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BlairW_2
07-31-2001, 08:47 PM
Alright guys, before I begin, I just want you to know that I tried to make this so it would be like a real episode. Okay? Okay..lol, enjoy!

Mysterious Killing - By Cassie D.

The streets of the city were quiet. It was about 11:58 PM, and not many people were
out at the time. The street lights were lit, and practically the only places open were the 24-hour business stores and the bars. And although the city was quiet, the Anchorside Bar and Grill certainly was not. It was packed - at least 24 people just stopping by for a drink and to hang out. And one of those people was Inspector Jinny Extead.

"So how long have ya been drinking?" a man, about 40 years old asked Jinny, who was sitting on the stool next to him.
"Ah, about since I was 11 or so." she replied.
"Young age, did ya ever get caught?" he asked back.
"Nah, my dad really didn't care and my mom died before I started drinking." she said.
"Oh, really?" he asked.
"Yupp." she said.
"So what do ya do?" he asked.
"Inspector. Cop. Whatever you wanna call it." she stated. The man chuckled.
All of the sudden a man in a mask barged into the bar, pointing a gun.
"Alright I don't want no one to move!! If you move you get it!" he yelled.
"Holy crap.." Jinny said stunned. All of the sudden the man who she was sitting next to rose from the seat and approached him.
"Listen why don't you get the h*ll outta here alright?" he yelled.
"I said whoever moves gets it!" the man with the gun replied.
"Well I guess I'll just have to get it don't I??" the man yelled back sarcastically.
"Yeah, you do." he gunman yelled. All of the sudden a bullet shot right into the man's chest. Everyone screamed and gasped. Jinny's heart nearly stopped. The man who she had just been talking to..was killed.

Jinny was unarmed. Since she wasn't on duty, there was no gun with her or weapon. There was nothing she could do but sit and hope he wouldn't shoot anyone else.

"Now I want all the damn money this place has." The gunman insisted.
The man at the cash register quickly pulled all the money out and put it in a small, brown bag. It reminded Jinny of one of those western robbery movies, but this was different. It wasn't western. And it was more than a robbery. It was a shooting.

*I gotta do something*, Jinny thought to herself. The only thing was she didn't wanna get shot herself. So she began to think. So, she did. While the gunman was at the counter, she ran towards him, kicking the gun out of his hands, sliding on the floor. Everyone gasped again and the gunman toppled on Jinny. "Someone friggen call the cops!!!" Jinny said, while being wrestled by the gunman. So, a woman ran from her position and outsite the door. She ran to the nearest payphone and called the police.

"Someone get the gun and run while I got him!" Jinny yelled as she continued restraining him. So a man grabbed the gun and ran outsite with it. "Damn you!" The gunman yelled. The man, outsite ran to the bridge and threw the gun over it. "You little.." the gunman says. He then got loose. He punched Jinny, leaving her lying on the floor. Jinny toppled over him again, however, causing the perfect restrainment.

All of the sudden the cops arrived, grabbing the man. They handcuffed him, handed the money which was on the floor back to the man at the counter, and took him out. The paramedics had then arrived and picked up the man who was killed’s body. They put it on a bag, knowing he was dead.

Okay, I gotta go..what do you think of it so far?


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--C (Cassie)

My two role models are Lisa Whelchel and Lisa Vidal.

Come to my Division Webpage at: http://www.the-division-webpage.cityslide.com

Bang A Gong
07-31-2001, 09:00 PM
Can't wait for more.

JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo
07-31-2001, 09:29 PM
greeeeeat!!!!

Jinnyis#1
07-31-2001, 10:03 PM
great, cassie! http://www.sitcomsonline.com/ubb/smile.gif write more!

~*~jenn~*~

BlairW_1
07-31-2001, 10:42 PM
Wow, C, that's great! I'm glad ya made me read this! Keep workin on it!

