks again.

*they leave, Jinny and Teddy are just sitting there, he's still got his arm around her*
Teddy: Did everything go well? You know, according to plan? *looks worriedly at her*
Jinny: *after a long pause* Well, let's just say we got the guy.
Teddy: *he gets up and puts the radio on* Here, maybe some good, calm music will make you feel be-
Jinny: *before he can finish what he's saying, she gets up and hugs him, pressing herself very close to him, burying her head in his chest, she wants to feel that security she always feels when she's with him*
Teddy: *he just stops what he's doing and wraps his arms around her to try and comfort her as best he can, he can still feel the blood pumping very fast through her, they remain like that for quite a while*
Jinny: *she pulls away from him* Thanks for being here, Teddy, I really appreciate it.
Teddy: Anytime. *over her radio comes the song "I Will Always Love You" sung by Whitney Houston, they start to rock back and forth to the music* I wonder how people get to be like that, so heartless and inhumane.
Jinny: I guess everyone's just looking for something: acceptance, money, love, *pauses* answers.
Teddy: I don't have to look, you're right here. *smiles at her*
Jinny: *she puts her hand to his cheek, he puts his hand over hers and brings her hand in front of his mouth, he kisses her palm*
Teddy: *trying to make her feel better* Man, you sure have a tough job. I don't know how you do it.
Jinny: All in a day's work, my friend, all in a day's work....
*she lays her head on his chest and closes her eyes, they screen fades with them dancing to the music*

THE END

I really hope you guys liked it! I'm writing another one now, it'll be more about the Exstead family and Jinny's brother John's marriage. Once I get a good chunk of it written I'll post it. Thanks so much for reading! http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/smile.gif Please tell me what you thought about it!

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"Somebody's gonna pay!" -Blair
"Blow it out your gucci bag!" -Jo
~God Bless~




[This message has been edited by sue z q (edited 07-03-2001).]

That was awesome! I can't wait for your next one!

that was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and i can not wait to read your next one http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/smile.gif

Oh, i loved it!! You eneded it soo sweet!! Aww <tear> lol, i can't wait for your next one!!

That was a great fan-fic!!

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Check out my Division Website!
http://www.geocities.com/inspector_exstead2001

"My dad said, 'If you want a pet, then you'll have to feed it', but instead I grabbed a story-book, I cannot wait to read it"- I have one word for you -READ- Its one of the best things to do to reach your goals.

Glad you guys liked it. Here's a quick preview 4 my next one, should be up soon:

"Just Ask" (kinda like Don't Ask, only this one's about John) -John's marriage is failing, and he asks Jinny for help. Can she help save her brother's troubled marriage? Meanwhile Jinny and Magda have a puzzling case about who has been robbing many people in a certain apartment building? Who did it and why?

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Jo: Partners? You mean 50-50? Uh, 50-50-50-50-50?
Blair: Good, Jo, we'll let you do the books!
If ignorance is bliss, why aren't there more happy people?
Of all the things I've lost, I miss my mind the most.
~God Bless~

Great Fanfic!!!!!!! (Oh dear, more of the exclamation marks...) Great Fanfic! Oh yeah, I said that all ready... Well, it deserves extra credit! I haven't replied, cuz I've been at my aunt's house all weekend. And I can't wait for your next story, either, cuz it sounds soooooo kewl! Err... gotta go, bye y'all! T2YL!

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<3 ya! :)

Awesome fan fic! And ur next one sounds awesome!

Sweet dude!!!! :-D

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"If you touch my ass one more time, I'll kick yours." - Jinny Exstead

"Nice girls don't throw trees!" - Jo Polniaczek

Hello, my name is Sourbabie and I'm an ERoholic and a The Divsionoholic.

Do you know that real eyes realize real lies?

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