I think that the idea was pretty good, but your story was pretty messy. Some if the things that you mentioned were kind of funny, but other then that there was much enjoyment that I found in it. If you do decide to continue with it, you should maybe change a few things about it. I think that once people read this, they may not think of Jo as the easy riding Eastland girl that they thought she was. Don't go too far with Jo's personal life.
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Andrew Carden
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