NancyJoJinny
03-25-2001, 08:48 PM
I need help with the title here so if you have any ideas...
(In a dark abandoned apartment building in downtown SF)
M:We shoulde called for backup.
J:Hey! Its not my fault my batterie is dead, and wheres yours mag? Huh?
M:Oh alright were even, now shut up he'll hear you!
Jinny didnt say anything for about 5 minutes, but she was on a sugar high from 5 doughnuts and she couldnt keep quite.
J:Magda?
M:yeah?
J:I dont know i just had to break the silence.
The 2 neared a small apartment door.
M:think hes in there?
J:Yeah. she said as she tryed to open the locked door.
M http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/biggrin.gifamn. Are we gonna leave now i dont think hes here and its 4 am. im exausted.
J:Whats more important your beauty sleep or catching this guy before he starts another bar fight.
M:Hell be in the bar tommorow get him then.
J:Ill be in the bar tommorow i aint takin no chances. Are you that irresponsible.
Magda hadnt slept in 2 days and was kinda out of it and irratable.
M:Im being irrisponsible! What about you?
J: And what is that supposed to mean?
Magda said nothing but mumbled slut under her breath.
J:Thank you magda, i needed that right now! What the hell is wrong with you anyway!
M: I havent slept in days and i would rather go home than catch this guy but ill saty cause its my job.
Jinny didnt answer, but backed up and kicked the door in.
M:I wish you didnt know how to do that.
J:Would you shut up and do your job! Im sorry but your gettin on my nerves.
M:Jin you knew i wasnt gonna leave. I was just sayin'... c'mon
They walked into the pitch black room.
J:You hear that?
M:Hear wha- Seh was cut of by a silent sneeze. Was that you Jinny?
J:No.
The door closed behind them. Jinny ran up to it and tried to pull it open, she could barely see her way around.
J:Noo! Ugh, were trapped.
At that moment a lantern flashed on but they were in the room all alone. There was one door on the left wall. Jinny walked catiosly towards it.
M:Jinny get your gun.
She didnt answer but whipped the door opened. A man about 7 feet tall stood infront of her, he pulled her into the closet and slammed the door. There was alot of movement from inside the closet.
M:Oh my god! Jinny!. She ran over and tried to opne the door but it wouldnt budge. She backed away beginning to cry Dont you hurt her! If you do ill... At that moment the door flew open and the man fell out next to magda. Jinny stood pressed up against the closet wall.
M:He dead?
J:No, get his walet. SHe stepped out of the closet and read his drivers license. Sean Goldberg. They both walked closer to the light to read the rest.
Niether of them were faceing the man, he opened his eyes and looked at the 2 short women with his wallet. Jinny pulled out 3 100 dollar bills and went to put them in her pocket.
M:Jinny!
J:Collecting evedence
M:Put it back.
Jinny made a face like a little kid and put it back. The Man grabbed magda spun her aroung and punched her. Magda fell to the groung.
J: hey! Her and the man both pulled thier guns at the same time
Man http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/biggrin.gifont even think about it! ill shot back i will!!!
J:Put down the gun. This isnt gonna solve anything
Man:O yeah? He pulled the trigger and the bullet missed her.
The next thing jinny knew bulltes were flying everywhere, with the final shot from jinnys gun she hit the man in th shoulder. He ran from the room. Magda rolled over.
M:All that for nothing, we didnt get him, but hell hafta go to a hospital so we can track him down.
J: Hes not the only one, she said breathing heavily, she put her hand on her stomack and fell on magda.
M:Jinny! Jinny! Can you hear me?.
J:Hos-pi pital, n-now
M:We dont have a phone, Jinny started to close her eyes.
M:No no no! c'mon jin you gotta stay up c'mon honey, thats it, jinny was now barely concions,
J:Mag, it hurts, she said crying.
M:Iknow Iknow, we gotta get you out of here.
Jinny tryed to stand but scraned at the pain.
J: Oh god, i really need a doctor.
She was now leaning heavily on magda. They were on the second floor, magda wasnt sure if jinny would make it to the payphone outside. On the way out jinny started to fall 3 times but magda caught her, when they got to the payphone jinny slid to the ground. They were both covered on blood.
J:I lost a-aalot of blood, im really dizzy, jinny said as she became unconcios.
When magda was done explaining what had happened to the 911 operator. she sat next to jinny, she grabbed one of jinnys blood covered hands.
M:Jinny please dont die, pllease, your my best friend dont go. Ugh im gonna kill the bastard that did this to you!
the ambulance pulled up and hooked jinny up to the heart monitor, she had a very weak pulse.
M:Can i ride in the ambulace? she begged
Dr1:Im sorry family members only. he said as he closed the door it was 5 now, Kate would be awake.
M:Captain?
K:Yeah? Somethins wrong, what is it?!?
M:Jinnys been shot, i need a ride
K:What uh yeah, a ride where are you!
M:The corner of, she looked at the street sighns. Sprinfield AVe. and pensylvania street.
K:ill be right there oh god i hope shes ok.
