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Sabrina
12-31-2001, 10:10 PM
ok this is my first fan fiction my mom and miranda gave me some help things of like magda and angela well hope you it tell me what you think here it goes

jinny's apt
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Teddy: Jinny wake up or we will be late.
Jinny: late for what.
Teddy:for work did you forget again.
Jinny: ya sorry what time is it?
Teddy: 7:00 am
Jinny: ok (getting dressed) you where great last night i got to go get magda.
Teddy: OK what time should i come over tonight?
Jinny: Same time as last night

Magda's house
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Ben: Mommy wake up.
Magda: what ok i am awake go get dressed i'll make some panckaes.
Ben: ok
(ding dong)
Magda: Coming!!! (opens door) hey come in.
Ben: Jinny hi
Jinny: hey
Magda: hurry up and eat don't be late for the bus.

Jinny's car
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Magda: What did you do last night?
Jinny: Kiss and hug teddy.

Work
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Cd: Hey Jinny and magda and angela
Jinny: hey
Magda: hey
Angela: hey
Jinny: (walking to her desk)
Teddy: what are you doing after work?
Jinny: might go back to my place and drink a beer.
Teddy: well maybe you want to go out to eat with me.
Jinny: sure
Kate: There was a call that someone was murdered by your apt jinny
Jinny and magda: we are on it.

At the scene
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Jinny: (tallking to another cop) Who was he.
the cop: John Cowell there is finger prints on the knife the murder name is Paul Brown his record says he lives at 2450 south street.

2450 south street
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(ding dong)
Jinny: Are you Paul Brown.
Paul: Ya what can i do for you?
Magda: You are under arrest.
Paul for what?
Magda: Murder of john Cowell.
Paul: Ok i did it i killed him (crying)

Back at there deskes
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Jinny: it is 3:55 pm i got to go bye.
Magda: have fun on your date.
Jinny: oh we will.

hope you like it i will try to think of more tell me what you think. ok bye

InspectorExstead
01-01-2002, 02:49 AM
:happyface
Hey. I like it so far. great start. Post more soon !!!

Sabrina
01-01-2002, 03:26 PM
ok back happy new year :wave: well i will think of more as i write.

At the restrant (sorry can't spell today)
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Teddy:hi (kiss)
Jinny: hi (kiss)
Teddy: what would you like to eat?
Jinny: any thing good.
waiter: may i ofer you some drinks?
Jinny: ya i would like a beer.
Teddy: me to.
waiter: as you wish.
Jinny: do you guys have pizza here?
waiter: yes this is pizza hut?
Jinny: oh.
waiter: what kind would you like?/
Jinny: mushrooms and extra cheese and pepperonis.
teddy: ya and meat.
Jinny:ya meat i have the munchies today.
teddy: i can tell did you take your lunch break.
Jinny: no i had a case.
teddy that might be the resson.

At jinny's apt
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Jinny: you want to come in?
teddy: i can't my parents are coming over tonight to see how i am doing by my self.
Jenny? well ok see you tomorrow.

ok i can't think of any more i will try hope you like it i tryed to make it a little funny. tell me what you think.

Warm & Fuzzy
01-01-2002, 03:27 PM
Great post more@!!!