View Full Version : "House on Haunted Hil" (The Division style)


Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan
05-30-2003, 07:03 PM
This is a new fan-fic. by me and *Nancy McKeon* I did the writing and *Nancy McKeon* came up with a few idea's. She's been GREAT and I'm proud to be working on this with her! Thanks a million *Nancy McKeon*! :clap: Anyway, this story is kinda long, but enjoy it!

CHAPTER 1

C.D, Angela, and Magda were sitting at there desk, doing different things, when Captain Kate walked in.
"I have news." She said. "There has been, yet, another murder. This time, in an old house. House on Haunted Hill as most people call it. So, I need two of you to go check it out."
"Me and Jinny will." Magda replyed.

"Me and Jinny will WHAT?!?!" Jinny was very mad when Magda came over and told her the news.
"Jinny, calm down. I'll just tell Cap. that I changed my mind."
"Yeah. And get us both fired!"
"Jin." Said Magda, looking into Jinny's eyes. "Are you still on drugs?"
"That's none of your business!"
Magda knew where Jinny always hid her pills, and so, she serched there... and found some. She walked back into the living room.
"I'm going to call a place to get you some help." Magda said, picking up the phone. Jinny ran over to her, and yanked the phone out of her friends hand.
"No you won't!" Jinny said, placing the phone back into it's cradel. She walked back over to the sofa, and sat down. Magda, then, had an idea.
"Alright, Jin. You take on this job with me, or I'm going to call that place to get you some help."
Jin shot Mag a dirtty look.
"You can't do that! That's black-mail!"
"I'm a cop, so it doesn't really matter what you call it."
Reluctantly, Jinny replyed: "OK! I'll do this case with you."

END OF CHAPTER 1

What do you think so far. Do you want me and *Nancy McKeon* to write chapter 2? :confused:

JDS84
05-30-2003, 07:36 PM
It is great. Post more

*Nancy Mckeon*
05-31-2003, 03:05 PM
Brandon is going camping this weekend so we won't post till around Monday-ish

Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan
06-01-2003, 04:17 PM
Originally posted by *Nancy Mckeon*
Brandon is going camping this weekend so we won't post till around Monday-ish

Thanks, *Nancy McKeon* I'm back. I should post more tomorrow.

Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan
06-02-2003, 12:14 PM
A police car pulled up in the driveway of "House on Haunted Hill", and Magda and Jinny got out. They looked at each other.
"What have you gotten us into?" Jinny asked her partner, giving the the MEANEST look.
Not saying anything back, Magda walked up to the doors of the Haunted House, with Jinny behind her. They pulled open the heavy doors, and went inside.

"Hello?" Wispered Magda. "Anybody here?"
"Oh, sure. Like a ghost is just gonna pop out of the floor and say 'welcome, stranger!' " Jinny replyed walking so close behind Magda, that she was alomst in her shoes. They heard a creak.
"I'm getting the hell out of here!" Jinny shouted, running to the door. But, Magda grabbed Jin's arm.
"Jinny. That was just your foot touching a creaking floorboard."
"Oh. I mean I knew that!"
"Ok. I'm going to look down here, while you look upstairs."
"OK. But I'd better be geting paid BIG for this!"
Jinny walked up the long stair case. But, she stopped, and looked down at Magda.
"If I die, tell Cap. I'm coming back to haunt her... and you!" She continued to walk up the stairs.
Magda rolled her eyes, and walked into the kitchen.

A FEW SECONDS LATER

Magda was looking in the cabnets in the kitchen, when she heard a scream.
"Jinny."
She ran up the stairs, and opened the door where the scream came from. What Magda ate at her insides.
"Oh, my Lord!!"

What do you think? Continue? :confused:

Lisa_Marie_Presley_Fan
06-04-2003, 04:54 AM
Since no one is replying, me and *Nancy McKeon* are closing this thread. Sorry for the trouble.

-Brandon (BlairFan101)

JDS84
06-04-2003, 04:26 PM
I am reading your story. I think it is great.