This is my new fan-fic. Since my last one 'House on Haunted Hill' didn't go well, HOPEFULLY this one will be better. Here's someback ground on it!

It's about one of the charactors that I have a crush on: MAGDA! (even though she's too old for me! lol!)) Anyways, she has to find her family. The only problem is... she doesn't know where they're at!
CHAPTER 1

She ran. Ran as fast as she could. She hid behind a trash can, thinking about just what she was running from. Reality? Darkness? Or.... both. The shadow figure walked closer to her.
Her heart beat sped up.
The closer he came, the closer her heart beat came.
Then he found her!

"WAKE UP, AMERICA!" Said a voice, waking Magda up. It was the voice on the radio that was on her night stand. She slammed it off, got up, and went to her son, Benjamin's room.
'Wake up, Ben!" Magda said, turning on his light. She looked at his bed, which was empty, and messy.
"Ben! Benny! Damn it!"
She ran back to her room to wake up her husband, but he was gone, too. Magda looked at her watch. 4:00 a.m.
'They couldn't have got up already!' Mag. thought.
She ran to the living room, picked up the phone from it's cradel, and dialed a number.
"Hello?" Asked a lazy, but reconizing voice.
"Hey, Jin. It's Magda."
"Magda?! Do you know what damn time it is?!"
"Yes. And I'm so sorry to wake you up like this, but I can't find Dan. or Benjamen."
"They're probally asleep like normal people, Mag. See you in a few hours! Good night!"
After that, all Magda heard was the 'bep, bep, bep' of the phone. She put it back into it's cradel, and went to get dressed.

MORNING

Jinny walked into The Division, very cheerful, considering Magda woke her up at 4:OO that morning.
"Hey, Jin." Angela said, looking up from a case folder, she and her partner, C.D were reading.
"Hey, guys. Have you seen Magda?"
Right on que, Magda walked in, and ran over to Jinny. She grabbed Jinny's arm, and they went into Captain Kate's office, whom wasn't at work yet.
"Have you found them yet?" Asked Jinny.
"No. I cheaked every place in town. Nobody has them!"
"Well, I'm sorry, Mag. I wish I could help."
"Actally, that's where you come in."

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The sound of the phone ringing woke Magda up. She stumbled out of bed, and walked into the living room. She picked up the phone.
"Hello?"
"Do you want to see your family again?" The voice on the other end of the line asked.
"What?"
"If you EVER want to see your husband and son again bring me 10,000 $."
"Who the hell do you think you are?" Magda asked, getting scared.
"Just bring it. I'm on Hollywood street." Then the voice hung up.
All Magda heard was the bep bep bep of the phone. She hung ithe phone up, but picked it up again. Her fingers shaking from fright, Magda dialed a number.
"Hey, Jin." Said Magda her voice shaking, as well. "It's time to put our plan into action!"

FEW HOURS LATER

Magda was in Jinny's living room, putting on a black turtle neck, and black pants.
Jinny was doing the same in her room. She walked into the living room, holding two guns. She tossed one to Magda, and asked:
"You ready?"
"Ready as ever!" Replied Magda, putting bullets in her gun. "Let's go."
And the two women walked out into the night, on there way to Hollywood Street, not knowing what lies ahead of them.

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So far it is great!! You better post more!!!

Sorry I haven't posted to this fan-fic. in forever and a day (lol) Anyways, here's the next part.

Jinny and Magda drove to Hollywood Street and got out of Jinny's car.
"Where are we suppost to meet this guy?" Jinny asked, looking around the darkend street. Nobody was insight.
"I don't know." Rplied Magda. "All he said was meet me at Hollywood Street." All of a sudden they heard a gun shot.
Magda and Jinny looked at each other, and ran to where they heard it.
A man was on the ground, bleeding to death.
"Oh, my God!" Said Magda. She and Jinny ran over to him.
"Sir." Jinny said. "Hi. We're cops. Don't worry. We're going to get you out of here." She took out her cell phone, that was in her black pants pocket, and turned it on. She dialed a number, and put it to her ear. But Jinny turned the phone off, looked at Magda and said: "I can't get no signal out here. Maybe we should put him in the car and drive him to a hospital."
"But what about the man that we're suppost to meet here?" Asked Magda. "He has my husband, not to mention my CHILD!"
"OK. You stay here. After I drop this man off at the hospital, I'll come back."

LATER

Magda paced back and forth under a street light. The only light she had. She was about to give up hope of the man ever coming, until she saw another man walking towards her. But, he walked passed her. Magda cursed under her breath and looked at her watch. 10:15.
"Where the hell are you?" Asked Magda out loud. Then a car pulled up. A man got out. He walked to Magda and said:
"You Magda? the woman I spoke to on the phone?"
"Yes." Magda replied, scared. "Is my family alright?"
"Yeah. They're in the car. But 1st give me my money."
"I don't have it. I was hoping to just.... talk to you."
"Let's talk money."
"I told you I don't have it!"
"Look, lady." The man said, getting pissed. "If you don't give me the money right now, I'm going to shoot you!" He pulled a gun out of his pocket and held it at Magda.
Magda would have been more than happy to give him the money, but the only problem was it was in the car with Jinny along with her own gun.

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Originally posted by *Nancy Mckeon*
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are ya?