Captain: Magda since Peter's sick Take Jinny and go the drug store at the corner of Pine and Maple There's a guy there that is holding the place up. He's armed and dangerous. Be careful.
Jinny: we're on it.
(Later at the drug store)
Man: Shut-up and give me your money.
Jinny: SFPD Drop your weapon and put your hands in the air.
Man: (Turns and points the gun at Jinny)
Jinny: Don't try it I'll shoot.
(He drops his gun)
Magda: Jinny don't hurt him...He dropped his weapon. Just arrest him and throw him in jail.
Jinny: No. He did enough damage to this place already.
Magda: Jinny no!!!!
(Magda jumps in front of the guy right as Jinny pulls the triger.)
Jinny: Magda!!!!! (She arrests the guy and calls 911 then she calls the captain to tell her what happened)

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YESS!!!!! MOOOOORE!

YES!!!! It is great!!! Go on, go on!!! Pleazzz

(Hospital Jinny is a wreck all the other girls are there trying to comfort her.)
CD: Jinny it's alright you didn't mean to.
Angela: Jinny shut-up she'll be just fine.
Jinny: I feel so guilty. Oh god Ben. (She starts to sob)
CD: (Yelling) OH GREAT ANGEALA, ARE YOU TRYING TO MAKE THIS WORSE OR SOMETHIN!?!?
Angela: No Jinny I'm sorry.
(A doctor enters the waiting room)
Doctor: Magda Remirez?
Captain: Yes. How is she?
Doctor: Well she is stable but...
Jinny: But what?
Doctor: She is in a coma. There is really nothing else that we cas do right now.
Jinny: Oh my God...What about Ben?
Captain: Someone should notify Magda's mom and she and Ben can come out here.
Angela: I'll call her.
(The doctor walks out again)
Doctor: (Sighs) Is any of Ms. Remirez's Imediate family here?
Jinny: No what happened?
Doctor: She's slipping. We can't do much.
Jinny: Oh my god!!!!!!

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Pleazzz write more!!! I am on the edge of my seat!!!

(Station, Jinny is sobbing while everyone else is trying to calm her down and is waitng for news)
Captain: God I wonder if she's alright.
CD: Me too. Jinny it's okay shhhh. She'll be fine.
(Magda's mom and son walk in)
Ben: Where's mom what happened to her?
Magda's mom: Is she okay?
Jinny: We...(Jinny breaks out crying)
CD: We don't know yet. All we know is what we knew when we left, Magda is slipping and there's not much they can do.
(All of a sudden the Captains phone rings)
Captain: McCafferty...yes well okay. Yes, well thank-you. Yes Bye.
Jinny: So?
Angela: Captain was that the hospital?
Captain: Yes it was...CD will you please escprt Jinny outside and come back in. We'll tell her later. Take Ben with you. Now that she's back...Magda's a little worse, her cances of surviving are less that 10%. Whatever you do don't tell Jinny girls you know she is convinced that this is her fault. So don'r make it any worse on her.
Angela: Sure Captain.

Okay so I know nothing happened last time so I'll try to finsh this up today. If you are really emotional you may not want to finis this.
(Station, Girls wondering what's going to happen to Magda)
Jinny: So, How is she?
Angela: Ummmm, Well she's...
CD: (Interrupts her) she only has a well it's less than a 10% cance of her survivng.
Jinny: What this is all my fault I did this to her. Oh my God, Magda I'm sorry.
Captain: Jinny what's wrong? You guys didn't tell her did you?
Angala: CD told her. Sorry.
CD: She asked I think that Jinny has every right to know. Magda is her best friend. Captain, one other thing is Jinny going to get in trouble?
Captain: Angela, CD come in my office. I don't know I'm not because I don't know exactly what happened. I think that he was getting ready to shoot her and when she threatened he dropped his weapon. Jinny was scared and shot, Magda didn't want him to die and jumped in front of him. So no not unless Magda presses charges.
(Later that day, at the hospital the doctor walks out)
Jinny: Is she (Gulps) okay?
Doctor: (shakes his head no) She only has a few hours, She is not awake and she is on a respirator. Do you want to release her form life support or go in and see her?
Magda's mom: We would like to go in and see her. I'll go first. Come on Ben.
Ben: Where are we going?
(They walk in the room. Ben starts to cry)
Magda's mom: I know you probaly can't hear me but AHHHHHHHHHHHH (Magda was moving around in bed. A doctor walks in)
Doctor: Wat happened?
Magda's mom: She started to move.
Doctor: What? She is she. Yes she came out of a coma. Aright continue your visit.
Magda's mom: Sweetheart are you okay?
Magda: What where am I? What happened?
Ben: Mommy is that you?
Magda: Yes it is papi. I love you.
Ben: I love you too.
(All of a sudden the rest of them bome barging in. All except Jinny)
Magda: Hi you guys. Where's Jinny?
CD: In the hall crying, she feels guilty for what she did to you.
Magda: Can I talk to her alone you guys? Please.
Angela: Sure we'll go get her.
Captain: Hey Jinny MAgda wants to see you...alone.
Magda: Jinny? How are you?
Jinny: Fine? You? (All of a sudden magda was just laying there lifeless. The only sound was the sound of the heart monitor with the sound of Magda with no Heartbeat)
Doctor: I'm sorry
Jinny: Is she?
Doctor: Yes.
(In the hall)
Captain: Jinny your crying, there's something wrong.
CD: What is it?
Jinny: She's...(She starts to sob, Jinny walks over to CD and buries her head in her shoulder) She's dead.
Ben: What, is my mom?
Magda's Mom: Yes she is.


~The End~
So how was it?

[This message has been edited by Exstead (edited 03-27-2001).]

Wow.. *Sniffels* sad... But very good!
~Jessica

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So things change your born, you move on, you die-thats life!- Jo
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Jinny: And little red blew the big bad wolf's big hairy butt to smitheriens!
Magna: Thanks alot Jinny..
Jinny:And they all lived happliy ever after..
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ C.D: Why don't you let me talk to her? Jinny: What's that about!? C.D: Jinny, She just needs a little coddling right now.. (leaves) Jinny: I can "Coddle"
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"Buddy, I got PMS and a Gun, Any questions?"- Jinny Exstead

OMG!!! That is soooo sad!!! ARe you going to make a continuing story about what happens to Jinny and Ben? I lov eit!!

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Jinny: She's got a bug up her a$$ for me!

Jo: Uh..in a minuete your gonna have flared teeth.

(Jo falls down while ballroom dance practice in the living room)
Mrs. Garrett: Jo, do u want soup?

Computer: Good Afternoon
Jo: How would you know...you've been turned off all day.

OOOHH its so sad, make a fan fic about jinny adopting ben or something like that

Yes, do an adoption ff!!! That would be cool!

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Jinny: She's got a bug up her a$$ for me!

Jo: Uh..in a minuete your gonna have flared teeth.

(Jo falls down while ballroom dance practice in the living room)
Mrs. Garrett: Jo, do u want soup?

Computer: Good Afternoon
Jo: How would you know...you've been turned off all day.

OMG, that was awesome! It was really neat to see the way you developed it! PLZ tell me that you're going to make a sequel to this, it's too good to leave like that! (Am I brilliant, or what? hehee, a lil Blair 4 ya!) I cried soooooo much! I need to keep tissues next to my computer, this is the third story I've cried on 2day!

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