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12-step site is almost ready, it's up, but not running. I got back from Tulsa and OKC, very fun, very VERY hot! It got up to 107, but no prob for me, we only walked for 2 hours... Enough of that, buh-byezies now! :)

~*I am self appointed moderator number 1, along with Cassie - whenever there are fights or bad language, I report it to the proper authorites (TJ or Coily). So please, no fighting.*~

~*Danielle, off topic queen, with my side-kick, sue z q, and trainee Teddys_Angel_Jinny!*~

BlairW_2
08-01-2001, 09:25 AM
Here is some more:

The next day, Jinny walked into the division, seeing Kate seated at her desk and Magda standing next to it.
“Hey guys. Sorry I’m late..I didn’t necessarily have a full nights sleep last night.” Jinny said to them.
“And what do you mean by that?” Kate asked.
“There was a robbery and murder at the Anchorside Bar and Grill”. She respond.
“Oh, I heard about that.” Magda replied.
“Yeah..Well I was there when it happened.” Jinny said.
“What?! You were?!” Magda asked.
“Yeah..I was. The guy who was killed was talking to me before it happened.” Jinny said.
“What was he saying?” Kate asked suspiciously.
“Ah nothing important.” Jinny responded.
“So you were a witness?” Magda tried to state.
“A perfect one.” Jinny said. “And believe me, being the witness was NOT a pretty sight. Especially when the dude got killed.” She continued.
“Well there’s lots of things in life we don’t wanna see Jinny. But we gotta.” Kate said as she sorted papers on her desk.
“Kate can I ask you a question?” Jinny asked.
“Shoot.” Kate responded.
“How come you think you’re perfect? You have an explanation to everything, don’t you? And you always seem to think its right no matter what anyone else says.” Jinny stated.
“Guys, I don’t wanna get into this so..um..I’ll talk to ya later.” Magda said as she left.

“Jinny I don’t always think I am right. It’s just that I’ve been around longer than you and I’ve had more experiences. I’m trying to teach you.” She said.
Jinny chuckled. “I don’t need any teaching. I’ll find out things by myself, thank you.” She said.
“Whatever you say.” Kate said, and continued to do her paper work.

Later that day, Angela was walking on the sidewalk to the division. All of the sudden, a man came out in front of her and grabbed her. She screamed and the man put his hand over her mouth and pulled her into an alley.

“I want your money. Now. The man said. He was wearing blue jeans and a white shirt. He had black hair put to the side and had brown eyes.
“I don’t have any money!” Angela explained. She was unarmed and not on duty.
“Don’t gimme that. I want it now or there’s no way in hell you’re getting out of this alley. I may not have a weapon but I can fight.
“Listen I’m a cop and-“
“I don’t really give that you’re a cop!” he yelled.
“Well I do.” She said. She then quickly ran past him, as he tried grabbing her but missed. She ran in the sidewalk and looked around for the nearest building. She noticed he was still chasing her and ran into a local store.
“Manager! Manager you need to call the police a man is chasing me!” She said. All of the sudden the man wripped through the door and ran to chase Angela. Angela screamed and all of the sudden, CD bursted through the door pointing a gun at the man.
“I saw you chase her and couldn’t refuse to not pull my gun out. I want you to put your hands in the air.
The man put his hands in the air as CD handcuffed him. She put him in the police car and signaled from Angela to come to the station with her.

“Oh..sorry for the disturbance.” Angela said to the manager of the store.

“He nearly tried to kill me without any weapons..with his arms and legs.” Angela said to Kate.
Angela turned to CD. “Thank you. If you weren’t there then..”
“No prob.” CD said as she smiled. All of the sudden Jinny came in.
“Dammit all!” Jinny yelled. “The man who was caught last night at the bar escaped.
“Yeah, well guess what happened to me.” Angela said. “Some man threw me in a alley and practically beat me to the ground. CD was there and got him for me though.”
“Are you serious?” Jinny asked.
“Yes, I am.” Angela said.
“Wait..I suddenly got a little idea.” CD said.
“If some guy robbed a bar and killed someone last night, and a guy escaped from jail, and another guy tried to hurt Angela, then…what if it’s the same guy?” CD continued.

All the girls in the room stared at each other, thinking of the possisibilies..

Well, how’d you like it? I will put more up soon!!


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--C (Cassie)

My two role models are Lisa Whelchel and Lisa Vidal.