M http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/redface.gifh me too
g2g bye. more later
(In a dark abandoned apartment building in downtown SF)
M:We shoulde called for backup.
J:Hey! Its not my fault my batterie is dead, and wheres yours mag? Huh?
M:Oh alright were even, now shut up he'll hear you!
Jinny didnt say anything for about 5 minutes, but she was on a sugar high from 5 doughnuts and she couldnt keep quite.
J:Magda?
M:yeah?
J:I dont know i just had to break the silence.
The 2 neared a small apartment door.
M:think hes in there?
J:Yeah. she said as she tryed to open the locked door.
M http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/biggrin.gifamn. Are we gonna leave now i dont think hes here and its 4 am. im exausted.
J:Whats more important your beauty sleep or catching this guy before he starts another bar fight.
M:Hell be in the bar tommorow get him then.
J:Ill be in the bar tommorow i aint takin no chances. Are you that irresponsible.
Magda hadnt slept in 2 days and was kinda out of it and irratable.
M:Im being irrisponsible! What about you?
J: And what is that supposed to mean?
Magda said nothing but mumbled slut under her breath.
J:Thank you magda, i needed that right now! What the hell is wrong with you anyway!
M: I havent slept in days and i would rather go home than catch this guy but ill saty cause its my job.
Jinny didnt answer, but backed up and kicked the door in.
M:I wish you didnt know how to do that.
J:Would you shut up and do your job! Im sorry but your gettin on my nerves.
M:Jin you knew i wasnt gonna leave. I was just sayin'... c'mon
They walked into the pitch black room.
J:You hear that?
M:Hear wha- Seh was cut of by a silent sneeze. Was that you Jinny?
J:No.
The door closed behind them. Jinny ran up to it and tried to pull it open, she could barely see her way around.
J:Noo! Ugh, were trapped.
At that moment a lantern flashed on but they were in the room all alone. There was one door on the left wall. Jinny walked catiosly towards it.
M:Jinny get your gun.
She didnt answer but whipped the door opened. A man about 7 feet tall stood infront of her, he pulled her into the closet and slammed the door. There was alot of movement from inside the closet.
M:Oh my god! Jinny!. She ran over and tried to opne the door but it wouldnt budge. She backed away beginning to cry Dont you hurt her! If you do ill... At that moment the door flew open and the man fell out next to magda. Jinny stood pressed up against the closet wall.
M:He dead?
J:No, get his walet. SHe stepped out of the closet and read his drivers license. Sean Goldberg. They both walked closer to the light to read the rest.
Niether of them were faceing the man, he opened his eyes and looked at the 2 short women with his wallet. Jinny pulled out 3 100 dollar bills and went to put them in her pocket.
M:Jinny!
J:Collecting evedence
M:Put it back.
Jinny made a face like a little kid and put it back. The Man grabbed magda spun her aroung and punched her. Magda fell to the groung.
J: hey! Her and the man both pulled thier guns at the same time
Man http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/biggrin.gifont even think about it! ill shot back i will!!!
J:Put down the gun. This isnt gonna solve anything
Man:O yeah? He pulled the trigger and the bullet missed her.
The next thing jinny knew bulltes were flying everywhere, with the final shot from jinnys gun she hit the man in th shoulder. He ran from the room. Magda rolled over.
M:All that for nothing, we didnt get him, but hell hafta go to a hospital so we can track him down.
J: Hes not the only one, she said breathing heavily, she put her hand on her stomack and fell on magda.
M:Jinny! Jinny! Can you hear me?.
J:Hos-pi pital, n-now
M:We dont have a phone, Jinny started to close her eyes.
M:No no no! c'mon jin you gotta stay up c'mon honey, thats it, jinny was now barely concions,
J:Mag, it hurts, she said crying.
M:Iknow Iknow, we gotta get you out of here.
Jinny tryed to stand but scraned at the pain.
J: Oh god, i really need a doctor.
She was now leaning heavily on magda. They were on the second floor, magda wasnt sure if jinny would make it to the payphone outside. On the way out jinny started to fall 3 times but magda caught her, when they got to the payphone jinny slid to the ground. They were both covered on blood.
J:I lost a-aalot of blood, im really dizzy, jinny said as she became unconcios.
When magda was done explaining what had happened to the 911 operator. she sat next to jinny, she grabbed one of jinnys blood covered hands.
M:Jinny please dont die, pllease, your my best friend dont go. Ugh im gonna kill the bastard that did this to you!
the ambulance pulled up and hooked jinny up to the heart monitor, she had a very weak pulse.
M:Can i ride in the ambulace? she begged
Dr1:Im sorry family members only. he said as he closed the door it was 5 now, Kate would be awake.
M:Captain?
K:Yeah? Somethins wrong, what is it?!?
M:Jinnys been shot, i need a ride
K:What uh yeah, a ride where are you!
M:The corner of, she looked at the street sighns. Sprinfield AVe. and pensylvania street.
K:ill be right there oh god i hope shes ok.
M http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/redface.gifh me too
g2g bye. more later