Finally finished this song today, Overall I would give it 3/5, I think the chorus is good but the rhythm of the verses are kinda overused and common :lol:
Anyways, if you want to, you can download it and listen to it and leave some feedback/comments/criticism. :)



http://www.sendspace.com/file/mbnoyb

:wave:

(boy are the smurftractors in for a treat :p)

I think it's cool you're doing this, but you're just asking them to pick a fight with you. Obviously you people have some bad blood between you, and I felt kind of sorry for you when they jumped all over you in the last thread, but comments like that are only begging them to pick on you some more. Don't bring it on yourself and then start playing the innocent card or else you're going to loose all credibility.

you can't sing.

you can't sing.

Write your song and sing it and upload it for us, than we'll make the final determination on who "cant" sing.

keep practicing.

the lyrics are horrid.

but i've heard worse.

keep practicing.

the lyrics are horrid.

but i've heard worse.


I agree, writing good lyrics takes a long time, not to mention a professional :nod:

Write your song and sing it and upload it for us, than we'll make the final determination on who "cant" sing.


I can't and thats why i'd never make an ass of myself and do it and post it on the internet. You asked for criticism...

I can't and thats why i'd never make an ass of myself and do it and post it on the internet. You asked for criticism...

I've had a lot of friends tell me they like my voice! I've gotten parts in quite a few musical pieces in choir last year and I also got into the talent show this year for the song WHISKEY LULLABY, duet with my friend Amy.

WHISKEY LULLABY, duet with my friend Amy.ASomething to make them drunk and sleepy?

I THINK HE CAN SING.

you can't sing.
lol

I THINK HE CAN SING.
I think Paris Hilton sings better

I think Paris Hilton sings better

Well, from the words of Ashlee:

****

...and thats not the "F" word.

well you DID ask for criticism, so no need to be a vagina about it because someone is doing something you asked them to do.

well you DID ask for criticism, so no need to be a vagina about it because someone is doing something you asked them to do.

But its kinda mean to say it flat out "you suck" :(

wait until you get out into the real world. if one little comment on the internet bothers you, get ready to **** your pants once you deal with people in the corporate world.

wait until you get out into the real world. if one little comment on the internet bothers you, get ready to **** your pants once you deal with people in the corporate world.

He's only saying it to be mean, he's a member of the "smurftractors who hate Travis" gang.

you're my favorite girl! you really really got it goin' on.

you're my favorite girl! you really really got it goin' on.

har har

Oh mylanta, you are my woman.

wait until you get out into the real world. if one little comment on the internet bothers you, get ready to **** your pants once you deal with people in the corporate world.
No ****. They'll eat you alive.

Well, from the words of Ashlee:

****

...and thats not the "F" word.

huh?

He's only saying it to be mean, he's a member of the "smurftractors who hate Travis" gang.
I dont even know wtf a smurftractor is. if i wanted to be mean i'd say what i was really thinking.

I dont even know wtf a smurftractor is. if i wanted to be mean i'd say what i was really thinking.
hello my hero.

Just keep at it, and don't let anyone bring you down. I agree that the lyrics aren't great, but I think your voice is really good. As Mel said, just keep practicing, and work hard on putting together good lyrics, and I honestly think you'll have something good going. I wish you the best!! :)

Do I have to sign up? .....because I'm already on Myspace and I couldn't really manage to handle another "'Space" thing!!!

wait until you get out into the real world. if one little comment on the internet bothers you, get ready to **** your pants once you deal with people in the corporate world.
:nod:

Just keep at it, and don't let anyone bring you down. I agree that the lyrics aren't great, but I think your voice is really good. As Mel said, just keep practicing, and work hard on putting together good lyrics, and I honestly think you'll have something good going. I wish you the best!! :)

Good advice. :)

I dont even know wtf a smurftractor is. if i wanted to be mean i'd say what i was really thinking.
lol....

Just keep at it, and don't let anyone bring you down. I agree that the lyrics aren't great, but I think your voice is really good. As Mel said, just keep practicing, and work hard on putting together good lyrics, and I honestly think you'll have something good going. I wish you the best!! :)

I agree with Little Mel. I downloaded it before and listened to it, and I'm listening to it right now.