I luv *Nsync!!

ISmellFine
08-01-2001, 01:24 PM
OMG this is really good!!!

NewsiesGurl229
08-01-2001, 01:49 PM
Lovin it!

BlairW_2
08-01-2001, 02:41 PM
Here is a little more, sorry I didn't write that much though *oh, and thanks for the great comments! :-)*:

"Do you really think its the same person?" Magda asked.
"I do." Kate said sternly.
"Well if Kate thinks it then I guess everyone has to because Kate is always right." Jinny responded sarcastically.
"Extead if your going to be responding to my words in that manner then I suggest you leave because I am not going to put up with you." Kate said as the others watched.
Jinny glared. "Fine. Ya know what, Fine. I'll leave and you can be the way you wanna without my comments." Jinny said as she left.
"Kate, you yell at her for her comments? Well that wasn't the nicest thing to say on the block." Magda said.
They all just stared at each other.

Jinny walked out of the division with her gun and badge, as if she was ready to go on an assignment. She continued walking down the street when all of the sudden a car skidded on the road. She was about to run to it and pull it over when all of the sudden the car came skidding into the sidewalk, hitting Jinny and knocking her over...

"So I guess we better tell everyone." Angela said.
"That it was the same guy? We can't do that." Kate said.
"Well its obvious, why cant we?" Magda asked.
"Yes its obvious but we need proof. Not just two attacks and a guy escaping from police custody.
"Plus what good'll it do? The guys in jail now. I saw him be put in it." CD assured them.
"Well..." Kate said.

All of the sudden an ambulence was heard. Practically everyone in the division ran out to see what it was.

"Oh my gosh.." Magda said.

They all were stunned. Jinny had been hit by a car and was being strapped onto a stretcher.

All four of them ran to the ambulence.

"Excuse me! We're good friends of Jinny could we please come in the ambulence?" Angela asked.
"Only one person." The paramedic said.
"I'll go." said Magda as she jumped in the back.

The other four ran to Kate's car, where they were ready to follow along. The driver who hit Jinny was being questioned, and Jinny's ambulence drove off...

Sorry I didn't write alot, I have to go eat. Howd you like it though?



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--C (Cassie)

My two role models are Lisa Whelchel and Lisa Vidal.

I luv *Nsync!!

jo_24
08-01-2001, 02:53 PM
great!

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"You can take the girl out of the Bronx, but you can't take the Bronx out of the girl."

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Teddy: Be honest with me, not my parents!

Jinny: All right, fine. You want honesty? Why don't you let me tell you a little bit about my family? See, I never really never had a birthday party unless of course you wanna count my 15th, when my father showed up for cake, plastered in his underwear! Oh... yeah, by the way, my mom couldn't make it that year either because, well, sadly, six months earlier she BLEW HER BRAINS OUT!!!!!

Teddy:God, Jinny

Jinny: As for my brother, ugh... yeah, John... see, he just doesn't like you unless your American, white, and straight... and for me... a few weeks ago when uh... I had that nut case after me... yeah, I had to make a little list, of all the guys that I've slept with in the last two years. I couldn't remember some of their names.

Teddy: Stop.

Jinny: Ya know what? THIS IS WHO I AM, THIS IS MY FAMILY!!!! Come on, it's your turn. You go ahead, flash that all-American, prep school, choir boy smile and you tell me that it doesn't matter... it doesn't change anything... Yeah, that's what I thought!


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"Basically people are who people are. You're born, you die, you're pretty much the same person. All the rest is just window dressing."~Jinny Exstead

Nancy is Slammin'!

JoJoJoJoJoJoJoJoJo
08-01-2001, 10:46 PM
More!!!!

NewsiesGurl229
08-02-2001, 03:30 PM
Me love it!!! Me love it!!!

NancyMcKeonFan8976
08-03-2001, 04:23 PM
OMG, i love it...please continue!!!

NancyMcKeonFan8976
08-08-2001, 07:32 PM
plz do more. i really am enjoying this!

NewsiesGurl229
08-08-2001, 08:12 PM
C'mon girl, why are you making us suffer???